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Review of Free  
Review by Nada
Rated: E | (4.5)
I chose this because my husband practices guitar daily, and is always asking me for lyrics.

We just returned from visiting some remote places, and this is exactly how we felt! We hoped to feel as free in this paradise we went to, and like your words, "we relished the ecstasy". This was very soothing, thank you! It is a marvelous world we live in, and I am happy to have found the emotions of your words too!

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Review by Nada
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear B,

This is a great poem, full of the longing and truths of this day. I doubt the memory of her will be lost to you...my own brother died and I haven't forgotten yet and it has been decades.

Your writing is so touching. Thank you for sharing this.

Truly,

Nada
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Review of Son.  
Review by Nada
Rated: E | (4.5)
Having one son is difficult, I know. I find much wisdom in your words.

This was a delight to find, well written and easy to read.
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Review by Nada
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is so good, especially after reading so many books which tell stories of how it was....thinking "those were some days". To think about stockings to pantyhose to now...my goodness.

I have been to Manchester...though it was not as long ago as you wrote!
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Review of My "To Do" List  
Review by Nada
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
You made me laugh!

I really have no constructive criticisms of your writing. It seems clear to me you have taken editing quite seriously. I really enjoyed the dialogue, it seemed very real and at times I forgot I was reading. The characters seemed to be fleshed out so well! I "heard" their voices in my head. Well done.

I can nitpick yet choose not to. I am flattered you ask me to review this, and happy to do it for...NADA!

Thanks for a great beginning to what would not be a great day! Hah!!

Truly,
Nada
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Review of On Mother's Day  
Review by Nada
Rated: E | (4.5)
So very true. I wish you a happy Mother's day!
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for entry "Keeping Score
Review by Nada
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So great to find you here. Always a great read!!
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Review of Remember  
Review by Nada
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Christina.

I found this to be very poignant. I know how difficult it can be to revisit painful things. I hope this has helped you to move on. Well written!

Fondly,
Nada
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Review by Nada
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is undeniably one of the most interesting and well written blogs here. There are glimpses of characters which would be difficult to imagine giving the saying, "Reality is stranger than fiction" real legs.
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Review of For Lance  
Review by Nada
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I'm just visiting Ken's place, thinking about all of the men from my life that no longer walk among us in body. Bless you Ken and Lance. This poem was written the day after my husband died...and now Ken is running with him.

*Heart*
Sheila
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Review of What's in a tune  
Review by Nada
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi,

I am returning the review you were kind enough to do for me.

I understand the point of this small essay, and the simplicity of the message is important.

Having said this, there are a few things I found disconcerting (about the writing part):

1. This piece needs more editing, try not to have so many unnecessary words, like: "that", which is often just a filler word, as is "and".
2. Mentioning Brahm's Lullaby in the opening referral would have made the piece instantly familiar to most readers.
3. The lack of necessary punctuation in many sentences.
4. You wrote, "Having recently had a Grandson at the hospital, you quickly remember how simple an individual shows up at the birth." I trust you mean the newborn, but it is unclear, it may well have been you.

I'd be happy to come back and review it again when edited. Loved the analogy, just needs more work.

Truly,
Sheila

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Review of On getting older  
Review by Nada
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!

Having just turned 60...cough...sputter...I enjoyed your take on it, even though I can see you flew past it already.

"Late Middle Age" Yep, I'll go for that. Thanks for an entertaining and well written read in the comedy newsletter. I had one in too...when I thought 55 was old. *Laugh*

Truly,
Sheila
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Review of Because  
Review by Nada
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wow, what a story. I didn't find it clumsy, but real. You do such complex, interesting young people. I'm in awe. Thank you. I read it on your freebie, bigger print, lol.

Great characters and lessons. Bravo!
*Heart*
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Review by Nada
Rated: E | (5.0)
I absolutely loved this. It is so flowing and honest, it moved me. My mother buried my brother, and took his daughter as her own, even adopting her. Your Mimi was from Kansas, so was my mother. Mine passed away four years ago. I hope the speech I made was so beautiful.

Well done. I respect you.

Truly,
Nada
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Review by Nada
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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This is a fascinating story and a wonderful idea to use it for your future generations. I love your storytelling, you are a natural at it! The following suggestions are my opinion, as I read the story. I stopped making suggestions after the third paragraph for two reasons. The first; because I wanted to enjoy the story, and the second because I know if you go back and read it out loud, you'll see how the natural flow will dictate the punctuation.

