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Title: Fits the content well.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good and the flow is nicely done.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: The only error or suggestion I have is in the 4th stanza, last line, there should be a period at the end of the word "night".
Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You've painted lovely pictures in the reader's mind at the Rainbow bird and how winter was near. Lovely idea and great imagery in this piece. All in all good poem.
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: All in all a sweet little poem. It's clear that you wrote from your heart.. But, I would have like to read a little bit more about your angel. My favorite lines were:
your beauty has no equal,
you're beautiful the way you are,
Beautiful words I must say.
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Title: Good title and it caught my interest.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: Found no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good and the flow is nice
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Good just the way it is.
Overall: All in all a good poem. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This is such a sad, heartbreaking poem of someone living with Paranoia. This poem brought a tear to my eye. I can not even begin to imagine living a life with Paranoia. It just must be awful. You have my respect. Why? Because you're using a positive means (writing) of dealing with Paranoia. Good poem and good job.
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation:I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm:
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Good just the way it is.
Overall: All in all a good poem. I really enjoy the imagery of it. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. I could especially picture the reaper landing in the garbage. You're use of imagery makes the poem and gives it heart. Very nice originality and Very nice imagination, too. My favorite lines was:
Sad he was when the festivity ended,
as on the garbage heap the reaper landed.
I could just picture this in my mind and had to chuckle. Thanks for giving me my laugh for the day. All in all a good poem.
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Title: Good title and it caught my interest.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good and the flow is nicely done.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions:None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: All in all good poem. Very nice originality. Very nice imagination, too. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The lines I liked best were:
Love the body you're in,
because you won't be in it long
I liked these lines because now a days there is to much on how a young woman should look. They should love their bodies the way the are. You conveyed this feeling in this poem very well. Nice job and good poem!!!
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Title: Great title and it caught my interest.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Followed consistently throughout with pretty good rhythm and flow. The form is very nice, being centered on the page. The poem draws the reader in from the very beginning and holds the reader's attention throughout.
Suggestions:None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. I can really identify with this poem. Depression is one of the worse things to live with. I know of what you speak of in your poem. The imagery of this poem just brought a tear to my eyes because, I felt as if you were speaking of my life. Deep expression of emotion. Powerful. The feelings evoked in this poem is one of the best parts and also one of the worst parts. You brought forth your emotions and I felt as if I was feeling them myself. I am so sorry though that you have to suffer this way. Absolutely pulled on my heartstrings....I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair. You truly were wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem. Overall, a pleasure to read this emotional,heartfelt poem, a winner for me. This certainly deserves a Excellent poem, one in which I would highly recommend. Just Awesome!! Kudos to the author and good job!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: No errors found.,
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Good just the way it is.
Overall: A wonderful poem. It's nice to see such loving words here. It puts the reader in to a happy place for a while and that is great. It shows clearly here the the love that you have for him and how proud you are of your son, too. I'm sure your son is pleased to have you as a parent. I'm sure your son would love to read this, he would be very Proud of you. Great Job and Excellent poem, one in which I would highly recommend!! Kudos to the author!!!
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm:The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Your rhyming lines were crisp, clean and to the point
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: Nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. You took a painful moment and turned it into something positive by first off saying the refrigerator was almost empty, there is no bird, to I foraged through the cupboard, found more to eat. You also put your faith in God that things were going to turn out just fine. The lines I liked best were:
I praise God for His compassion and for His love,
for true thanksgiving blessings come from above!
Truly inspirational lines here. Absolutely pulled on my heartstrings... Thank you for sharing this heart-warming moment with me. Your poem was wonderful. The poem truly deserves a Great poem!! My hat goes off to the author!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is pretty good as well as the flow. The form is very nice, being centered on the page, which I think looks attractive. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.
Rhyme: Your rhyming lines were crisp, clean and to the point
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is good which makes for good readability. Nice originality of this poem. The poem draws the reader in from the first sentence and holds the reader's attention throughout. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done.
Suggestions:None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: Nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. You painted a lovely picture of your first love and how you felt for the first time falling in love. This is a beautiful, well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. It brought me back to thinking about my first love. Good depth of feelings. Love is felt here. Subtle passion as well. The picture really helped tell the story. Just loved it!!! Excellent poem, one in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I found it very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. A wonderful message.
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is good which makes for good readability. Nice originality of this poem. The poem draws the reader in from the first sentence and holds the reader's attention throughout.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: This is a poem about your grand daughter. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. Tthis reminds me of a love letter which you wrote to grand daughter, and in essence, I believe this is what this really is. The reader can tell that you love your grand daughter very much and that the two of you had a very special relationship. Absolutely pulled on my heartstrings...because I too would love to have a grand daughter or son someday, but my daughter is just not ready yet. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy. Excellent poem one in which I would highly recommend. Good Job!! Kudos to the author!!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation:I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm:The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Very nice imagination. You have painted a very lovely picture of how the seasons change. I like the tone and subject of you piece. It gets the reader thinking about the changes in the season and how the circle of life comes around again and again. Just Beautiful. I really enjoy the imagery of it. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. My favorite lines were:
For the circle of life's gone round again
and I hope and pray it will never end.
You wrapped that up with lovely words and made this poetry worth to read. I think you nailed it. I give you a big BRAVO! Beautiful poem, one in which I would recommend. Kudos to the author!!!
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is good which makes for good readability. Nice originality of this poem. The poem draws the reader in from the first sentence and holds the reader's attention throughout.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. I to struggle with depression. I could feel the pain in every line and in between. I felt as if you were writing about me. That is how Powerful this poem has struck me. It is not an easy life when you live with depression all the time. I know of what you speak of. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. Absolutely pulled on my heartstrings...brought a tear to my eyes, I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair. I have been there many a time. The lines I liked best were:
And hope that maybe tomorrow
She won't be so full of sorrow.
