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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Very nice poem. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This is a lovely poem about what you are grateful for in life. Not many people these days think about what they have and give thanks for all they have. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. The lines I liked were:
And to the Veterans of uncounted wars.
Whose sacrifices protect my freedom.
These lines really touched a heart cord for me cause of all the Veterans and also the men and woman who are still over seas fighting for our country and our freedom. Brought a tear to my eyes because of all the men and woman we have lost. I pray that all the troops overseas come home safely. People take things for granted alot and don't know how good they have it. Kudos to the author. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation:I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This is such a sad, heartbreaking poem of soldiers who have PTSD. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. I cannot imagine going through such a difficult life. My heart goes out to every soldier who has and is now going through this. I pray for all the soldiers who are home and for those who are still overseas fighting for our country. Great poem. Keep Writing And Rock On!!!
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Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm:The rhythm is pretty good as well as the flow.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is pretty good which makes for good readability. Good originality in this poem.
Suggestions: None.
Overall:Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. You could feel the pain of someone in love that just can not escape the darkness or the dispare for the person he or she is in love with. Nice poem. Keep Writing And Rock On!!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.Good just the way it is.
Overall: Good poem. This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. What a sad, sad poem and situation that person is in. The lines that touched me the most were:
You may be blood, but that blood runs cold
So what's the point in doing what I'm told?
I loved you daddy, but daddy dear,
You'll never give a damn about me, and that is what I fear
These lines sent a chill down my spine and brought a tear to my eyes, because to think that a child whether young or older would think that her father never gave a damn about that person. How sad to be that person and to think that of one of their parent. Truly heart wrenching. Good Poem, one in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Good poem, I would have liked to read alittle bit more. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation:I could find no spelling or grammar errors. but I did find a few punctuation errors. Like on the first stanza, it should be like this: Says the silliest things,
Has her daddy's eyes and her momma's mouth.
It should be like this through out your whole poem.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall:Cute little poem. My favorite line was: Swears she will always be my little girl. I can totally relate to that, because I have only one daughter and she will be my little girl no matter how old she gets. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation:I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm:The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Good poem. Very nice imagination, The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good.
Suggestions: My only suggestion would be is to change the form of the poem, because it was kind of distracting, having to keep scrolling down. I would put it into this form and center it in the middle. This way it flows better and also makes it more attractive on the eyes:
See the world behind my eye,
Where oceans bleed and humans die.
In this land of midnight sky,
I fear my soul shall never fly.
Overall: All in all a very good poem. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. The lines I liked the best were:
Your love the only light for me,
Burning my chains setting me free.
Alone in the dark I'll never be'
Because you are the light for me.
Four beautiful lines. You could tell it came from the heart. All in all good poem. Keep Writing and Rock On!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Good just the way it is.
Overall: You have painted a lovely picture about what it is going to be like when we die. This poem I believe is very inspirational. Good Poem. Kudos to the author. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
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Title:The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: Spelling and grammar, I could find no mistakes. But punctuation, I have put a few suggestions below.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good.
Suggestions: I did not care for all the words being in little letters. Also did not like the form of the poem. It was really distracting to read by having it all in lower cased letters. The form I also did not care for. My suggestion would be and this is only my opinion is to do it like this:
I try to look but i cant see,
I try to touch but i cant feel.
I try to talk but i cant speak',
Numb is all i know.
In my opinion by doing this, it makes the poem flow better and makes for and easier read.
Overall: All in all a good poem. You showed great depth of emotion in this poem through each and every line. You could tell that this person is in a great deal of pain. And sounds like no one is listening to that person. I think with those few suggestions I have given to you, that this could be an excellent poem. Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Good choice of words which makes
for easy readability.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: Nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. There is such deep depth of emotion and feeling in every line and every phrase which you have written. You could just feel the hurt inside of the person who gave her baby away and now regrets it. And even though she is now in a nursing home she still can not stop thinking about that baby she gave away. I usually have a favorite line or two, by Oh my gosh, the whole poem just touched me and brought me to tears. Excellent poem. One in which I would highly recommend. Hats of to the author. Keep Writing and Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.Good just the way it is.
Overall:Oh my gosh, this poem brought tears to my eyes. You paint a lovely picture of someone who is gone, but will always still be with us. Good depth of feeling with and between each line. What lines I liked best were:
I am with you
For I have not gone far
My spirit is evrywhere
No matter what distance you are
These lines really struck a cord with me because, I feel my mother ever where. Her body may not still be here, but I know that her soul is still with me, and that she watches over me constantly. It is also a very inspirational. This poem gives hope to people that have lost a loved one, that they are still around them. Excellent poem Monto, one in which I would highly recommend. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Good just the way it is.
