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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Castle* A review from "Game of Thrones, the Witch's House, and the White Walkers! *Castle*


*CastleLeft* Oh, my. I'm not sure where to begin. I did not expect the letter to take that turn. *CastleRight*

*CastleLeft* I always wondered what it was like for military couples to be away from each other. How do you deal with your spouse being away? And not just away, but at war or in a dangerous place.

Your words tugged at my heart. I can't imagine what you felt the day you found out about his death. That just blows me away. How did you cope? Even if it's something that you think you may be ready for, I would assume that you never really can prepare for that. He must have really loved this country. I admire what he stood for.

When you noted his day of birth and date of death, I realized just how young he was. 23 years in the military is a lot, but he was still too young. Not even 50 years old....

I'm so sorry for your loss. Your letter was written so beautifully and from the heart. It's so true that you could care less about all of the visitors and condolences. You just want him. That really touched my heart as well. I do wish you and your family well as you continue your life without him. But, he is watching over you and is always with you!
*CastleRight*

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Review of The Winner  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Castle* A review from "Game of Thrones, the Witch's House, and the White Walkers! *Castle*


*CastleLeft* Hey there! Welcome to WdC! If you love to write, this is the place to be! *CastleRight*

*CastleLeft* I found this story while looking for Western genre pieces.
I have to say that I never thought about writing a story around a cowboy and bullriding! Very interesting in and of itself. Your story was easy to understand with good flow. I did notice some grammar errors, however. Grammar, of course, is important, but the story will never be good unless you can get a clear point across. You did achieve this even with the errors. Try using Grammarly when writing. It's a great tool that will highlight spelling and punctuation errors as you write. Commas and correct possessives are vital to the understanding of a story. Without commas, sentences can sound like incoherent ramblings. Just a little tip there for you.

Here's an example: Just as soon as the bull kicked left it planted it's hooves into the dirt and flung it's hind end high into the air.This sentence should be written as the following: Just as soon as the bull kicked left, it planted its hooves into the dirt and flung its hind end high into the air. You made what should have been a possessive into a contraction which changes the entire meaning of the sentence.

Aside from all of that, I really enjoyed learning about rodeos. You tell a very compelling story! Great job!
*CastleRight*

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Review of The Sun Also Sets  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Castle* A review from "Game of Thrones, the Witch's House, and the White Walkers! *Castle*


*CastleLeft* You are a lover of all things cows/bulls etc. that's for sure! *CastleRight*

*CastleLeft* Your idea for this short story is brilliant. Who ever thinks of going back in time with a bull no less. I love the idea of the purpose of the time travel - to influence a legendary author.

The story was extremely well written. I was able to put myself in the mind of the bull who felt slighted by history and how bulls were portrayed. The idea of being able to talk with and understand an animal, regardless of which, always fascinates me. I wish it was something that we could do for real. Imagine being able to talk to your pet in times of sickness. We'd be able to know exactly how they felt or if they're in pain or if they're happy.

I usually call myself the grammar nazi. Any grammatical errors just jump out at me! Your grammar is impeccable! But, grammar is never the most important thing in a well written story. It's the originality of the topic and how it's relayed to the readers. Yours was a pleasure to read. It immediately grabbed my attention from the beginning, something all writers strive for. If you can't get the audience's attention immediately, chances are they will not get past the first few sentences! At least that's how it is for me! Great story!
*CastleRight*

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* I love the premise of this story. I would lean towards making this a prelude or prologue. It makes sense by the way you've written it. *Angel*

*Angel* There were many grammatical errors. However, grammar can be perfect in a story but wouldn't mean anything if the story was horrible. I can tell that you have a gift for writing. After just a few sentences, I wanted to read more. You pulled me into the story, and that's very hard to achieve. If you can't grab the reader's attention by just a few sentences, what's the point?

You do this very well. As I said, I love the plot of this story. I'm so curious to know how he got to the throne. But, that's a good thing. You want your readers to HAVE to know what happens next! You are well on your way with a beautiful start.

However, you need to fix those errors because some of the sentences were difficult to read. A few run-on sentences and punctuation were off. There is an app called Grammarly that's very helpful. Believe me, it's helped me learn where my weak areas were. It's vital that people understand where a sentence starts and stops. In other words, some of the errors made it difficult to read, and you won't be getting your point across.

