A very polite, protective and considerate demon Sebastian turned out to be too. You did an excellent job of telling the story right from the start - who can't relate to those forgotten keys! There was a sense of both strangeness and urgency as you moved the story on, revealing what had been happening inside the shop.
An enjoyable read.
This is such a refreshing and empowering write - I wish it could be shared with young girls the world over. There's a lightness to it, with the rain and the puddles, but also more serious topics, such as speaking out, staying true to yourself, remembering that your life is yours. You also picked up on empathy, something that I think has become very undervalued these days.
An excellent poem!
There might be a lot of truth to this poem, for who does want to hear of other's troubles, but it is this hiding, this bottling up of emotions that leads to so many mental health crisis. It's like there is a stigma in feeling bad, that we should feel guilty about it.
This certainly touched a nerve!
Wow! Well this poem was more than slightly personally relatable to me. I liked the use of the compass, one that seems to be broken. Being physically lost, I think, is far easier to remedy than when the mind seems lose its way. And that last line - a perfect ending!
This is really an excellent piece of poetry that captures that moment just before total darkness so well. I love the idea of going outside to bid everything out there, including the weeds, a good night. 'An empty headed moon' has to be my favorite part.
This is a very thought-provoking piece of poetry. There is certainly something about a locked door that stands between you and something that you don't know. There was an almost philosophical feel to a lot of this which I enjoyed. Some doors. I guess, are better turned away from.
This was a fantastic ending to what I know was a bit of a wild journey. I loved reading about all your different characters, in their interactions with the author. Did you win? I can't remember, but going by this piece you certainly deserved one of the prizes. A lovely Carrollesque feel to this piece.
I liked the choice of using a blue font in a story focusing on sadness, that was an additional effect, although the story did a great job of showing that emotion all by itself. Clearly Alyssa has drunk a lot of whisky - not good when you're sad as it makes things worse. You don't specify what went wrong between her and Tom, and again that worked in the stories favor. I'm guessing that within the next day or two she would be answering his calls.
First off, thanks for the introduction to another poetic form; this one seems to make for an appealing presentation. You certainly do an excellent job in describing the sunshine that signals the start of another day, and the goodbye that means to dreams.
I really enjoyed this flash fiction tale written from the point of view of a snake. I liked the way the hunger became less once he was embarking on a bit of an adventure; and also the way that snake and person both seemed equally shocked at the sight of each other. The snake sure didn't seem put off.
This certainly had a lot of emotional impact. A terrible accident leading to a very hard decision to make, and so much grief. It's not an easy decision to let your child become a donor, but that transplant gave life to another that would otherwise have died.
Sorrow, sadness, grief and gratitude so very well expressed.
So many different types of fire, all strikingly captured. I loved the idea of a feral car - wild, unpredictable as it burns. The lightning strike was also very effectively done. They were perhaps the most dramatic, while the other two were more emotional, dealing with grief and love.
A very impressive piece of poetry.
First off, thanks for providing the striking image. Excellent descriptions of life, twisted into being not much more than a living death. What I especially liked was the mention of skulls and how they no longer instill fear as we all face so many different monsters that look just like us.
Excellent poetry.
The thing that struck me about this was how kind the boyfriend was, so devoted to the blind girl that he gave her his sight. And how did she repay him - broke the promise that she had made to spend her life with him. It's one of those times when kindness just works out wrong.
I actually found this quite emotional.
There was some excellent descriptions of Kelly, becoming aware that he had been buried, was in fact dead. All those memories, I guess, gave him the strength to go in search of Sharon and take her back with him to the grave. Luckily for her, Pedro was paying attention.
I enjoyed the read.
This was a story that brought more than one smile. There is always a Mathew and a Tyler in every school, I guess, but it's not often that they ended up becoming real friends. This actually did a good job of showing the downside of both types of behavior. There's half a bracket just after: 'I grabbed his shoulder and pulled him forward' that I don't think you intended to be there, but other than that the writing and presentation was faultless.
Wow, well this was fantastic flash fiction writing. Right from the beginning you built up a lot of tension and did not let up with the momentum of the action. It's not often that the twist in the tale comes as a complete surprise but it certainly did in this case!
I enjoyed reading this piece. It is certainly true that television shows were less outrageous or offensive, and there was a clear distinction between family viewing time and not. Not being from the US most of the shows are unfamiliar to me; all except Lassie. And sometimes that dog still gets to appear.
This was a well-paced creepy tale. You opened with some excellent scene setting and character background. And you did a good job of showing how those personality changes became more extreme, with the sleep-walking. However, it wasn't until you revealed just how extreme that the full force of the horror was realized.
I know exactly the kind of person that you are referring to in this piece. Absolute intolerance of anything that they do not personally agree with, and outright condemnation to go with it. Ever willing to go on the attack, but you could be sure they'd not take it themselves.
Excellent rhyming and use of the prompt words.
I lovely poem that really captures the emotional cost of having a family member in one of the armed forces when a war is going on. There was a nice touch on arrival when father and daughter's eyes met and his teared up. Oh, and some excellent rhyming too.
This is the second poem that I've read written by you today, and it is just as impressive. I loved the way you used the top of the hill as a place where more inspirational and positive thoughts were had, only coming back down to the normal grey. Accept yourself as who you are seems to be the message, but there's also a nod at how difficult that is to do.
So many different emotions portrayed in this poem, but my overall impression was one of melancholy. A relationship that has ended, I think, that has left differences unresolved letting both guilt and anger come in to play. There's a suggestion too of self-imposed isolation, a withdrawing from social contact.
Very impressive.
This poem is a real feast for the senses, even if it does leave a bit of a bad taste. Excellent descriptions of both sights and smells. 'The tropical night is deep in its song of beautiful misery' really sums up the tone of the piece. A very impressive write.
Now I've got to admit I really enjoyed this poem. You caught a lot of the conflict of thoughts, of feelings, of certainties and insecurities. The mostly short lines was a good way to convey the rush ever forwards. The constant conflict between being yourself, or of trying to be what another wants you to be was also very well shown.
Excellent work.
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