Review of: The Luck of the Irish (E)
By: RubyRedDragon
Item # 1977606
Review By: express
I enjoyed your story!
Keep Writing!
Your story reminded me to be proud of my Irish heritage. Also, even today we need to enjoy life's simple pleasures.
My favorite aspect of the "Luck of the Irish" is that it is full of love for life.
Your story flowed naturally.I think your story is well written. I did not see any grammatical or typographical errors. I would have liked to see a more detailed character sketch of both James and Lana. Overall your story is excellent! Keep Writing!
express
Review of: Pug and Bug: Red Riding Pug (E)
By: Isaia C. Basye
Item #
Review By: express
Well Done! Keep Writing!
Your manuscript is delightful. Children will like it very much! My favorite that you wrote a modern version of "Little Red Riding Hood." A newer version and still completely different.
I did not find any grammatical errors, or misspellings. You planned this story very well. I think the illustrations you have suggested will support your story line. Great for a discussion with elementary classes. The pictures will be so cute too! Be careful to describe this storyline so that a youngster understands and still exercises his imagination.
Review of:A Horse Named Sierra (E)
By: Whitemorn
Item # 1954499
Review By: express
This poem is just beautiful! Your poem flows and has a nice rhythmic pace.
I did not see any grammatical errors.
My favorite part is offering Sierra some clover. Friendship with animals is so special. "A Horse Named Sierra" captures that unspoken sense that horses have. I think they are very intuitive about people.
KEEP WRITING! Your poem is an inspiration for me!
Review of: The Burden of Law
By: Whitemorn
Item # 1976558
Review by: express
Substance testing is very serious. I think it should be used in several ways; accidents, unusual behavior, deaths. I also believe people in general should be trusted. My favorite part of your article is your quote by Henry L. Stimson.
Your article is well written. I did not see any grammatical errors. You wrote logical argument.
Keep Writing!
Review of: Freedom (E)
By: JBurtonR
Item # 1986732
This my definition of freedom and how I view it.
Review By: express
I like your article on freedom very much. I agree with your definition. I am extremely grateful for the freedom I have had during my life. Your article reminds me not to take my freedom for-granted. My favorite part; you mentioned taking responsibility for our freedom. Just like love freedom is an action word.
Keep Writing!
I did not observe any grammatical errors.
Your article is well written.
I think your article could be longer. I like your quote about choice too.
Keep Writing!
express
Review of: Fun With Felines [E]
Item # 1990243
By: JA Buxton
Review By: express
Keep Writing!
I liked your article very much. I am an animal lover too.
What a dreadful experience. I don't even like to think about moving!
Pets are easily confused and stressed with the whole moving experience. It is wonderful how quickly they adjust to their new surroundings.
I did not see any grammatical errors or typographical mistakes. Your description of your moving experience was excellent.
I believe your article is well written and organized.
I enjoyed reading your article.
Keep Writing!
express
Review of: Concentrated Smile
A touch of happiness can always shine
By; MattC
Item # 1984475
Review by: express
I enjoyed your poem very much. "Concentrated Smile" touched me because we need to make an effort to be happy sometimes. I felt encouraged by your poem.My favorite aspect is the contrast between happiness and sadness.Keep Writing!
I think it could be a little longer.
Review of: Imagination
Imagination has no ends
by: writeon
Item number# 1979527
Review by: express
Enjoy your imagination! It is a true gift that is unique to you and you alone. Imagination is a powerful force which is unique to each person.
KEEP WRITING!
You have a lot of talent!
I did not observe any technical issues.
My favorite aspect of your article is your describing our physical senses and their interaction with imagination.
I enjoyed your article very much!
KEEP WRITING!
Stretch your imagination to the max! Thank God for the wonderful gift of imagination.
A poem that flows as nicely as " Underneah" is a pleasure to read. My favorite parts are the first and last lines. Keep Writing! I liked your poem very much.
I think" Underneath "could be a little longer.
Review of: Time for Retirement [13+]
Writing class assignment related to a commander's decision to retire.
By: Teguettler
Item # 1937361
Review By: express
I like your writing assignment very much! Retirement is definitely something I can relate to. The plot appeals to me. The idea of a fantasy Monarchy is intriguing. Your writing is very well organized and without any grammatical or spelling errors.
Keep Writing!
My favorite aspect of your article is your character development of Hadrian. I think "Time for Retirement "will make a excellent novel.It is very unique.
KEEP WRITING!
Keep the basic story simple.
I enjoyed your article very much!
Review of:Who Is The Master? [E]
By: Spacecat
Item # 1989450
Review By: express
Cat's are very good at getting just what they want. I enjoyed your poem very much!
Keep Writing!
I did not see any grammatical errors.
You captured the mind set of cat perfectly! Which is my favorite aspect poem.
This poem could be longer.
Keep Writing!
Review of: God is good!
By: Found
Item # 1989813
Review by: express
I like your poem. KEEP WRITING!
KEEP WRITING!
Perfect spelling with no grammatical errors.
I like to hear and read about God's love.
Your poem is sweet and simple.
Please write more.
Review of: Home to Some (E)
By: Preston Orrick
Item # 1977957
By: express
Hello Preston you article touched me. Homelessness is a very serious problem. I am glad you wrote about it. My favorite part is how you described Bert. Every homeless person is an individual. Society needs to reach out to people who do not have a home.