Here's an example:
Home died and was buried with my mother, and few places have truly felt like home since.

Punctuation and the ensuing subject and predicate doesn't sound right. I understood what you meant, but you may want to rephrase it for better understanding.

Being with my mother was my home, and it died after I buried her. Very few places felt like home since then.

This is just an example of how you could rephrase it to make it grammatically correct and understood.

That aside, you have the talent required to finish this piece. I truly feel that way. Please continue to work on it, and I'd love to read anything you add.
Great job!*Angel*

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* This short snippet was very compelling causing me to read to the end. *Angel*

*Angel* I love the mystery of it all. It makes me want more. You do a very good job at pulling people in. Kind of like a book you start to read but then can't put it down!! Fiction writers always amaze me, because I am not a fiction writer but I love to read it. It shows what real creativity is. I hope you will finish this and allow me to read the rest. I don't see many grammatical errors if any. You are on your way to an excellent start. Great job! *Angel*

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Review of Unfinished  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* Initial Thoughts: I love anything related to addiction. *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* Conclusion: The words of the poem ring true for any addict. You have to really understand the underlying meaning of the words, which I did. Addiction is such a horrible fate and disease. I can relate very well to this. Great job! *FlowerP*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* Initial Thoughts: I love everything about Henry VIII. Why? Because he was a scum!! *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* Conclusion: But, seriously, you got all of the facts correct. The poem really is a summarization of who he was. Poor Katharine. I saw the move Anne Boleyn and ever since I was fascinated by him. But, I certainly didn't admire him! I'm not very good at poems and structures, but you seemed to have gotten your point across. Not an easy subject either, but you did very well! *FlowerP*


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Review of did he sleep?  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* Initial Thoughts: Please know that this review is my opinion and perspective only! *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* Conclusion: I couldn't follow the premise of the story at all. Who was he speaking to? What were the plot and characters? The writing confused me to the point where I had no idea what I was reading or where the story was going. Actually, I didn't find it to be a story. It was more like one run-on sentence without meaning. I do not say this unkindly at all. Please know that. I would never be rude, but if I'm going to help, my words need to be honest and constructive. Maybe if you gave a bit of background and separated into paragraphs would help. Utilize the vast resources available here on Wdc. They help tremendously. I, myself, have become a better writer because of them and the reviews I received. That is my hope for you. Best wishes and feel free to contact me anytime! *FlowerP*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* Initial Thoughts: This is a beautiful sentiment. *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* Conclusion: The grammar needs to be cleaned up a bit, but the feeling the story gives is one of satisfaction. I think it would be a good idea to speak a little about what happened to her mom and why the box was buried there, to begin with. Nobody knows why and the reader will wonder about it. The reader should always walk away with some type of closure to the book. She did find closure, but again, why? These are questions that should be answered to draw in the reader more. I want to know myself. If you do expand on this, I'd love to read the revised edition! Contact me anytime! *FlowerP*


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Rated: E | (3.5)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* Initial Thoughts: I found the title of this poem interesting do I decided to read it. *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* Conclusion: I don't pretend to understand poetry very well. I'm a nonfiction writer, so this will not be about structure. I have read many poems from this site, though. I'm not sure I follow what you were getting at here. It's not a style that I've read before. It seemed to be a bit redundant as well. I've written poems about dreams. It wasn't like this, however. But, please take this review with a grain of salt. As I've stated, I'm not a poet but have seen my fair share.

The poem didn't seem to follow any structure that I'm aware of, nor did it seem to flow well. I would love to know what your thoughts were when writing this. What were you trying to relay to your readers? Feel free to contact me anytime!
*FlowerP*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* Initial Thoughts: The title and description caught my eye, and I had to read on to find out more of this story. *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* Conclusion: I published a memoir of mine, and this type of writing reminds me of a memoir type piece. I wonder, is this true or fiction? Whatever it is, you've done a great job describing your surroundings and showing rather than telling. Something we all have difficulty with. I would love to know if this is the start of a collection. Do you plan to expand on this at all? I have so many questions. What were her reasons for going back? What did she plan to do?

