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Review of Ghost Rider  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Name of Poem: Ghost Rider
Name of Author: Ledgerdemain

Hello Ledger,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review and rate it. I came across your poem, Ghost Rider, while browsing through your portfolio. I enjoyed reading your poem very much, and I hope you find this feedback useful.

Message/Theme: The message shows the author's feeling towards the moment of death. He describes his/her feelings on the back of a speeding horse being ridden by an invisible individual.

Narrative/Style: The narrative is a poem that shows how swift and cold death can be.
The Style is emotional and personal.

Form/Flow: The form is a four-stanza, four-line (better known as a quatrain) Free Verse poem.
The Flow Follows the author's thoughts.

Tone: The tone expresses the author's feelings concerning death as dark, cold, and frightening.

Mood: The mood represents the author's transference of the feelings of non-resistance, fear, and darkness to the reader.

Imagery/Pace: The imagery used was very effective in the descriptions and showing of feelings. The Reader will be able to feel what the author is displaying.

The pace is smooth, yet forwarding.

Suggestions: I cannot offer any suggestions for improvement. I think this poem is well written and delivers its intended message.
Suggestions:

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Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Name of Shop: The Golden Heart C-note Shop
Name of Ownwer: Geminigem

Hello Geminigem,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review of your C-note Shops.I came across your shop while surfing for this type of WDC member shops to review. I enjoyed browsing through all three of your shops very much, and I hope that you will find this feedback useful.

Overall Opinion: I chose your shop because of the beautiful artmanship you display.You offer a large assortment of C-notes for all occasions. Your ten categories focus on everything from Christmas to Birthdays to Thank yous.

I feel that the prices you ask are very reasonable. Your artistic ability is exceptional and I commend you on it. The C-notes are very beautiful and creative.

What I liked best: I especially liked the first Happy Birthday C-note under the Golden Heart Collection. It is beautiful, happy, and warm.

I do have one question. Do take special orders from the members? I didn't see that you did and I think that it is important for your type of business for people to know that there are shops that help them to express what they feel inside.

Suggestions: I cannot offer any suggestions for improvement. Your work is well done, prices affordable, and deal in a beautiful product.

Keep up the magnificent work,
Kristina


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Review by Chrys O'Shea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Name of C-note Shop: Rising Stars C-note Shops
Name of Owner: Liith

Hello Lilith,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you an "Game of Thrones"  review of your C-note Shops and rate it for review. I enjoyed browsing through both of your shops very much and I hope you find this review useful.

Overall Opinion:
I chose your shop because of the beautiful work you display. You offer a small, but efficient assortment of C-notes focusing on Motivation and Rising Star accomplishments.

The artistic ability performed by Brooklyn is exceptional and I commend her on her talent and choosing her to work with you.
The C-notes are very beautiful and creative. The price you charge is very reasonable.

What I liked best:
I like the C-note "Unique under the Motivational selection. I thought it to be exceptionally beautiful.

Suggestion: Do you take special orders from the members? I find that to be important and helpful for this type of business. It is important for people to be able to express their true feelings. Other than that, I cannot offer any suggestions for improvements. I feel the Shops are well done and your C-notes are impeccable.

Great work and Excellent Topic.

Kristina

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Review of The Chat  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Hello Kiya,

This is Kristina and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review. By surfing through the Family Genre, I came across your story, The Chat. I enjoyed reading it very much, and I hope this review will be helpful.

Overall Impression: I enjoyed this story very much. It caught my attention from the very beginning and held it till the end. You did a very good job building the anticipation up slowly, but steadily. The POV was evenly balanced to make the reader feel like they were there witnessing the conversation.

Plot: This is a story about a family taking a trip together under less desirable circumstances. As Children Will Be Children, the story focuses on the power of control the older sibling has over the younger one and how she obtained it by playing off his imagination to hide her own misdeed.

Style/Mood/Tone: The author's word choice, sentence structure, figurative language, and meaning in text and voice all worked well together.

Scene/Setting: The time, place, and other setting characteristics worked well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area.

Characters: The characters were well-developed and believable.

Dialogue: The dialogue helped establish the scenes' tone and atmosphere. It also revealed the personalities of the characters and advanced the storyline.

Suggestions: I can't offer any suggestions for improvement. I felt the story was well-written.

Write on!

