I chose this particular piece to review because I like poetry. Furthermore, the title and description piqued my interest because of the unique topic. I saw that it was a contest entry, but you didn't give any other information that would help explain the piece. (Such as the name of the contest and/or the prompt.) Also, you still have room to add a third genre category. By listing another one, you could help this poem get a wider audience. I enjoyed this whimsical and funny poem. I can relate to the same thoughts on creating a new poem and I'm sure others can too. Overall, this is a great little free verse poem! Keep up the good work!
I chose this piece to review because of the title and description. They intrigued me and I had to read more about my favorite time of year. First I have to say, you did an amazing job with the Lento form! I haven't tried to tackle it yet, but you make it look it easy. You used the prompt words perfectly, in an amusing way that describes a lovely scene. My favorite is the first because I can identify with that early morning moment. You did a wonderful job!
I picked this piece to review not only because I love poetry, but because of the title. "Puzzle" can definitely be used to describe the feelings of romance and love. Your imagery evokes feelings of both fear and longing, which is understandable. The fourth stanza is my favorite. It really speaks to me on a personal level. You've done a great job and I can't wait to see the finished product!
Lilith of House Martell hooked me with her newsfeed challenge, so here are my thoughts and opinions for whatever they are worth.
After reading other entries, I wasn't expecting a news type article, but I really like it! This definitely works well and makes your entry stand out. All four ghostly tales have intriguing plots and spooky facts that fascinate me and keep with the theme. I would suggest maybe an additional "headline" above each one or something to separate them, but still keep the flow going. (If that makes sense.) I found the following punctuation errors:
Paragraph 1
Line 2- no comma needed after "halls"
Line 4- comma needed after "however"
Line 5- no comma needed after "now"
Line 6- no comma needed after "records"
Paragraph 2
Line 1- comma needed after "dormitory"
Line 7- no comma needed after "in"
Paragraph 3
Line 1- no comma needed after "years"
Line 2- no comma needed after "unexplainable"
Paragraph 4
Line 6- no comma needed after "cemetery"
Honestly, I probably only noticed them because I've been helping my daughter with her writing lately. Overall, you've done a really great job making your entry stand out from the others. Good luck in the contest!
The title and description pulled me in because I've dealt with insomnia my entire life and I find it interesting to see if others experience it and how or if they can relate. Your descriptions certainly evoke the same feelings of frustration and loneliness that I've had in the middle of the night. I admit that not using proper capitalization is a bit distracting for me, but since this poem is written in the free verse, I'm guessing that you're just using creative license. I didn't see any spelling errors, so I don't really have any suggestions. I hope you've enjoyed your first year here on the site and look forward to seeing more of your work!
I came across your piece while searching for homeschool related material and wanted to stop to tell you how much I enjoy this item. I can identify with everything listed and it's nice to know I'm not alone in my fears. Life is always much easier when we know we're not alone.
I came across this article while searching for homeschool related items. As a homeschooling mom of two crazy teenagers, I wanted to thank you for this piece. It seems there will always be a battle when it comes to education, but people like you can draw attention to the sunny side of an unconventional education.
I'm reviewing your entry for "Second Time Around ~ Birthday Special" as part of "Invalid Item"
I greatly enjoyed your free verse poem. Your imagery helped me to identify with some of the same thoughts I've had run through my mind in the middle of the night. Although the whole thing reads well, I think my favorite part is the last three lines. You've summed up the whole piece nicely in that last part. You did a great job and I wish you luck in the contest!
My First Thoughts: I knew from the title and description that this story wasn't going to end well, I had a similar experience with a piglet once, but I sure was hoping for a happy ending anyway.
My Favorite Part: I love that you and Bubba had a chance to bond before his early demise. One doesn't often hear of human and turkey friendship, and I'm sorry it had to end that way.
My Final Thoughts and/or Suggestions: It is odd that in the modern turkey industry, turkeys are bred by artificial insemination. It seems to me that if more people knew about the unnatural reproduction circumstances, they would be less likely to buy and consume the poor captive poultry.
I was looking through the entries for the 18 Candles Birthday Poetry Contest and wanted to let you know how much I enjoy your poem. (I'm not great with acrostics myself.) You did a wonderful job! I love the end rhymes. Your love for WDC clearly shows. Good luck!
I found your poem in the "Items to Review" section. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful. First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, please ignore.
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: The "lesson" I took away from this poem was that life can be too short and you should go after what you want now instead of waiting.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: I like the alternating end rhymes. Each stanza flows well into the next.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: You've used a lot of descriptive words to set the backdrop for the poem. I appreciate the usage of onomatopoeias towards the end.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I didn't notice any spelling or grammar mistakes.
Suggestions: I don't have any suggestions for you.
Thank you for sharing this piece with us, I look forward to seeing more! Write on!
What a great poll! I was born and raised in the United States, but I am fascinated by the histories and cultures of other countries. In fact, I include it in my homeschool lessons. I'd love to travel beyond Mexico and Canada, but I finances won't allow it. I rarely watch "American" television, instead, I prefer British, Indian, Australian, and New Zealand. I have a great many friends in other countries and I hope to spread the international love!