There were some grammatical errors but not many. I don't focus too much on that but rather how the story affects me emotionally. I loved your statement "home is where the heart is". We'd all like to believe that is true, but unfortunately, it's not as you've described. My memoir is about family and greed and abuse so I can relate. Good job on this well written story. I'd love to see you expand on this story!
*FlowerP*


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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* You seem to have a good plot going here. *Angel*

*Angel* The problem I immediately noticed is the lack of showing rather than telling. When I was writing my memoir, I consistently received the same feedback. Once I really understood, it came easy.

The way it was explained to me, very simply was the following. Instead of saying "I answered the doorbell and it sent shivers up my spine", say, "the sound of the doorbell shook me to my core" or something along those lines. It's not as difficult as it sounds. For a very long time, I struggled with this concept. It's all in the way it's explained to you. I hope that helps.

Showing and telling really are 2 very different things. You want your reader to feel as the character feels. As if the reader can actually feel what the characters are going through at the moment. If you could edit this and follow those guidelines, you'd have a great story.

I did have a hard time keeping track of what was going on as well. It just seemed as if there were too many different things going on and thrown at the reader at once. A little more background would be great. Should you decide to revise, please send me your edits. I'd love to read them!! Good luck!
*Angel*

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Review of David's Farewell  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* What a beautiful description.*Angel*

*Angel* It's funny how we know we're in a dream. I had the same experience. Your husband came to visit you. Why now, no one will know. But, you describe it in such clarity and remembrance. When you remember things so clear, it brings comfort. A beautiful tribute to your husband.*Angel*

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Review of The Seasons  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* I love the changing of the seasons, so I had to read this when I noticed the title. *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* I love how you describe the changing or "dying" of the seasons and then their rebirth. You write in a-a-b-b like me. I prefer that structure. I think it flows the best. You really did a great job tying one line to another to make sound natural. Great job! *FlowerP*


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* I found this under your nonfiction folder, and I wanted to explore it. *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* I'd like to know what prompted you to write about an event from 1948? A former patient was the arsonist. How ironic considering the hospital treated the mentally ill. The descriptions of the patients screaming and trying to escape were horrifying. I can't even imagine what they must have been feeling during those moments. I think burning to death is one of the worst ways to go. Is the hospital haunted today? That kind of stuff fascinates me. Anyway, great tribute! *FlowerP*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
*FlowerP* ~A Rising Star's M2M Review~ *FlowerP*


*FlowerP* The title caught my attention, so I had to explore this piece further! *FlowerP*

*FlowerP* As I read through this, I found myself experiencing the same things at one point in life. Most of the things you mentioned, I've found to be true. The ALL CAPS thing? Yep, I did it, and everyone thought I was screaming like a maniac. However, I, like you, did that for grabbing attention.

I've never been labeled antisocial however, if I mentioned God in my work. Not sure why that would happen. I find that quite bizarre actually. I used to go on Facebook all the time, but right now, or since WdC I should say, I could care less about it and never go on anymore. There's too much dishonesty. Everyone tries to one up the other by posting prominent things, whatever they may be.

I don't go on Twitter. Again, I could care less. I don't know why the social media craze is so huge. Especially to have the president tweeting. That just seems wrong or something.

Anyway, you have a really good piece here on perspective. I related it to as I'm sure many will as well. Just don't ever feel uncomfortable stating your beliefs. I don't care when people share beliefs, but I do mind if they try to push their belief system onto me. That's when you've gone too far, and I know you'd never do that!! I really enjoyed this! Thanks!
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Review of The Journey  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* Initial Thoughts: Can a story like this be possible? *Angel*

*Angel* Conclusion: As usual, you have just the right words to describe feelings, emotions, surroundings, whatever really. You really need to put all of your poems in some kind of anthology. You're too talented not to have your works read by millions. You have a real gift my friend, what else can I say. Why would you even request a review from me? You're out of my league! Keep up that beautiful writing! *Angel*

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Review of Out Of Place  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* Initial Thoughts: I knew I had to keep reading to find out what happened. I love stories like this. *Angel*

