I found this poem searching "Lovecraft" so I'm going to guess you were going for a Lovecraftian feel. On that base, it's a little lacking for me. It's almost there but falls a little short. You have a bit the small feeling but I think this piece is just too short to really get that feeling.
Now beyond that, it's a very good poem. If you decide to expand it I'll be happy to review it again.
you have a great poem here. Very strong from beginning to in. Both in the technical field and in the emotional field that matters so much in a good work. You grab your reader from the start and simply refuse to release them. i say keep up the good work
I believe you have a good piece here. It holds on to the reading from the beginning and refusing to let go. The heart inside of this piece can be felt from the beginning. You wrote this well and offered no stumbling blocks on the way that would damage the flow of this piece.
great poem here. From start to finish it holds onto the reader and does noot let go. It is well written and offers no stumbling blocks along the way that could trip up the reader and damage the flow of the piece. Keep up the wonderful work and i look forward to reading more of your work
I have to say you have a Nice little piece you have here. It starts off good and offers no stumbling block along the way. the content is true and the reader can feel that. the reader can tell that you feel strongly in your faith and it rings in this piece