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Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
I wish I could give more that 5 stars!!

This is amazing and you're quite a wonderful young woman.

I've been there many times myself and I'm glad that I never ended it. You will be too.

Many Blessings- Moonie


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Review by MoonChilde
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Wonderfully written. I watched my mom and grandmother fall into the rabbit hole of demetia and it's hard.

My father, like yours, was always strong and robust. Even when was diagnosed with Parkinson's he didn't slow down. Until a motorcycle accident broke his back and other bones.

After that he too became a shell of his former self. It was so hard for me to witness.

Thankfully he's moved on to a better place. I still hear his voice giving strength to get through my tough times.

Thank you so much for sharing this personal story.

-Moonie


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Review of your lost  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
I totally get what your feeling. I look at other couples and think why do all of my knights turn out to be assholes.

Keep writing what you feel and I'll definitely keep reading your writing.

As always- Moonie


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Review of Nosedive No More  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
I've started reading this and HAD to save it until I can finish.

So far what I've read it's a great story!!

I love when animals are given the personalities of people.

You're doing a great job and I can't wait to finish the story.

-Moonie


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Review by MoonChilde
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really liked reading this story. I understand the paranoia that Mary felt. Like Mary I'm LGBTQ+ and have someone very close to me that is asexual.

I look forward to reading more of your works and will definitely check out your portfolio.

-Moonie


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Review of OI! DRAGON!  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (4.0)
I loved the story. Great language. However I wish you would have extended it. It left me hoping for more.


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Review of Amnesia  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (4.5)
I haven't heard from you for a bit, so I came to your portfolio to see if you'd written anything new.

From your words I can feel the love for the person that the story is being written to. It's such a difficult thing to have given so much of yourself to someone and then they just disappear.

Your writing is definitely improving. This story had more of a flow to it.

Thank you so much for sharing this.

As always- Moonie


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Review of viking funeral  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wonderful description of the way you physically feel after a break-up.

Yes, there is a hole in your body that might shrink over time but it unfortunately never completely heal.

I always described it to people is something that I knew was hurting but yet it was numb.

I think everybody has felt this at one time or another.

Fabulous work of art!

My only suggestion would be to double space and increase the size of the text.

-Moonie


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Review of Life  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great, truthful insight in what life is about.

You pointed out both the good and the bad of being human.

Very impressive!!

-Moonie


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Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this idea and can't wait to see where it ends up.

Fantastic idea!!
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Review of No More Dreams  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
I can relate to this well written poem. I think many people experience the same thing but don't talk about it.

The poem put me in mind of Poe. Enough insight to see yourself as you truly are.

Keep writing.

-Moonie


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Review of Return To Sender  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG! That was absolutely adorable. I loved the older childs personality. I think you captured it perfectly.

It reminded me of my mother telling me how she tried to put her younger brother into the trash can when her parents brought him home from the hospital.

Very well written!!

Thank you for sharing this with all of us.

-Moonie


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Review of The mean one  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (4.5)
This an interesting story. I've known people that are like Jasmine.It is a hard life to live, especially with mental or physical challenges.

My only suggestion would be to work on giving more detail, such as describing the residential, Ben's and Jasmine's appearance if relevant.

Keep on writng and learning!

-Moonie


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Review of A Lonely Night  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing your poem. However, due to past experiences it made me wonder if the person speaking was truly sorry or was just saying what he/she/they thought would bring the missing person back under their control.

This of course is simply and unfortunately the way my mind works.

Putting that aside the poem was well written. Comparing the stars to the lost person's eyes looking and judging was powerful.

Keep writing!

-Moonie


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Review of My Little Flower  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
It's funny how something as simple as a little flower can take you to a place of love.
Beautifully written. I could feel your emotions.

Keep writing. You have a gift that has to be shared.

-Moonie


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Review of Golden Meadow  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
The imagery of your poem was fantastic.
I felt like I was in the meadow with the bees.
I could almost hear them.

Thank you- Moonie


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Review of Maisie's Mom Says  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like the flow of this poem.
Like you, the random things children say make me smile.
When my youngest son was little I held my breath at times because, as I used to tell people, he didn't have filters. If he thought it he said it.

-Moonie


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Review of Think  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
That's beautiful and very introspective.
I definitely could relate to your words.
Yes moving on is hard, especially from an abusive or neglectful relationship but it can be done.
I know this from experience and I admire that you see what's in front of you without excuses or denial.
You have a beautiful soul.

-Moonie


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Review of Things Change  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great story. It reminded me of my youngest grand-daughter.

It's funny how sometimes our children know more than we think they do.

Well written!!

-Moonie


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Review of The Fallen Moon  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (4.0)
Being a childe of the moon I liked the concept.

I would like to make one suggestion though.

My personal opinion is that you describe the setting in the beginning quite well. Wonderful imagery. Then you repeated the same description several times throughout the story. For me it was a bit much. I already could visualize the setting and the repetition distracted me.

Other than that suggestion it was a wonderful and imaginative work of art.

-Moonie


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Review of Christmas Thought  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your poem asks some very important and relevent questions.
It was well written and if I understood it, everything comes down to faith.

Blessings- Moonie


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Review of Elemental  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Very good story. I hope that you'll expand what you've written so far. I'd love to read further.

The only suggestion that I can give is when you're saying that the sun was setting and then that it left the sun hanging crimson in the sky.

Instead of repeating sun twice I would suggest find another way of wording that part.

Thank you so much for the offering of your story. I look forward to more if you choose to expand.

Blessings- Moonie


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Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this story. The relationship between Justin and his mother was beautiful. It reminded me of me and my mother. All it took was a look and I understood her precisely.

A nice work of wordsmithing.

Blessings- Moonie
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Review of Sunset Dreams  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Ken

I loved the visuals that the poem gave. It's true that some of nature rests at night only to wake up the next day. The only suggestion that I would offer is changing the word bercuese. I feel like if you have to explain to the reader what a word means for me it takes away from the flow of the words. Other than that I loved it!

Blessings- Moonie
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Review of The Moment  
Review by MoonChilde
Rated: E | (5.0)

I really liked the ending. Very good use of humor. Really good story.

Blessings- Moonie
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