The second sentence needs to be clarified. It reads rough without a comma or dropping the word "today".

The last sentence in the second paragraph needs a comma taken out and replaced with a period. Making it two sentences would make it much smoother to read.

The third paragraph should have a semi-colon after the word "woods". You could place a comma after the word cotton.
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Review by Nada
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Sarah,

What can one say? He is the vilest and most abhorred man to many of us, thanks to your stunning revelations. This piece belongs in a major newspaper in every civilized nation.

Excellent and quite deserving of everything...a Pulitzer is not out of the question if it is submitted.

BRAVO and my heart goes out to your country.

Love,
Sheila
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Review of Blog Grievences  
Review by Nada
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Tor,

I thought I might laugh at your peeves, but you hit the nail on the head with all three of your points. I do however, find that some successful novels are filled with vulgar words. That is called expression of free speech. I/we don't have to agree with it, but it is a fact of life, sadly.

As a blogger you provide a good example of the things we should do, and not what we shouldn't do. To me, that goes further in promoting a good blog. You lead, by example.

Very good job.

Sincerely,
Nada
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Review by Nada
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Vivacious,

Thank you for your entries to the contest! I always look forward to reading what you have written.

This was a most comprehensive essay on why you blog, impressive. I found myself nodding along with each point you so aptly made.

I can't find any glaring errors with your writing, nor with your observations. You did a very fine job, you make me proud to know you.

I wish you the best!

Sincerely,
Nada
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Review by Nada
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Tor,

Thank you again for such a great entry! I'm laughing with you here. I know that you are going to be a published writer, hopefully in our lifetimes. I guess GP's aren't enough pay to enable you to elevate your lifestyle, but the satisfaction of making us a little happier, sadder, wiser or giving us some of yourself will have to do, most times!

I nitpick about using capital letters, but I won't. I enjoyed this piece, your levity with such a serious thing for a writer has not escaped me.

Good luck with all of your endeavors!

Sincerely,
Nada
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Review by Nada
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dear Tor,
Thank you for entering the contest! I also need to thank you again for being such a strong supporter of blogging, and this contest, in particular. Through your selfless efforts it is VERY successful.

As usual, your writing is a beautiful expression of the unique man who has taken blogging to new heights.

I agree with you, blogging is tough, rewarding work. You have taught us all so much, from how to check "stats" to how we should respect the views of others.

Keep on blogging and making us laugh, cry or think. We are all richer by clicking onto your blogs!

I think everyone is a winner, tough choices made tougher by friendships.

My picky points?

1. "feed-back" doesn't need to be hyphenated.
2. There should be a comma after "Furthermore".
3. "Whether we are rich or poor, white, black, brown or yellow, we share one thing in common; our love of the written word and our need to communicate those words with others." Isn't that more than "one" thing in common?

Good luck my friend,
Nada

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Review by Nada
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I remember bottles of milk. I loved the use of "darksome", so very descriptive. Making the fridge such a scary place, and done very effectively in a short descriptive poem is brilliant, not to mention the surprise ending!

Good one!

Nada
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Review by Nada
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Dear Rod,
You have an easy, conversational style in this piece which I think is outstanding. You've come up with some great descriptive teminologies for the old and tired ways we are used to seeing when it comes to the "s" word. For example: "There was plenty of sheetriding during that period." What a great term. Then there's "There were things like "eight page bibles," little books of graphic cartoons that showed explicit stuff." I'd be willing to bet there's at least one, if not two generations who never heard of this. "Playing Marco Polo under a skirt" had me laughing outloud, I's so forgotten this term! I'm sure your musings on the topic will have quite afew heads nodding in agreement, and it is important that these so called surveys be put into their proper perspective, which you have done with candor and humor. It's very refreshingly honest.
I also like that you used euphanisms of today, "duh" couldn't be more appropriate!
As your last line stated, "It's the nature of things." The best part is that this "nature of things" also can last a lifetime!!!
Thank you for sharing this, a fine piece of writing.
Sincerely,
Nada
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Review by Nada
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a marvelous piece! I love it when seemingly ordinary people find a way to make themselves more memorable, in a positive way! It's wonderful to have a writer as you are, pluck them out of the crowd and let others know about them! Maybe you should do a newsletter or column with these little gems, on a regular basis! Great job!
Truly,
Nada
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