What an excellent poll. I think it's good to know that old-fashioned manners exist here on WDC. I'm wondering what results you got for the three that chose the
"None of the above (Other - Write as a review!)" option. I can't believe some members don't say anything, I think I've only had that a couple of times. Anyway, good job!
Hello Jackie Snax! I see you have an anniversary coming up- Happy anniversary! I hope you are enjoying WDC as much as I have over the years. I wanted to share my thoughts about this poem with you, so I hope you don't mind. I have some personal experience with mental illnesses and I admit, you hit the mark- I've had some of these same thoughts myself. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, but I wonder if this is more prose than poetry? (I haven't figured out the difference yet lol) But I love the way you've broken up the stanzas, it all reads smoothly from one section to the next. My favorite line- craziness is survived by the rich and owned by the poor will echo in my memory for awhile. Thank you for sharing this piece with us, I look forward to reading more of your work!
Hello there! I see you are coming up on an account anniversary! I hope you enjoy WDC as much as I do. I wanted to share my thoughts about this short story with you. I noticed a few capitalization issues sprinkled here and there, but those are easily fixed. Wow. You have an amazing way of describing something we've all thought about at one time or another. It's almost a comfort, the way you described her life memories washing over her like the water. My favorite line- Loneliness concealed in a dense fog will remain in memory for a long time. Thank you for sharing this piece with us, and I look forward to reading more of your work!
Hello again! I thought I would delve further into your portfolio to see what else you've been up to here on WDC. I want to point out to you the importance of selecting the right sub type for each new creation. I really wouldn't label this as a column, it appears to read more like a monologue. Classification helps readers search for more specific items. I really suggest checking out all the great tools WDC offers all members. About this piece- I don't see any spelling errors or major problems. I can definitely feel your frustration while reading. Keep up the good work!
Hello there! I came across your poem in the "Noticing Newbies" section. I enjoyed it and hope you don't mind me sharing me opinion. Please remember, I'm not a professional, I'm just a poetry lover.
I really think this poem has a lot of potential. You've got a couple of grammar issues, but those are easily corrected. Have you considered putting this in a more traditional poetry form? I think with your rhyme scheme, some structure would shape it up nicely. You've got great descriptions and I admire the way you've used literal imagery. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the great work!
Hello again! I came across your poem in the "Noticing Newbies" section. I enjoyed it and hope you don't mind me sharing me opinion. Please remember, I'm not a professional, I'm just a poetry lover.
I picked this poem because of the description. I don't think I've come across a co-op poem recently. I have to say I'm quite impressed with how it turned out, especially considering your ages at the time. What wonderful similes and metaphors! I may even borrow this co-op idea for my own students! The two of you worked well together to create a smooth flowing poem. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors either. Keep up the good work!
Hello there! I came across this poem while looking through the account anniversaries. I hope you have enjoyed the past couple of years here on WDC. I picked this poem because of the description under the title. It just drew me in for more. I have to say upfront that I'm not a professional, I just enjoy sharing my opinions. I think the alternate end rhymes read well. You've painted a lovely picture while bringing out a sense of hope. This would be an excellent daily mantra for many to read. (Especially for me, I'm not a morning person!) I didn't see any errors. I like how you capitalized the beginning of each line. It's kind of symbolic, stressing the importance of each line of the stanzas. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem, I can't wait to dive further into your portfolio!
I found your poem on by searching through account anniversaries. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful. First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, please ignore.
I really like this simple poem for several reasons. First, it's reassuring to know others have experienced the same thing. It evoked feelings of sadness, hope, and a type of regret that I myself have surely had before. I like the shortness. It's straight to the point, with no pretty flowers for decoration. The only errors I noticed are both in the first line of the second stanza, when you should be your and don't should be doesn't. You seem to have your writing style, which works well. Thank you for sharing this piece with us, I do hope you write more wonderful poems soon. Write on!
I found your poem by looking through the account anniversaries. I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful. First, let me say that I am not a professional. This review is just a personal opinion that I am sharing with you. If anything in this review is deemed unhelpful, please ignore.
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: A sweet tribute to an unexpected friend. I feel both proud for his work as your protector and sad that he has since gone.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: I like the unmetered form and occasional rhymes. It all reads smoothly from one stanza to the next.
Artistic Voice and Imagery: I think you've described him quite well. I can picture him clearly waiting for your arrival.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No errors noticed.
Suggestions: None.
Favorite: The last line is my favorite. It seems to sum up his personality and your feelings towards him.
Thank you for sharing this piece with us, I look forward to seeing more! Write on!
I'm sorry it's taken so long for me to respond, life has been keeping me busy! Once again, you've done a wonderful job. You definitely have a gift for painting pictures with words and getting the reader to feel an emotional pull.
I just wanted to tell you how much I enjoy this activity. It's very interesting to read all of the submissions and see how others interpret a simple image.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact: The "lesson" I took away from this poem was that life can be too short and you should go after what you want now instead of waiting.
