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Review of bike life  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I suggest the following changes:

Introduce your living conditions. I have visited the Dominican and from my experience motorcycles are the main mode of transportation. What are your experiences? Lead into your statement with something.

Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

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Review of My time  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It was nice to read about you and your life. I love the Dominican and have spent a lot of time there in the past. I used to spend a couple months out of a year there on a resort back in those days I had money.

So this piece is about your little brother. Touching.

Keep writing.

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#1300305 by Maryann
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed this greatly. What would the Masonic Order and the Shriners have to say about that... I wonder...

Masonry is more in line with the Republican Party while the Democrats are more in line with the Shriners...

So the process in itself has gone from being political to an extension of Hollywood. INTERESTING!

I enjoyed your suggestion and the premise. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of Love  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This has good flow and for the most part it does have rhythm and rhyme within its structure.

I enjoyed your message.

"Love is like time. You must hold onto the memories. Cherish each and every moment. For they are hard to come by and easily lost."

This I learned as a 12 year old boy when my father past.

You triggered my memories of him, thanks.

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Review of There's a girl  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
We all at times can't see beyond our own issues. I for one fell into depression and I couldn't see a way forward and eventually landed in the hospital for an extended stay.

You really captured the person in your writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Well this was very interesting to read, thank you for sharing it. I am not mechanically inclined but you did a tremendous job painting the picture. Very descriptive.

I did not see anything to really change. Its refreshing for folks to share their family experiences.

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I wish you the best of the season belated of course. It is very well written. I do not see anything that jumps out at me to change.

We all have something that is special to us. For me as a child it was a stuffed plush monkey with a banana in its hand.

I am sorry that you had to live through a house fire. Thank you for sharing such a personal calamity.

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Review of Change  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Change is a constant. Very thought provoking. We die more than once in life due to various factors, loss of a loved one for example.

You have touched on something profound. You may wish to review the grammar but overall it flows well.

Thank you for sharing your wisdom and please keep writing.
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Review of Being soulless  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your writing style thank you for including the edit points that's cool.

Darkness often seems to be the answer. Too many folks act as mirrors reflecting their surroundings and other peoples attitudes.

I live my life in obscurity not darkness but its similar in many respects.

Thank you for sharing. Very thought provoking. But keep in mind that we die more than once in life due to loss, trauma and other life altering events.
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Review of Choice  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Has a good rhythm and flows very well. You may wish to double check spelling. "Meant" for example. Fate being a fixed concept is interesting to contemplate.

I enjoyed this thought provoking piece. In the end we have to leave everything behind from this life for others to go through. So it is up to the individual which direction they wish their soul to take.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Well you have caught my attention with this piece.

It seems a bit rushed. You could revisit this and develop the character and the situation with greater details. I am a fan of James Bond.

Never fear to make new paragraphs either. It would help with the flow.

I appreciate that you took the time to share your abilities. Keep writing.
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Review of Travels in Time  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very interesting. The concept of energy and time has always been an interest of mine although I must admit I am a novice. I think that you write extremely well. I appreciate the education. I often think that humanity is going to have to get off this rock at some point. I will have to read this a number of times over to gain lasting understanding.

Thanks for posting this and again for the education. Keep writing.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed this piece. It brought back memories of easier times when I was visiting the Casino De Montreal while on tour with the Shrine Circus production. Very well done indeed. On the whole it has wonderful rhythm. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Review of Urge of Appetite  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Well you certainly painted an accurate picture of sharing Thanksgiving dinner with someone you never is at a loss of room where the food is concerned lol. Very well done.

I hope that there was enough food for all in attendance. I liked the rhythm.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Very interesting article writing about two iconic Disney characters. Children would love this approach for a bit of story telling off the cuff. The pictures I believe would attract children to this article as well. I used to buy dresses for my niece so she could experience being the princess she is to me. Thank you for sharing.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Sadly we sometimes have to say goodbye to one in our hearts. I appreciate your willingness to share such a personal loss.

The countdown was an interesting concept which drew my attention.

Love is like time
You must cherish each and every moment
For they are hard to come by
And easily lost

I wrote the above for my father who passed when I was 12 years old.
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Review of My Valentine  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Sadly some people find themselves in this situation where their significant other is incapacitated for years and it is difficult to move forward.

I used to volunteer at a veterans gift shop in a care facility and ran across many in this predicament.

Very well written. Keep sharing.
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Review of Love  
Rated: E | (3.0)
"Love is like time"

Love is like time
You must hold onto the memories
Cherish each and every moment
More they are hard to come by and are easily lost

"We die more than once in life. I have done so more often than most."

I wrote this piece back when I was 12 years old. It was about my father and his death. It can be applied to any situation however.

You're very open and honest which I appreciate. Please keep sharing.
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Review of DUET  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing this. I appreciate it greatly!

I dream of finding a friendship where I can share my art as well. Happy that you have one! Oh to dream! :)

Please keep sharing your gifts. Very well written. An exceptional piece.

Johnny O
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very moving. This piece reminds me of my grand parents who both died from cancer and my father who passed due to complications with the heart.

Thank you very much for sharing.

This is what I wrote about my father:

Love is like time.
We must hold onto the memories.
Cherish each and every moment.
For they are hard to come by and are easily lost.

"We die more than once in life. I have done so more often than most."
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Review of Simply Ellie  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Note: The color of the font should be changed! It's so hard on the eyes!

A very sad story. But you being the author can change that in the future t any given moment lol.

Very well written. Keep writing!

Watch, in the next installment Ellie runs away with a circus... just like I did long ago :)
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Review of The Cry  
Rated: E | (4.5)
From strip mining, mining in general, deforestation, pollution of every possible type all is done due to our greed.

I enjoyed this piece. Very truthful and sad. The earth is talking to us, but will her cries go unheard?

Thank you very much for sharing it. Please keep writing.
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Review of Blue  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very interesting as well as very descriptive.

Depression is a serious issue, one that is something that I personally have issues with. It is through writing and medication that I am able to manage.

Thank you for sharing and please keep writing.



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Review of Look to God  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh... to be able to erase every single mistake we make, life would be so much better...

No loss of employment, no divorce, no bankruptcy, no homelessness and no depression. Oh to dream...

Anyways, thanks for sharing. I always try to keep in mind that there is always someone else who has greater problems than I do in order to keep my perspective.

Keep on writing!
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Review of Links Of Gold  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for sharing such a personal piece. I enjoyed this greatly.

I wrote a piece in tribute to my father that I lost at 12 years old.

"Love is like time. You must hold onto the memories, cherish each and every moment for they are hard to come by and easily lost."
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