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This is a lovely poem, DB. I found it intriguing and wonderful reading. It's a compelling belief that the Celtic priests who inhabited the British Isles in 1000 BC held, that trees are imbued with spirits "infinite knowledge" and wisdom, symbolic of the cycle of life. Ogma, the Celtic god of poetry and eloquence,clearly inspired this beautiful ethereal poem.
The Celtic Zodiac is filled with wonderful images. I've always loved the idea that cranes form letters with legs as they fly. Your poem is beautifully rooted in this belief in nature which is at the heart of Celtic tradition. If indeed the Ash is the tree of March, the poem is especially apt.
Your poem is clearly rooted in Irish tradition, where the ash tree is still revered, sacred in its elegance.
"From its strong branches, I fashion my spears and wands." You've created an eloquent piece here, DB. It's a fitting tribute to this "tree of the universe" I found it a spirited poem, delicately told by a poet who gives us some insight into glorious Celtic traditions with her poetry.
The poem flows especially well in the 3rd, 4th and 5th stanzas. These read a bit more smoothly than the others, but this may have been intentional.
I especially enjoyed:
"Past, present and the future or if you wish to know Confusion, Balance and Creative force to bestow, Upon my soul as weaver of magic amongst the trees. Speaking all invocations of rhyming verses in threes."
You will decide if these are useful.
1) You write:
"The Oak tree as is the Hawthorn tree be its lifelong mates." The line seems a bit convoluted. See if you
2)" Past, present and the future or if you want to know
Confusion, Balance, and Creative force to bestow." You need to add a few commas after "present" and after "future" and "know". Also, I wondered if you intended that Confusion, Balance and Creative should be capitalized ? If so, then perhaps the word "force"
(Creative Force) should be too.
3) Did you mean to say: "Elaborate this tree of circumstance" ? Or did you want to say: Celebrate this tree of circumstance" ?
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem, DB. I appreciate the push you've given me over time to learn more about Celtic traditions-- all beautiful, most rooted in nature. It's a treat to read a poem that pushes us past what is familiar.
Best of luck with the contest !
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