I liked these lines because it showed that you are still hoping that things will get better for you. If this is a true story, you are in my prayers. I pray that God will answer your prayers.... I know it must have been hard for you to write about this, but maybe this will help someone else out, and hope that there will be a better tomorrow. You truly wore you heart on your sleeve in this poem. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions:None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: Wow, what can I say... This Thanksgiving poem is just beautiful. To give thanks to God for you new baby boy. A beautiful poem written straight from the heart that I hope many people have a chance to read and enjoy. Your poem was wonderful. Good job!! Kudos to the auther!!!
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: All in all, good poem. Deep expression of emotion. Powerful. The line I liked the best was:
My tan BDU represents none other than the red, the white, and the blue
This line was very patriotic!!
I also liked how you ended your poem with a salute to all the different Military Units. Good job!!
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The form and flow are good, as is the rhythm.
Word Choice:Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Kind of a sad poem of a soldier away from his wife and kids. What a sad, sad poem and situation that person does not know why he is still fighting in the desert. Good poem!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: Nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. You painted a lovely picture of being at the beach. You did this so well, I felt as if I was there. This is a beautiful, well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. Great Job!! Just loved it. Kudos to the author!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is pretty good as well as the flow.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. A very sad situation for a teenager to have to go through while in school. So sad that there is so much peer pressure on children these days. I could feel the pain of this person through out the poem. It brought a tear to my eyes to think that a teenager is going through such an awful time while they are in school and that they are at their breaking point because of all the peer pressure. If this is a true story, you are in my prayers. I'm sure as time goes on, things will get better for you. Excellent poem on peer pressure. One in which I would recommend!! Good Job!!
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None. Good the way it is.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. It really struck a cord with me, because I was abused by my husband and memories of that came back to me. It brought tears to my eyes. I do understand why the person stays with the abuser, it is very hard for someone to get out of that kind of situation. It is also hard telling people why you would stay with that abuser, but, they do not understand if they have never been in that kind of situation. I could related to every line of this poem, since I have lived through that situation. If this is a true story, you have my condolences and I will keep you in my prayers. Also, I know it was very hard for you to have written about this. I usually pick a line or two lines that strikes a cord with me, but this whole poem struck a cord deep down inside of me. Good poem, one in which I would highly recommend. Good Job!! Kudos to the author.
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is good which makes for good readability. Nice originality of this poem. The poem draws the reader in from the first sentence and holds the reader's attention throughout. There is a nice rhythm and flow to the poem itself. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This is such a sad,heartbreaking poem of someone who is living with Alzheimer’s. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. I cannot imagine going through such a difficult life for the person with Alzheimer's or the family. Must be such a tough thing to see a loved one go through. If this is a real story my sincere prayers go out to you and your family. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. Good Job and Kudos to the author. One in which I would highly recommend!!!
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is pretty good as well as the flow.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is pretty good which makes for good readability.
Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.
Overall: Nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. There is such deep depth of emotion and feeling in every line and every phrase which you have written. It really made me feel as if I was there flying around the universe without a care in the world. My favorite lines were:
Far into the sky
Bringing in the most delightful
Of images from within
oh..Its a beautiful life
You brought forth your emotions and I felt as if I was feeling them myself. This is a beautiful, well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures for the reader. This is masterful poetic writing. Love it! One in which I would highly recommend!! Kudos to the author!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem, and I am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! Kudos to the author!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: This is a poem about your beloved mother, who is now deceased and in Heaven with her Creator. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. Again, this reminds me of a love letter which you wrote to your mother, and in essence, I believe this is what this really is. The reader can tell that you loved your mother very much and that the two of you had a very special relationship. I know that sometimes this can be a rare commodity indeed, so please consider yourself lucky. I know many people who have not had this kind of relationship with their mothers.I too,was blessed to have a special relationship with my mother, so understand of those things of which you speak. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely.
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Title: The title is great and perfect for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is pretty good as well as the flow. The form is very nice, being centered on the page, which I think looks attractive. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.
Word Choice: Good assonance and alliteration. Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.
Suggestions: None.
Overall: You brought forth your emotions and I felt as if I was feeling them myself. Absolutely pulled on my heartstrings...It brought a tear to my eyes....I did feel the agony of the depths of deepest loss you have gone through. I to have lost my mother and I could feel your pain in every line. The lines I could really relate to are: Remembering is easy, Lord.
I do it everyday,
But there's an ache within my heart
That never goes away.
There is not a day that goes by that I do not think of my beautiful mother who was also my best friend. My condolences and prayers go out to you. This is is a beautiful, well written poem that conjures up wonderful pictures of your mother and how much you loved her for the reader. Your mother would be very proud of this tribute to her. I give you a big BRAVO! You nailed it, Congrats!!!
Keep Writing And Rock On!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that these are only my opinions, and they are respectfully given to you. You may do with them as you wish-- only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The form is nice, being centered on the page, which is attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer. Rhythm is good.
Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.
Suggestions: The only suggests I have is to maybe not highlight the word "Wish" in light blue. It is kind of distracting when reading it. Also, in the last sentence you have: "Just lonely dishes." I think I would try and find another word instead, it just does not make any sense to me. Maybe you could change it to " Just lonely bridges." But, only a suggestion.
Overall: This poem is a very sad and emotional one. You conveyed the pain in this poem very well. The feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. What a sad, sad poem about a person loving someone and that other person does not love them back. And how that person longs for that other person and is willing to give that person up because they love that person so much. Very touching indeed!!!! Nice poem!!
Keep Writing And Rock On!!!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Have a Nice Day!!!
Janice
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