Kristina



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Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Title of Piece: Cure for the Common Coffee
Name of Author: Annette

Hello Annette,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review and rate it. I was given your story by another WDC member. I am very excited about having the opportunity to read and review it. I hope this feedback will be useful for you.

Overall Impression: I enjoyed this story very much. I liked the way it captured my attention from the beginning and held it to the end.

The setting emphasized the story, they were minimal but fit with having a cup of coffee while the story unfolded around him. The kitchen and the coffeeshop.

This piece made me think of how I love coffee while reading it.

Plot: This is a story of a young man who has center his life around coffee, and how that coffee is taking care of him.

Style/Tone: Your word choice, sentence structure, and figurative language were excellent with the descriptions.

Scene/Setting: The place, time and setting characteristics worked well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area.

Characters: Your characters were well-developed and believable.

Dialogue: There was no dialogue, but the third-person omniscient narrator was very good and excellent.

Suggestions: I cannot offer any suggestions for improvement. I think the story was well-written, and the topic was well-developed.

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Review of Jo-Jo the Clown  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello W.D. Wilcox,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review, and I hope you find this feedback useful. I came across your story, Jo-Jo the Clown through another WDC member, and I enjoyed reading your story very much.

Overall: I thought this story was very entertaining. The set-up in the beginning was excellent. It hooks the reader immediately and keeps their attention until the end. The setting was magnificent and accented Jo Jo perfectly. The POV
in third person was very effective with just enough dialogue to balance the story out without losing the reader.

Plot: This story was about who had snapped due to his own failures in life and becoming a clown he was able to gain access into the lives of people like the ones who had hurt him and take revenge.


Style/Tone: The word choices, sentence structure and figurative language were very effective for the descriptions.


Scene/Setting: The time, place and setting characteristics flowed smoothly and worked well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area.


Characters: The characters were well-developed and believable.


Dialogue: The dialogue was well done, authentic and was smooth and easy to follow.


Suggestions: I cannot offer any suggestions because this story was well written.

Write On!
Kristina


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Review of Shipwrecked  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Title of Poem: This poem has no title
Name of Author: Louis Williams

Hello Louis,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review, and I hope this feedback will be useful to you.
I found your poem through another WDC member, and I am grateful I had the opportunity to read it

Overall Impression: I enjoyed this poem very much. I found it flow smoothly and easy to read. I felt its message to be true whether fiction or non-fiction.

Message/Theme: The message expresses the thought though the intentions are honorable, they are not always received well. The author expresses his feelings through an astronaut fighting to survive in an alisn world.

Narrative/Style: The narrative is a small poem that shows the anger, frustration and fear of a man alone in an strange environment.
The style is emotional and personal.

Form/Flow: The form is a 5 4-line stanza, Free Verse poem with a last line of 2 words for emphasis.
The Flow follows the authors thoughts.

Mood/Tone: The mood is fearful, sad and thought provoking.
The Tone is anger, frustration and fear.

Imagery/ Pace:The imagery is effective for the descriptions.
The pace is smooth and filled with thoughts.

Thank you for sharing your poem,
Write On!
Kristina

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Review of Courage  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Amethyst Angel,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review and rate it. I came across your poem, Courage, through another WDC member. I greatly enjoyed reading it, and I hope you find this feedback useful.

Message/Theme: The message shows that true courage is thinking and doing for someone else before yourself. The author describes his/her feelings through people to do for others first.

Narrative/Style: The narrative is a small poem that shows that he/she who gives of him/herself is truly blessed in the end.
The style is emotional and personal.

Form/Flow: The form is a 28 line continuous Free Verse poem.
The flow follows the author's thoughts.

Tone: The tone is appreciative, compassionate, and sentimental.
Mood: The mood is peaceful, refreshing, and warm.

Imagery/Pace: The imagery shows his/her contentment with life - Knowing the investment is worth it
And the good that you do
Will come full circle
Back to you.

The Pace is smooth and filled with thought.

Favorite lines:
Courage is loving like you're not afraid
Giving when you'd rather keep
Taking that leap
Knowing you're in too deep
Going ahead anyway.

Write On!

Kristina

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Review of Collage  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Sumojo,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you a "Game of Thrones"  review and rate it. I came across your poem, Collage while surfing those who maintain black cases. I enjoyed reading it very much and I hope you find this feedback useful.

