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for entry "~ Reminders ~" 
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Warning- I'm working on being a better reviewer. Please bear with me as I learn.

FIRST IMPRESSION: Darn, I think I forgot to enter this today! 🤣
FORM: Yay, it's exactly 24 syllables!
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: I didn't spot any issues.
STYLE/VOICE: I really like how you used the prompt word in a nostalgic way. I can feel how much your parents meant to you.
SUGGESTIONS: This is too great for suggestions.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a lovely little poem. Thank you for sharing your talent and good luck in the contest!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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Review of In the Summertime  
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Warning- I'm working on being a better reviewer. Please bear with me as I learn.

FIRST IMPRESSION: While I'm not a fan of summer, reading about the experiences of others helps me enjoy it without worrying about being turned into a lobster by the sun.
FORM: I'm not sure if you used a form (there are so many variations!) or if this is free verse. Regardless, this is structured well. It moves pretty smoothly from each stanza.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: Yay, I didn't spot any issues!
STYLE/VOICE: The informal tone and whimsical mood fit nicely. You've painted a quaint and relaxed portrait of summer.
SUGGESTIONS: The only thing I can think of is to make a little note citing what form (or free verse) is used and if your poem is for a specific contest. I think it helps reviewers to see where your coming from.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a lovely little poem. Thank you for sharing your talent and keep up the good work!

trying something new


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Review of 68 Minutes  
In affiliation with Under Construction: MHWA  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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I think the reason I like this poem so much is that it's something to which nearly everyone can relate. (Plus, you know, you've got great rhymes and imagery. *Wink*) Seriously though, most people probably don't consider keeping quiet a form of abuse. Especially at a young age. This would be a great poem for elementary children to read or just hear.


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Review of Mother  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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*Heartg* Theme/Subject Matter: Sadly, this a subject with which too many readers will identify. I think you've summed it up well with your title and description. The 13+ rating is also appropriate.

*Heartg* Originality/Creativity: Just because this is a biographical piece doesn't mean you can't get creative with it. Being a familiar subject for many gives you even more reason to add your own style. This reads like a stream of consciousness, which fits a Free Verse form.

*Heartg* Emotion/Impact: This poem evokes a small feeling of sadness. There is room to make even more of an emotional impact. Rip out my heart and smash it with a crowbar!

*Heartg* My Favorite Part: The final two lines. The imagery of verbal abuse physically hurting help the reader see the scene you've written.

*Heartg* My Suggestions: I have 3 suggestions. Feel free to ignore them!

-Dig deeper into those painful memories. Show us how it affected you. For example, after the second line, you use a creative simile.
-The point of view changes from the child to the parent in lines 7-9, then back again with the last two. Perhaps you could signal this switch with quotations, italics, or even by switching the font or color?
-Lines 7 & 8 have good near rhymes at the end. I bet you could add more throughout the poem and give it a bit of rhythm.

*Heartg* Summary: Overall, I think this is a solid foundation. Don't stop now, this definitely has the potential to be better than average!

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for entry "~ Am I A Writer? ~" 
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
First of all, I had no idea this contest existed until I read your entry. Bonus! Although, I may hold off entering until the next round because I think you've got yourself a winner. This blog entry is a relatable, interesting, and inspiring glimpse into your personal life. Trifecta! I didn't notice any grammar, punctuation, or spelling issues to get in the way of first place. Thank you for sharing the beginning of your writing journey!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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Review of Restless Soul  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome to WDC!
Ah, the quest for relaxation- I know it well! Kudos on the hike though, that's a bit too much walking for this gal. I like this monologue, it's good to get things out of your head sometimes. It's a nice peek into your life. You've got a few small punctuation and grammar issues, but nothing too major. I do hope you can calm the restlessness and wish you well on your next trek. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the great work!


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Review of Garth's Taxidermy  
Rated: E | (1.0)
I came across this item while searching for items about Texas. I lived in the Texarkana area for several years and was an avid hunter, so the subject of this article appealed to me.

I have to say, I'm unsure if this article is supposed to be fiction or nonfiction. It seems to be satire. If this is intended to be an actual business profile, I suggest you do more research about the industry before an interview. Approximately 80% of what this "business owner" said is untrue and outrageous. Fact checking is a crucial part of the writing process. For example:

“He told the boys how he pulled the heads off the chickens and plucked the feathers,” she said. “At that moment I put my plate down and wanted to run. I buy all our meat now.”
One of the best job benefits, Stokes said, has been free meat.
"I always had an overflow of meat - deer, hogs," he said. "My favorite is fried deer meat. The weirdest is beaver - it's very, very lean, but it makes the best jerky you'll ever eat. I've had fried armadillo, too."

