|Hi there Mravce ! "Gasp!" your being reviewed by a newbie! I am reviewing
General Impressions I love your view of Christmas Eve day and evening. What a joy you had growing up with those kind of memories to draw from. I think that is the real magic of Christmas is the joyful memories we all get to remember. Of the love and the giving, thank you so very much for sharing a beautiful day with us.
Favorite Parts My favorite part was: Shhh, listen a snowflake just touched the ground! The season of joy has arrived!! Quick, come over here, look outside it is magical! Christmas lights are lighting up as dusk tip-toes its way around the town. And these beautiful white crystals are dancing away to the Christmas carols, uniting as they reach a surface, piling up, giving everything a round shape. Come see how the night glows, come smell the smoke from the chimneys, come take my hand and let the snow crunch beneath your feet. Can you hear it, can you hear Santa's sleigh? Can you hear the bells, his Ho Ho Ho's, can you smell the cookies? Isn't it beautiful, all this happiness, gratefulness and selflessness? Let the magic take you away, let it play with you like kids with red cheeks on a cold winter's day. Let it hit you like a snowball out of nowhere, let it splash all over you, let it go down your back and make your spine shiver! And then let it warm you up like a crispy fireplace, a gulp of hot chocolate, a fuzzy blanket, a pair of worn gloves...
Plot I felt the plot of your writing was the feelings and memories we all have on Christmas Eve and your did a beautiful job describing it.
Characters There was only one character and it was you describing your memories. Great job on showing us your great memories.
Setting You described the town and house hold well. You were bring the view outside my window of the snowy fields alive. Very nicely done!
Dialog It was all dialog I really enjoyed the ending:
Shhh, listen a wish just flew by! The season of dreams has arrived! Quick come over here, look inside it is peaceful!! Children are tucked in as their minds behind their closed eyes make their way to wonderland. And these bundles of thoughts are carried away by the eagerness of tomorrow morning, wrapping up as they float all the way beneath the Christmas tree, putting a smile on every child's face. Come see how the lights go off, come look at heads sinking in pillows, come climb in bed and let the covers engulf your body. Can you remember it, can you remember the letter to Santa? Can you remember your childhood wish, your favorite toy, can you taste the warm milk? Isn't it beautiful, all this carelessness, warmth and innocence? Let the peacefulness take you away, let it make you sleepy like a bedtime story from your mother's lips. Let it hug you like your favorite teddy bear, let it press on you tightly, let it feel soft and fluffy and make you feel safe. And then let it make you fall into deep sleep like the last spark in the fireplace, the filament in the last Christmas light, a baby bear deep in its cave, an impatient child on Christmas' eve...
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Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece. Please keep on writing more things just like this!!!
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