I thought the imagery was very well done. You did a wonderful job mixing and showing memories and a mother's love. It was easy for me to visualize an elderly mother looking at old photographs of her children with smiling eyes, and remembering a specific memory of each one.

Your word choices and figurative language was very effective. The words flowed smoothly and it was easy to read. I saw no issues with grammar, spelling, and/or punctuation.

The mood produces an emotional warm feeling for the reader while the tone follows the author's thoughts.

Suggestion: I feel that the title, Collage, and brief description don't quite live up to this piece. While it is your piece and you decide what works, I think one of your lines - 'My love, my life' would make a good description to intrigue the reader to click.

I can not offer any suggestions for improvements because I think the poem is well-written.

Write On!

Kristina

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Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lydia,

I am Kristina, and I am here to give you an Anniversary "Game of Thrones"  review and rate it. I cam across your story, The Light at the End of a Tunnel, while surfing those members who are maintaining Black Cases.

I enjoyed reading it very much and I hope you find this review useful.

Overall Impression:
I enjoyed this story very much. It reminded me of my teenage years and our illegal drags at Rocky Point. *Blush* I liked how your story captured my attention from the beginning and held it till the end. Your descriptions of the setting and the first person POV were very effective.

Plot: This is a story about how four teenage boys are lured to a place and killed by previous victims of the same place.

Style/Tone: Your word choices. sentence structure, and figurative language choices were very good and effective.

Scene/Setting: The time, place, and setting characteristics were adequate and worked well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area.

Characters: Your presentation in 1st person was done very well.

Dialogue: There was no dialogue.

Suggestions: I cannot offer any suggestions for change or improvement. I thought the piece was well-written and executed.

Write On!
Kristina

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Review of The Author  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Robert,

Congratulations on your Account Anniversary next month. This is a "Game of Thrones"  review and I am sending it to in honor of your Anniversary.

Positives:

I thought this story was well written. It captured my attention from the beginning and held it to the ending. The ending, I add, was a complete surprise to me. I thought the POV was well done and well balanced with the dialogue. The setting descriptions were very vivid and work very well with time place, and other setting characteristics.

I felt the characters were well developed and believable and your word choice and sentence structure very good. The dialogue was believable and flowed smoothly.

Grammer/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues with Grammer/Spelling or Punction.

I enjoyed the technique of not identifying the where abouts of the book except through the possibilities thought by the author, and I felt it was most effective.

What I liked best were the two librarians, Helen and Slyvia.
I thought your descriptions were very good. They reminded me of the two librarians I have dealings here in my hometown.

Suggestions:
I cannot offer any suggestions for improvement because I feel the piece does not warrant any. Again I thought it was well written.
Kristina

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Review of Throwing Rocks  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!
FaeThorned

I came across your story, Throwing Rocks while surfing Read a Newbie. I enjoyed reading it very much. This is an "Game of Thrones"  review, and I hope you find this a helpful feedback.

Overall Impression:

This story is very entertaining. It was easy to see a young, mischievous boy playing in a massive junkyard, letting his imagination dictate his play, until his fantasy turns to reality. The story was written in 3rd person and you did an excellent job of bringing in dialogue.

The main character, Little Jimmy was written very well. He was excellently developed and believable. The characters of his parents were also believable. You portrayed them as not dirt poor but rather they were able to make a decent living. They are a country folk. The audience is made to feel at home watching this family.


Plot:

The plot follows a young boy left to care for and entertain himself until his parents return. This isn't the first time. He plays his usual games until a meteor crashes with a small alien aboard in his yard.

This plot is well developed and carried out and immediately captured my interest.


Style/Tone:

Actually your style and tone was my favorite. I thought your word choice was very good. It portrayed the characters well and made them even more believable. Your choice of everyday "down home" language was great. I found your word choice easy to relate too. Your sentence structure was very good.


Scene/Setting:

All were very good and worked well together.


Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:

I saw no issues in this area.

Characters:

Very well-created and developed.


Dialogue:

Dialogue was smooth and well-balanced.


Suggestions:

I have none to offer.

What I liked the best was the description of the alien and the very last sentence. *Laugh*


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Review of Thank You CNotes  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Gervic,

This is a "Game of Thrones"  Review.

