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I liked this cute little story. It could be a picture book if it isn't already.
I guess you may have heard by now the since it has @07 that the beginning would be better as five short sentences instead of what you have.
Well what a pleasant surprise. I loved this article. It was quite enlightening. I was going to answer yes. Guess I will. Yes.
But only on the bridge of it's nose. My Dad's cousin lived forty-years with the government mules. He loved them and said they were the best pack animals for carrying supplies up to the look-outs.
Hi Penhandle:
Well on the Genre(s) you selected "other" and none none
It read like that too. I can't tell what it is either. Maybe fiction???
I had to reread the piece several times. There are spelling and grammatical errors. In the first paragraph you typed one however; I think you meant …"on"
I love dogs too. Good luck and keep writing.
If this is the beginning of a story, you may want to write it from the view point of the dog. Just an idea.
I really liked the story. It feels well polished. but what did it have to do with the prompt?
I liked the twist at the end and as a good story should it made me want to read more.
Contest prompt: A black fog crept along the ground almost as if it were alive. 1030 words.
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