|Good write Leslie,
I really like the imagery and the story portayed. The only thing I would suggest for input would be;
1. put a comma after the first "people" in 2nd line.
2. perhaps change "stretch of sidewalk" to sand, dirt, something of that nature.
For high school this is a good piece of writing. Just polish it up a little if you want, or see what others say. Keep pushin' the pen from what comes within!
Frank, aka Thaddeus Buxton Winthrop