First of all, there's a clear contradiction. If the wife buys all the meat, then he would not have an "overflow of meat". Second, and more importantly- an actual taxidermist disposes of any meat in the proper way.
It's clear that you have no knowledge of the subject. The only thing this article does is tell the reader what not to look for in a taxidermist.


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Review of The Big Decision  
In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome to WDC!

I like this short story. I'm not sure what contest you wrote it for, but you've used the prompt well. It's a heartwarming look into parenting. You've got a few small technical issues with punctuation.
There should be a comma instead of a period after attend in the first sentence and you've forgotten the first quotation mark before Well in the third sentence.
Other than that, it looks good!
I also suggest selecting other genres besides "Contest Entry" to get more exposure.
Overall, you've written a great piece of dialog!
Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the great work!
Created by Shaye Lorraine



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In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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I'm reviewing this item as part of "I Write". I always enjoy following you because you have such a way with words. This does not disappoint! This blending of nature and spirituality are a great way to look at the cycle of life in a relatable way. Although I love the whole poem, I have to say the second stanza is my favorite. Thank you for sharing your talent with us!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Warning- I'm working on being a better reviewer. Please bear with me as I learn.

One of the tasks I was given for a Very Wodehouse Challenge is to read and review items in the children's genre. I couldn't think of a better place to find some than this contest.

As a parent, I should probably be able to pen a poem for kids, but sadly I cannot. But this is great! It's amusing and has a valuable lesson. (Plus, it leaves room for a follow-up tale.) I really like that you haven't dumbed it down for children. Too many items in the genre use very simple words. In my opinion, reading is the gateway to improving vocabulary. So adding in unfamiliar words such as derision and confection plays to the natural curiosity of children and encourages them to learn. I think you've got a winner on your hands. Thanks for sharing your talent with us and good luck!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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Review of Grandma's Kitchen  
In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Warning- I'm working on being a better reviewer. Please bear with me as I learn.

One of the tasks I was given for a Very Wodehouse Challenge is to read and review items in the children's genre. Luckily I was snooping around your port checking out your images when I stumbled across this poem.

First Impression: The description is what caught my eye. My grandmother's kitchen was never really off limits to me, so I'm curious to see what's going on this one. Considering that this is a children's poem, rated E, I'm guessing she's up to something fantastic and probably doesn't need too many little hands "helping". I can relate!
Form: The Free Verse form works well here. When reading out loud, it flows naturally. I like the way you use repetition in the first line of each stanza and only slightly change the description to showcase the fun things. It's perfect for children.
Grammar/Punctuation:I didn't spot any issues.
Style/Voice The informal tone and playful mood fit nicely. You've conveyed the feelings of love and affection that every child should experience with a grandparent. I think most kids would relate to this poem and enjoy it.
Suggestions: This is too awesome for suggestions.
Final Thoughts: Overall, you've created a lovely little poem. Thank you for sharing your talent
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: E | (5.0)
After reading this poem in the Spiritual Newsletter, I just had to come leave you a review. It's a moving tribute to a special time of year. When I first read this, my heart swelled with love. You did a beautiful job putting each senryu together so it flows smoothly. I like to include my favorite part in my reviews, but I can't do that here. Although there are five parts, each one is required to give the reader the full effect. I can't even name a favorite line because it would be a crime to dismantle this masterpiece. Thank you so much for sharing this with everyone!


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In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Warning- I'm working on being a better reviewer. Please bear with me as I learn.

FIRST IMPRESSION: I should really work on my entry for this contest, but I don't think it'll be as cute as yours.
FORM: This form works well and you've followed it correctly. When reading out, it flows naturally.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: I didn't spot any issues.
STYLE/VOICE: The informal tone and playful mood fit nicely.
SUGGESTIONS: This is too awesome for suggestions.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a lovely little poem. Thank you for sharing your talent and good luck in the contest!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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Review of Easter Friends  
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Warning- I'm working on being a better reviewer. Please bear with me as I learn.

FIRST IMPRESSION: I should really work on my entry for this contest, but I don't think it'll be as cute as yours.
FORM: Not only have you nailed the end rhymes, but you've also added internal rhyming which really makes this read smoothly. When reading out, it flows naturally.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION: I didn't spot any issues.
STYLE/VOICE: The informal tone and playful mood fit nicely.
SUGGESTIONS: This is too awesome for suggestions.
FINAL THOUGHTS: Overall, you've created a lovely little poem. I'm no professional, but I hope my thoughts can be helpful. If not, just ignore them! Keep up the excellent work!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  
for entry "April 1, 2019" 
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Honestly, when I first read the title, Baba, I thought this was going to be some type of children's poem. After I got to line 7, I realized that Baba Yaga is not some annoying kids song. Thank goodness!

