I love the 24 Syllable contest, so I thought I'd check out the entries for today so far. I love the way you combined the two prompts in the poem. I haven't written anything for the contest or Poet's Place Cafe yet, but you have definitely nailed it. You've done a great job with this poem! Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work!
I remember this prompt, it was one of the few that didn't have me struggling! I admit, I like your poem better than mine. You nailed it! I think a lot of people can relate. I like that you included tears, because when I get mad, I end up crying a bit. (Which I really hate!) My favorite bit is "Thrashing and scratching". It's got a little bit of rhyme and really invokes feelings of frustration. Keep up the good work!
Oh my gosh, I'm so glad I picked this poem to read- it's so freaking hilarious! As a compulsive list maker, you had me hooked from the very beginning and followed through with laugh after laugh. I swear I felt like you were describing a scene from my past! I normally like to tell the author my favorite line or stanza, but I can't pick just a section because the whole thing is wonderful. I can't wait to read more of your work. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the excellent work!
I'm reviewing this item as part of "a very Wodehouse challenge" .
I chose this piece to review because I love poetry. The title and image piqued my curiosity, so I had to read more. This is a fantastic poem! I like the playful mood as you describe the house. It starts off by seeming a little creepy, but you quickly squash those thoughts with how you daydream of turning it around. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. It all flows extremely well. It is a smooth read from stanza to stanza. I didn't notice any punctuation or grammar issues. The fifth line is my favorite. It helps me see the picture you're painting. Overall, you've created a wonderful poem. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work!
Hey there, Lilli!
It looks like we both chose the same contest for Week 1. Pretty cool, but I don't know if that's good or bad, because you're tough competition!
I really like your entry. You approached the prompt word at a different angle that works well. That's one of the reasons I like this contest so much- it's interesting to see the different takes on the chosen word. (Plus, it's normally a word that I don't hear too often.) Not only did you define it, but you also invoked a feeling of sadness in me. I've definitely felt like this before. Because I can relate, it makes the poem more personal, which I think is important too. As for the form- well, it's exactly 24 syllables, so you're spot on. I didn't see any spelling or grammar issues either. Overall, you've created a great poem! Good luck in the contest and keep up the good work!
I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry. The title and description intrigued me, so I had to head in and read more. I normally let the author know which line is my favorite, but I can't this time because I love the whole poem. Everything about it is wonderful! You've chosen powerful words to help the reader set the scene. The rhymes are great and each line flows smoothly into the next. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the great work!
I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry and I enjoy ones about nature. I normally let the author know what my favorite line is, but in this case I can't because I thoroughly enjoyed the entire thing. Your powerful word choice really amps up the imagery. The free verse form works well here. I don't notice any spelling or grammar issues, so I have no suggestions. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the great work!
I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry. Although I'm not a really a cat person, I do enjoy reading about all types of pets. There's an unexplainable bond that can enrich your life. You've done a good job of showing us how much you treasure Cookie.
I noticed a few grammar and puncuation issues in this poem, but they are small and easy to fix:
In the first line, cats should be cat's.
In the last line, then should be than. Also, since Siamese is being used as proper noun, it should be capitalized.
I like the end rhymes you used in the first stanza, they work well.
Overall, you've created a charming little poem.
I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry. Although I don't often write romantic poems, I do enjoy reading them every now and then.
My favorite part is the sixth stanza. I feel like people have forgotten that words are timeless and just say whatever pops into their heads without thinking about it could affect others.
The tone here is informal, which suits the subject.
I didn't notice any spelling or grammar issues.
You've done a good job of explaining true intimacy. It reminds of 18th century Romantic prose. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work!
I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry. Your title and description let me know that the subject is one that I enjoy, so I dove into to read more.
I really liked reading this! Your powerful word choices and imagery helped me to feel like I was there. My only suggestion have nothing to do with the content.
In order to get more exposure for this item, I would go ahead and pick two more genres.
I didn't notice any spelling or grammar issues.
Each line reads smoothly and flows well.
Overall, you've created a lovely little poem. Thank you for sharing this with us! Keep up the great work!
I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry. Especially in the comedy genre.
The title and description piqued my curiosity, so I dove in to read more.
This a cute poem! The tone is informal and whimsical, which suit the subject well. The rhythm and rhyme make for a smooth reading from line to line. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar issues. Overall, you've created a charming poem that is very relatable!
Thank you for sharing this with us!
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I don't normally review short stories because I don't feel like I have enough experience to give any real insight, but I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed this item. The catchy title is what caught my attention. Having two crazy teenagers, I thought of them while reading. It sounds just like something they would try. Also as a parent, it's reassuring to find reading material that's appropriate for them. It's not always easy to find something that will spark an interest, but my 14-year-old daughter thought this was a cute story as well. I think is a great story and definitely deserved a win. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the great work!
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I'm not an expert, but I hope you find my opinion useful.
I chose this piece to review pretty much because of the title and description. I can't resist anything that has to do with librarians. So good job of luring me in for more! I don't normally review short stories because I don't feel I have the experience. But I wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed it. Congratulations on your Third Place Win! This short story is definitely a winner. I also want to say that I appreciate the format. It makes it easier to read. Thank you for sharing this short story with us, you are a talented storyteller. Keep up the good work!
