|Hi! Sorry for the low review but here are my reasons:
1. Your choice of words, grammar, and punctuation was lacking. I wasn't really scared.
2. There was no real emotion. When you write, try to tell us what you hear, see, smell, taste, and feel. Try using all your senses.
I had bruises from my head to toes. (Bruises covered every inch of my body). Blood dripping like water from a kept on faucet (Blood flowed from me like an open faucet). It was a miracle that I had found a way out. A way out of the scariest room I had seen (It was a miracle that I escaped. Escaped death). A room with four walls and dark. To dark. I had never seen the beast that took me but I knew it was a beast. (Locked that dark room for days, I was convinced I was going to die). Nothing could penetrate that darkness, except for the beast's breath).
Here I just added my OPINION in parentheses. Please don't take it as though I'm ragging on your work. I'm just trying to help you capture your audience. I'd go back and reread this story and I'm sure you'll notice where you misspelled words, dropped them altogether and didn't finish your thoughts. You're intent was great! You just need to execute it a little better.