Overall: You paint a lovely picture about love and how it should be. I also get the sense of someone who is in love. Nice originality of this poem. The poem draws the reader in from the first sentence and holds the reader's attention throughout. Good depth of emotion and You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. My favorite lines were:
Love has many powers, but most of all love
gave me you and
for that I love, love
Found these lines to be very touching to the heart. Good poem Milly!! Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The poem which flows fairly easily.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Good choice of words which
makes for easy readability. Nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This is a beautiful poem which you have written to your best friend. There is such lovely depth of emotion and feeling in every line and every phrase which you have written. It seems to be a lovely friendship and you are fortunate to have such a friend. My favorite lines were:
This friend of mine,
Who always had the time,
And would give me a smile
These three lines are very endearing and that is how a friendship should be. You showed your emotion for your friend very well. I have a Best Friend also that has been there for me through thick and thin. I'm so thankful to God that he sent her to me. It is so Great having a Best Friend that you can always count on. Good Job!!! Keep Writing and Rock On!!!1
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is good which makes for easy readability. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: This is a beautiful poem which you have written about an angel and how they live amongest us all each and everyday. There is such lovely depth of emotion and feeling in every line and every phrase which you have written. The lines I liked the best were:
They strive to live - fight the battles of angry men with blood lust.
My children,
My friends,
My brothers and sisters,
"An Angel is upon us."
Wow, this really hit an emotional cord to think that there might be Angels that are with us all the time. We can not see them but they are there. Truly inspirational. Good poem,one in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author. Good Job!! Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: This is such a sad, heartbreaking poem of a woman who has loved a man from the start but he does not recognize her love for him. She has stood by him through thick and thin, but still does not recognize her. The poem draws the reader in from the very beginning and holds the reader's attention throughout. The lines that touched me the most were:
You left me in pieces for her,
You can not fix me anymore, you are no longer my hearts cure
These two lines brought a tear to my eye,because he left the woman that truly loved him for someone else, but yet this person realizes that he is not worth having and she will no loner be hurt by this person because it is tearing her up in side. Your emotions came through very well in this poem. Very Good poem. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is good which makes for easy readability. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You painted a very cute and humorous poem of someone going to bed. The line I liked best was:
To yawn, stretch or fart, I am forever yours.
This line really made me laugh hard. Because my husband is always farting in bed. Thanks for giving me my laugh for the day!!! : ) Excellent poem, one in which I would recommend. My hat goes off to the author. Keep Writing and Rock On!!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. I like it just the way is is.
Overall: This poem is a sad poem about someone who is regretting saying something to someone, that now they can not take back. Your depth of remorse comes through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. The lines that touched me the most were: I never should
have said
I wish you would die
Our last good bye
These four lines brought much emotion to me and brought a tear to my eyes because, now a days people do not pay attention to what they are saying, if that person should just up and die, they can never erase the hurt it has caused that person. I hope this poem inspires everyone to really think about they say before the say it. All in and a excellent poem, one in which I would highly recommend. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!1
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, being centered on the page and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: The only suggestion I have is to capitalize the letters. It would make for an easier read.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. What a sad, sad poem and situation that person is in. With the lines: glass shatters on to my skin
aching cold body
laying there gone
These three lines really touched me and brought a tear to my eye. To think that someone is that unhappy in life that they would do such a thing. You conveyed the emotion of pain very well in this poem. One in which I would recommend. Kudos to the author. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title:A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme:Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. It also made for an easy read.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: I found this poem to be very dark and sad. I can not even imagine having other voices in my head. You conveyed the pain very well. Good poem, one in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author. Keep on Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title:A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm:The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: What a lovely poem. You paint a lovely picture of how someone feels being in a band. You have conveyed your emotions very well on how it feels to be in a band. The poem really stuck a cord with me because it brought back memories of when my children where in a school band.Keep Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. Rhythm is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This poem is a sad poem filled with deep emotion. You can tell by what the writer has written that he has been deeply affected and by this relationship. Your writing is clear and to the point, full of pain and anguish.Good depth of feelings which grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. All in all a good poem. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Good poem. The sentence that touched me the most was: Your heart's my favorite song. It affected me because it was a Lovely depth of feeling. You express the love you have for this person very well. Keep Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: The only errors I found were in the 3rd and 6th line, you forget to capitalize I'll.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Good poem, The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. You can tell by what the writer has written that she has deeply deeply in love with this man and would do anything for him. Lovely depth of feeling. You expressed the love you have for this man very well.
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: This poem is a sad poem about someone who is questioning her love why he is hurting her. The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. You can tell by what the writer has written that she has been deeply affected by this relationship and that she loves her partner dearly and can not get over the fact that this might be the final good-bye. All in all a very good poem. Kudos to the author. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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