There's a whole lot of imagery going on here and it's great! My favorite bit:

"and chew their entrails
in my iron teeth."

I read this out loud to myself and the internal rhyming really makes it flow naturally. Also, my daughter said she has no idea what's going on, but this poem got her pumped up for action. She's 14 and rarely leaves her room, so I'm counting that as a bonus! *ThumbsUpL*





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for entry "~ What's in a name? ~" 
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I have to say, although I think it's a fab contest, I rarely enter "Tweet Me a Story" because of the 140 character limitation. I end up driving myself crazy for a couple of hours before giving up. Reading this entry as given me a little push to try again.
You've done a wonderful and creative job with such a short space! Bonus- I discovered the origin of your username. Which is cool because I always feel a bit shy asking someone!
Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!


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In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm reviewing this item as part of "I Write in 2019" .
I first saw the Canopus form over at The Poet's Place Cafe, but I haven't tried it yet. This is a wonderful example. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.
You've stuck true to the requirements and crafted a smooth poem. It flows just as it should- like a stream of consciousness. Your word choice paints a picture of a relaxing getaway. I felt a sense of longing for the shores of Mexico.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Keep up the excellent work!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm reviewing this item as part of "I Write in 2019" .
I love the Word Pictures Contest, but since I struggle with free verse, I find more joy reading the other entries. You've done a lovely job! Honestly, this was exactly what I was aiming for, but clearly missed the target! I can relate to this scene and can clearly see it before me. My favorite line is: "The theater is an oasis from the everyday". It sums up the poem nicely and shows your feelings. (I'm not sure if you noticed yet, but I think your dropnote link is broken.) I'm pretty sure you've nailed this contest- but good luck anyhow!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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for entry "Colors of Dawn" 
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm reviewing this item as part of "I Write in 2019" .
I haven't yet started on this exercise for the Poet's Place Cafe, but you've done set a wonderful example. I like that you chose not to focus on one particular color, but a combination that melts together to create a beautiful scene. The last stanza is my favorite. It really ties everything together. Also, thank you for including the note about the vernal equinox. I had an inkling of what it is, but I appreciate that chance to learn more.
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
I found this item while looking at the Slam Cupid entries. Loving the cover picture, I decided to read more. I have to say, this poem is spot on. I've had some of the same thoughts. The last stanza is by far my favorite, with the second a close runner up. Good luck in the contest!

Created by Shaye Lorraine


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for entry "Tidying" 
In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I didn't realize this is what I'd be reviewing for "I Write in 2019" , but here I am!
You followed the prompt in such a whimsical way that surely this is the winning entry. This lovely poem is quite like the KonMari method- simple and to the point. With the added bonus of visualizing you in front of a dresser, talking to small piles of laundry. Thank you for sharing this with us and good luck in the contest!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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Review of Jail Gates  
In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the 24 Syllable contest, so I thought I'd check out the entries for today so far. I love the way you combined the two prompts in the poem. I haven't written anything for the contest or Poet's Place Cafe yet, but you have definitely nailed it. You've done a great job with this poem! Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work!


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for entry "My Tantrum" 
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm reviewing this as part of "I Write in 2019" 

I remember this prompt, it was one of the few that didn't have me struggling! I admit, I like your poem better than mine. You nailed it! I think a lot of people can relate. I like that you included tears, because when I get mad, I end up crying a bit. (Which I really hate!) My favorite bit is "Thrashing and scratching". It's got a little bit of rhyme and really invokes feelings of frustration. Keep up the good work!
Created by Shaye Lorraine


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Review of Lists  
In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I'm reviewing this piece as part of "a very Wodehouse challenge" 

Oh my gosh, I'm so glad I picked this poem to read- it's so freaking hilarious! As a compulsive list maker, you had me hooked from the very beginning and followed through with laugh after laugh. I swear I felt like you were describing a scene from my past! I normally like to tell the author my favorite line or stanza, but I can't pick just a section because the whole thing is wonderful. I can't wait to read more of your work. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the excellent work!

Created by Shaye Lorraine


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In affiliation with The Royal Court  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm reviewing this item as part of "a very Wodehouse challenge" .
I chose this piece to review because I love poetry. The title and image piqued my curiosity, so I had to read more. This is a fantastic poem! I like the playful mood as you describe the house. It starts off by seeming a little creepy, but you quickly squash those thoughts with how you daydream of turning it around. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. It all flows extremely well. It is a smooth read from stanza to stanza. I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues. The fifth line is my favorite. It helps me see the picture you're painting. Overall, you've created a wonderful poem. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work!

Created by Shaye Lorraine


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