I chose your shop because I have talked with you previously and have been curious about what is being offered.

My opinion of said C-Note Shop: You have a large assortment of beautiful C-Notes to offer. The six categories of notes, from Animated Get-Well Notes to Painted Birthday Cards, are awesome. I looked through them, and I must confess, I couldn't choose just one favorite, as I liked them all. I am, however, taken with the first Thank you note.
Your artmanship is fantastic and I commend you on it. They are just beautiful.

I have been looking around because I want to send some notes to members at Wdc.

Keep up the great work,

Kristina

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Review of Time in a Bottle  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Name of Story: Time in a Bottle
Name of Author: mama2dasha

Hello, I found your story Time in a Bottle In Browse by Type under short stories. I am so glad that I found it. I enjoyed reading it. I am here to review and rate it, and I hope you find this feedback useful.

Title: The title fits the content of the story.

Positives: I thought you did a great job writing this story. It caught my attention from the beginning and held it to the end. You did a very good job of building up the tension. Keeping the identity of the POV as long as you did was very effective. I was surprised.

Plot: The plot grabbed my attention and held it.

Imagery: You did a great job. It was easy for me to visualize as if I were there.
Characters: Very believable.

Dialogue: Excellent

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area.

Overall, this was an enjoyable story told through the eyes of a wine bottle. I can not offer any suggestions for improvement because the piece does not warrant any. Well done.

Write On!

Kristina

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Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Name of Poem: Flowers of the Field
Name of Author: J. R. Pete

Hello, I came across your poem in Browse by Type under Poetry. I enjoyed reading it. I hope you find this feedback useful.
Overall Impression: I loved this poem. I thought it was very well written. It made feel warm and happy. I also thought it to be very creative when writing the poem, the first letter in each line spelled the title of the poem downward.

Message/Theme: The message is that the cycle of life depends on the balance of nature: the soil nutrients, the rain, the sun, and the bees.

Narrative/Style: The narrative is a small poem that shows how the balance of nature provides the cycle of life for the children of the field—the flowers.

The style is warm and emotional.

Form/flow: The form is a 17-line free verse poem.

The flow follows the author's thoughts and is appreciative.

The mood reflects on the reader as warm and happy.

Imagery/Pace: The imagery was excellent. It is very important for the reader to visualize a field of flowers, all colors, and the bees and rain doing their part.

The pace is smooth, making it easy to follow and read the piece.

My Favorite Line:

Life and regrowth from season to season; from daylight to darkness; from past to present.

Kristina

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Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Title of Story: Whispers of a Ghost: A Hunting Tale
Name of Author: Ifunanya

Hello, I found your story in Browse by Type under Mystery. I enjoyed reading it, and I hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression: I think you have a great storyline and could do so much with it. You could explore your setting more and introduce the house as a character. Is your house an old gothic house? Is the setting in the hills surrounded by trees to give the appearance of a thick forest? This dramatically builds the feeling of eerieness.

Scene/Setting: This feels shallow to me. It would be awesome if you could use more description of the town, the townspeople, and the old house. Make your word choice, time, place, and other setting characteristics work together.

Grammer/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues in this area except for the title. You wrote Hunting. I think you meant Haunting. Forgive me if I am wrong.

Characters: I only met Sarah. Townspeople and Ghosts
were mentioned, but they need to be fleshed out more.

Style/Tone: Try using more figurative language and less big words.

Suggestions: Don't break it down into small writings for a chapter. Use figurative language; let us see who Sarah is. Who were ghosts? Let us see why the townspeople avoided the house like the plague. Did something happen there?

Personal Opinion: You have the start and makings for a great story. With just a few additions and changes, I think it would be awesome.

Kristina

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Review of Mystic Eyes  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Name of Poem: Mystic Eyes
Name of Author: JMW

Hello, I found your poem through the Browse by Genre under Mysteries. I enjoyed reading it, and I hope you find this feedback useful.

Message/Theme: The author is being jilted by someone he is attracted to. His thoughts are directed more to himself. Good word choice delivers the meaning effectively.

Narrative/Style: The narrative is a small poem that tells how someone across the room is teasing him, and he views her presence as a blessing at first and, later, a curse.

Form/flow: The form is sestet.
The flow follows the author's thoughts.