I did not see any grammatical or spelling errors.
Your article is well organized. Keep Writing!
I like your writing style.
express
Review of: The Long Wait, Part Two (E)
Rekindling an old flame, an internet relationship.
By: druid
Item # 1908132
Review By: express
Wow! How romantic and suspenseful. Keep Writing!
It is so good! I like the way you capture the page turner effect. I am sure I would not be able to put this story down until finished.
This story is expertly crafted. Keep Writing!
I noticed no grammatical errors or misspellings.
You described the atmosphere beautifully. You mentioned the characters emotions and actions. Where is he from? What do they look like?
I enjoyed Part Two very much! Keep Writing!
I'll be waiting to read some more of your story.
Review of: Flee Harm and Be Strong (E)
Making a choice about what to do when we are afraid
By: drifter
Item # 1976749
Review by: express
I admire your courage! Your article gives me courage to face my fears. Thank-you for that.
I like your writing. KEEP WRITING!
Perfect Grammar an no misspellings.
Please keep writing about facing our fears!
When quoting from the Bible please say which version.
express
Review of: A star's Not Logical (E)
Whether as a player or a fan, sports can be demanding - stay positive.
A poem
By: Tim Chiu
Item # 1931615
Review by: express
Very Nice!
I enjoyed reading your poem about sports and staying positive.
Staying positive is 99% of life's struggle. Your poetic description captured this well.
No grammatical errors or misspellings.
Keep Writing!
Your poem flowed beautifully.
I think you could craft many different poems using different sports.
Keep Writing!
express
Review of: Flashlights of the World (E)
Recounting how Lighthouses began
By: Lynda with a Y
Item #1966385
Review by: express
I learned a great deal about lighthouses from your article. Your article is very well written. Keep Writing!
Lighthouses have are very fascinating. I like the care you used in your research the most. Your article is well planned and organized. I also enjoyed the information about The Wonders of the World.
I did not see any grammatical, typographical, or misspellings.
Remember to include your references and give them credit for information you used in writing your article.
Review of: To The Broken (E)
This is a poem about depression and hope.
By: Silent writer
Item # 1986431
Review by: express
Your poem is beautiful!
A wide range of emotions in your poem. When a poem brings tears to my eyes it's a keeper!
Keep Writing!
No spelling errors or grammatical errors.
I like your inspirational expression.
Your poetry is an inspiration for all of us.
Keep Writing!
I would have enjoyed a longer version very much.
I enjoyed your article very much. No grammatical or spelling errors.
Your work is well organized. I though your description of the storm was excellent.
Keep Writing!
If your article is to be biographical.It needs more biographical details about you.
Keep Writing!
Review of: The Long Wait, Part 1 [+18]
Rekindling of an old flame, an inter-net relationship.
Item # 1908130
By: druid
Review by: express
♥Your chapter very intriguing! I enjoyed it very much! KEEP WRITING!
True love is definitely worth the wait. I could sense his frustration. Your character description is very compelling.
Suspense is expertly built upon. With enough room for further development of your book.
I did not see any grammatical errors or misspellings.
Only one suggestion. Tell your readers that they have not actually met in a later chapter.Finish this wonderful page turner soon. I really want to read this book!
Mortal sins of character development #1 [13+]
written for writocracy blogspot.com. It's meant
to be confrontational, any thoughts?
Item #:1987099
By: Eliacie
Review by: express
Your article is brutally honest. I enjoy coffee very much. I like your article!
Keep Writing!
I agree character development is an ongoing quest for improvement. Do not over-think the process.They are people too! The best characters I have ever thought of reminded me of someone I know.
Review of:2014 HANDy & BRIEF Rules of Procedure
What a remo from a hand or bull might mean circa 2014
by : hooves
Item# 1576345
Review by: express
Well your article is something to neigh about. I say horse feathers to bullies too. I like your humorous dialog about reviews.
KEEP WRITING! Do not keep all your talent in the barn.
I did not observe any typos, grammatical errors
Your approach is encouraging! That is my favorite aspect of your article! I have learned once and again not to take myself too seriously.
Review of: He Still Knows Her Alzheimer's
By: Harry
Item #828217
Review By: express
Alzheimer's is so devastating to patients and their families. My dear Dad died of the disease. I will always remember that I knew him. He did not know me at all of course. Therefore, I felt compelled to review your article.
Your article is extremely well written.
I did not see any typographical or grammatical errors.
My favorite part of your article is when you described the donut selection. It's the little acts of kindness that we forever remember.
I hope that a cure for this terrible disease can be found soon.
Keep Writing!
express
Review of: "Lookout the Moose" [E]
How a young moose got his name. Needs in depth reviews.
By: Old Bear
Item # 1639994
Review By: express
Your story is very enchanting! I think that young readers or listeners will enjoy this story! A instructor could involve children in a discussion about Lookout.
Keep Writing! Keep Writing!
I did not see any typographical errors or grammatical mistakes.
I like to visualize your story with cartoon like pictures. The plot moves quickly and would be very appealing to a young reader.
Time and place worked very well.
Your characters were believable and described wonderfully. I wish it was a little longer.
express
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