|Hi MD Maurice ,
This piece was for the most part very vivid. The details of the narrators feelings and the unfolding of events were really good. I thought however that the last paragraph, especially towards the end, felt a bit rushed compared to the rest. To me it lacked the description of the bulk of the story. I see you have it listed as a work in progress, I'd love to see this expanded, perhaps some more background information, one question I was left with was where the narators own mother was? as it only mentions her grandmother and great grandmother.
All in all I thought this was a good story, it felt quite real, and how true is that last bit, lol, any funeral I've been to has ended in a pub.
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