Tone: The author's attitude is soft and wishful at first by the person across the room and, after continuous teasing, becomes hardened.

Mood: the mood makes the reader feel both sorrow and anger.

Imagery/Pace: The imagery is vivid with figurative language.
The pace is smooth.

My Favorite Line:

Your mystic eyes—like fireflies—float through the room like blessings.

I like the sound, the analogy, and the simile to portray it.

I thought it was well written and read smoothly. I saw no issues with spelling or punctuation, so I cannot offer any suggestions for change.

Write On!

Kristina

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Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Zoe, I just visited your port and read Echoes of Tomorrow - Part One. I enjoyed reading it very much. I hope you find this feedback useful.

Overall Impression - I was very impressed with your story. It captured my attention from the start and held it to the end. I thought you described the setting very well, and it was easy to feel the main character, Skylar Arc, hurt and frustrated.

Title: - The title fits the content of the story.

Premise: - Transforming her grief into action, Skylar Arc adopts Nightingale's persona.

Plot: This story's plot is about a young girl grieving over the death of her parents. They were both killed in an explosion that was planned. Their work and their dreams were destroyed. She decided to avenge their deaths by fighting the corruption that had killed them. This plot interested me very much.

Format: The piece is formatted to make it easy to read and understand.

Dialogue: The dialogue flowed very smoothly

Characters: I have only met the main character, Skylar Arc. She is very believable.

Scene/Setting: Both work very well together.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: I saw no issues within this area.

Suggestions: I cannot offer any because the piece does not warrant it. I felt it was very good and well-written.

Write On!

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Kristina

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Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Gervic,

I came across your story Defender of the Everglade Forest in this week's Short Story Newsletter. I enjoyed reading it very much.

You captivated my attention from the beginning and held it to the end. I enjoyed the tension build-up throughout the story. Keeping the identity of intruders hidden until close to the end was very effective. I couldn't wait to see who they were and why they were invading.

I cannot offer any suggestions for improvement because I feel that it does not warrant any; it is very well written.

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Kristina

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Review of I KNOW NOT  
Review by Chrys O'Shea
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

I am Kristina, and I found your poem I Know Not in your port under Please Review My Port. I enjoyed reading it very much. I could feel the loneliness and sadness in your words.

It is very well written.
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Review by Chrys O'Shea
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
         I am Kristina, and I came across your story on the Hub page under Recent Review Requests.

I enjoyed reading it very much. It caught my attention immediately, and the story held my attention to the end.

It was easy for me to relate to the hurt feelings of the young woman and understand the joy and comfort that Cookie provided.

I saw no errors, and I feel the story was well written. The only suggestion I feel compelled to offer is to bring in and focus on one or two specifics on how Cookie pulled the young woman through some dark times.

Good job! *BigSmile*

Write On,

Kristina


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Review by Chrys O'Shea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,
I came across your writing in the 11/15/23 For Authors Newsletter.

I enjoyed it very much. It grabbed my attention right away and held it to the end. The ending surprised and pleased me.

I saw no errors and cannot offer any suggestions for improvement because the piece does not warrant any.

This was very good and well-written.

Write On,
Kristina


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Review by Chrys O'Shea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

I came across your essay Thoughts On The 1830 Indian Removal Act," on the Hub Page. As a Cherokee American (Wolf Clan), I immensely enjoyed reading it. I found it to be entirely accurate and non-biased. The information given was accurately reported.

It was very well-written and in need of no suggestions. I noticed you are new to WDC. Welcome, and I hope to read more of your work.

Write On! *BigSmile*
Kristina


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Review by Chrys O'Shea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi,

If I can stop laughing long enough to get this written. *Laugh**BigSmile**Laugh*

I stopped in your port tonight. I am a people-person and I love to learn about people.
I came across "Chicken Coyote" Anyone? and I loved it. I laughed all the way through. I thought it was very well written as well as on point.
Excellent work! I enjoyed it very much.

Kristina


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for entry "Nature’s swing." 
Review by Chrys O'Shea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi,

I just happen to click on Personify Writing Contest to see what the contest was about. I haven't seen it before. I read your entry for the month of April, Nature's Swing. I thought it exceptionally well written and very good. I could honestly feel the emotional aspect of your entry. I really enjoyed reading it.

Excellent Work! *BigSmile*
Write On!

Kristina
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