*Angel* Conclusion: Your grammar is very good and you're descriptive in your surroundings, or NOT surroundings I should say, lol. Now, I enjoyed this very much, but you got me at the ending. I hate it when there is too much left to the imagination. I would love to see you expand on this. I'm all about instant gratification. An open ending like that makes my head hurt! LOL Congratulations on winning the contest. Your piece is well worth first place! Also, congratulations on you becoming a moderator. If anyone deserves it, it's certainly you!! Keep on writing! *Angel*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* Initial Thoughts: You were dead on with this. *Angel*

*Angel* Conclusion: I always knew Christmas was created by Pagans, the whole tree and holly and decorating. I have friends who are Jehovah's Witnesses, and they told me about this; hence they don't celebrate Christmas. I always thought Jesus was born around March? I can't remember, but you described the origins perfectly. Great job! *Angel*

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Review of Santa's Day After  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Angel* Initial Thoughts: I came across the title and it captured my attention, so I decided to take a look. *Angel*

*Angel* Conclusion: Free verse poetry is not my thing, and from what I understand, is very difficult. I mean if it's free verse, then what makes it good? Those are just my thoughts! Poetry altogether seems to elude me.

I enjoyed the poem though talking of Santa and what he does the next day. The last line really made me laugh about the Easter Bunny. Keep attacking free verse! You'll get it down!
*Angel*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* Initial Thoughts: I love these blink entries. They're so much fun! *Angel*

*Angel* Conclusion: You did an excellent job with such little information and using so few words. Your descriptions of the surroundings are imaginative and allows the reader to feel what it's like to be there. You have a gift for writing, and WdC can only help you improve. Utilize the tools here and get involved in the community. You'll love it. Great job! *Angel*

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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
*RainbowL* A review from the WdC Angel Army! *RainbowR*


*Angel* Initial Thoughts: This was very short, and I'm not sure what you were trying to accomplish in writing this. *Angel*

*Angel* Conclusion: I understand it is about having sex, but it's very straightforward without any creativity behind it. Was this for a contest? I ask, because it's extremely short. Sometimes contests require different prompts that may be very short, such as "Blink" contest. If not, you may want to elaborate more on their relationship with each other, why she didn't want to have sex at that time, whether she likes him at all, etc. There's no plot or character base which makes it very difficult for the reader. Utilize the tools here on WdC to help yourself improve. You'd be amazed at how many resources there are for young writers. We all need improvement. I continue to improve everyday! Good luck! *Angel*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Ornament1r* Initial Thoughts: What an extremely imaginative and unique way to describe WdC in the beginning! *Ornament1r*

*Santahat* Conclusion: I laughed throughout most of this because it was so humorous! How you incorporated science fiction is pretty amazing! I love it. Your descriptions and perspective are dead on. Jay, you are a truly gifted writer, and I'm thrilled to have you here with us on WdC. What a wonderful addition to the family! And a fellow rising star to boot! Good luck with everything, although you are on your way to an amazing start! *Santahat*

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Review of Stomach Pangs  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Ornament1r* Initial Thoughts: This was quite interesting to read. I don't know what the prompt was so I can't give as thorough a review as I'd have liked. *Ornament1r*

*Santahat* Conclusion: I wondering what your thoughts were as you wrote this. I interpret it with the word hunger. I'm not a poet at all, and I don't know the structures and forms of poetry. This is one that I haven't seen before. It was difficult for me to follow. It didn't flow freely for me, but again, that's just my perspective. *Santahat*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Ornament1r* Initial Thoughts: This was a very thought-provoking story. *Ornament1r*

*Santahat* Conclusion: Your experiences mirror so many on this site. Writing is a release for me as well, and I think that it probably rings true for so many. I'm thrilled you are here, creating your own contest, entering contests and even deciding to write a memoir. Very big steps for a newbie!

Your grammar and punctuation needs some work. I think if this was written in the first person narrative, it would have been more compelling since it's your experiences and story. You will learn so much on how to improve your writing skills and by being active in the community as you have started. I applaud you for taking this step!
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*Ornament1r* Please understand that my review is just one voice among many points of view. Take what you think will help you and leave the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read your work! *Ornament1r*


*Santahat* Write on!! *Santahat*

Mare ~ extended hiatus

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