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I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry. I'm not an expert, but I hope you find my opinion useful. First, let me congratulate you on being the Grand Overall Winner!
I really enjoyed reading this poem. Your wonderful use of imagery helps the reader to clearly see a lovely scene. I felt a sense of love and sadness while reading. I don't have any suggestions for you because I like it just the way it is! Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the great work!
I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry. I'm not an expert, but I hope you find my opinion useful. The title is interesting, so I wanted to see what you had to say about funerals. The free verse form works well here and you did a great job. My only suggestion is the title. The poem doesn't seem to be related to funerals, just describing the possibilities of what may happen after death. The somber mood fits this poem. I felt a sense of sadness and uncertainty as I read it. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work!
I chose this item to review because I'm partial poetry and the title intrigued me. Tardiness is a pet peeve of mine. I like poems centered on ordinary things and this fits the bill. It's nice to see something different and I enjoyed reading it. The playful mood suits it well. It doesn't sound like your scolding the tardy reader, but giving them a reminder. The rhythm and rhymes are nicely done.
Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work!
I chose this item to review because I'm partial to poetry and the title intrigued me. I'm not an expert, but I hope you find my opinion useful.
I really enjoyed reading this blitz poem. You nailed the form! When reading this out loud, your powerful words packed quite a punch. You did an excellent job of following the path from light to dark. I especially like the last two lines. They're so simple, but say so much.
Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep up the good work!
I came across this cute little poem in "Poem Forms: Table of Contents"
I've never heard of the Brevee form so I decided to learn more. (Plus, how can a person resist a subject such as butter?!) I like that you include a dropnote with an explanation of the form and a link to learn more information. (Which I did follow.) It seems that you followed the format perfectly. Overall, you've created a charming poem. Thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work!
I chose this piece to review because I'm partial to poetry. The titled intrigued me because I'm often awake at that time, but not for work. I enjoyed this free verse poem. It gives the reader an inside look at the life of someone that is probably overlooked until an emergency arises. I think the repeating line in each stanza works very well. In the second stanza, the second and third lines end with rhymes, which read very smoothly. The problem was that I was expecting more end rhymes and felt a little disappointed when there were none. But that's a small thing and probably more of a personal preference. I didn't notice any grammar or spelling issues. Overall, you've painted a clear picture of someone that works behind the scenes in day to day life. Keep up the great job!
I chose this piece to review because I have a fondness for poetry. The title and description were interesting enough to draw me inside for more. I enjoyed this poem very much. The mood is formal which suits the subject well. You've done a good job of setting the scene and letting the reader get an inside look of the mind of the artist. It's interesting that the piano is oversized in his home. It shows how much the artist values his work. I think the last stanza is my favorite because it ties everything together. Overall, you've created a lovely image. Thank you for sharing this and keep up the good work!
I came across this while searching for non-Christian items. I love poetry and prose, so I thought it would be a good fit. I enjoyed it very much, so I hope this review is helpful. These are only my personal opinions and I am in far from a professional.
The tone is both formal and thoughtful and suits the content perfectly. You've set a somber and loving mood as you describe a personal moment. The imagery is wonderful. The similes and metaphors are used to help the reader see a clear picture of what is happening. I can feel the emotion in the actions. I didn't see any spelling errors to distract the reader from the spiritual journey. I would suggest using the word against instead of from in the second sentence, but that's a small thing. Each verse smoothly transitions into the next while reading. I particularly like how you evoke the sense of smell to enhance this piece. It's often overlooked, but can be a powerful way to create the right mood and set the stage, so to speak. I'm assuming this prose is nonfiction because of the waves of love and that shine through the writing. You take the reader through several stages of emotion- fear, determination, hope, and finally peace, in a short amount of time. The resulting outcome is a well written, charming piece. You've done a great job! Keep up the good work!
I saw this piece featured in the Poetry Newsletter and just had to read it. How could I pass up a poem about poems?! I'm glad I did too because I adore it. I can't believe the number of different forms you managed to include. Everything goes together seamlessly. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and keep up the awesome work!
Welcome to WdC!
I came across your portfolio in "Read a Newbie". I chose this piece to review because of the topic. I'm familiar with Borderline Personality Disorder. As a teenager, I was misdiagnosed with it. It took a couple of years to figure out that I actually have Bipolar Disorder 1. Once I found the proper medication, life finally began to seem "normal" to me. The time between the two diagnoses was very confusing, but my parents and I tried to educate ourselves to understand BPD as much as possible.
This essay is very informative and provides the reader with facts that are often overlooked or misunderstood. The examples given are relevant and help support those facts. I didn't notice any issues with grammar or punctuation. Overall, you've written a well-structured essay that hopefully helps someone understand this illness better. Keep up the great work!
I found this page through a newsfeed post by Runoffscribe.
I really like how you have everything laid out in organized sections. It's easy to get a glimpse into your world. The WDC Celebrity Author and Highlighted Newbie Author sections are a wonderful idea. It's great to see us supporting each other! As soon as I'm finished reading some of your suggested items, I will head over to their portfolios too. Thank you for everything you do here on WDC and keep up the good work!
This poem struck a chord deep inside of me because I can identify. You've managed to put words to feelings that I didn't understand at the time. (Although I have plenty of words now!) You've done a great job of giving a voice to women in the same situation. I hope this wasn't from a personal experience, but if so, you have come a long way!
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