I don’t know if this poem is for everyone lily, but I thoroughly enjoyed it. It definitely needs editing; the grammatical mistakes in it are too distracting to the reader.
In the description you need to change the a to an an - It’s an interesting poem of how…
All of the No ones and Everyones need to be changed to No one’s and Everyone’s. (It’s possessive, as in it’s no one’s fault).
In the fourth stanza you misspell everyone as everyone.
In the last stanza you use a small I for yourself (So I come to the question…). I assume that this was not a mistake, but a style choice that so many of you youngsters are rolling with nowadays. If so then ignore this “correction.”
I like the voice of this poem. It is clear to me that the author of this poem is not yet an adult. I think that is one of the poems strengths.
It’s good to know that at least some people from the next generation are wondering/concerned about the world’s fate.
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