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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Geoff, I liked this foraging out into my favorite time of year with many messages to greet me in the winter wonderland. The prints in the snow tell their own story over and above what we might read. My favorite lines build to the end:
The hieroglyphics of the hare.
The humorous happy hare.
The lop-sided hieroglyphical hare.
Her story makes me smile.
She has such big feet.
Yawn.
About to dream.
Must hurry.
To read the moose's long cuneiform.
Long strides.
I and the calf hurry.
The blizzard turns the page.
I enjoy being on this pilgrimage. Thanks
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Review of In Mongolia  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Karen, a curious piece with a picture and prompt to grace it. It begins with the word Mongolia. I am transported to a place that has camels that laugh along with myself.
The spacings of the poem remind one of wide open spaces that can not contain a smile. It is contagious.
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Review of The Change  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Ironworker, a reminder that all creatures have a voice. I can recall my own days of hunting deer with my grandfather. By the end of the tale we are looking at ourselves in the mirror of a deer's eyes. Progress brings with it a price of disregard for something that has value.
Looking back: the reality is that change takes place and like it or not in the end someone or something will pay the price. Thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A real curious tale Katie, about a boy finding ways to become a man, a hero.

It took a couple reads to better understand the myth of the suck monster and the mermaid Eve. The bottom line is that things are not always as they seem.
There is the story of grandma and grandfather. I remember it well. I was pretty much raised by my grandparents. The lesson seems to say that even the suck monster is not the problem as much as it is taming the monster within. Thanks for sharing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow Katie, talk about crashing into reality. The centerpiece is the metaphor of the tree that knew what it was like to be burnt and broken. These words caught me:

Here I stand, across from a tree that gave me so much joy. Like me, it is fractured and broken. Its' leaves are gone and apples are visions of the past. I do remember that sensational taste and smell that was like no other apple. Each bite promised hope.
And then as the words of "wanting divorce" come out, a husband is killed and the woman herself wondering what it is all about surviving a crash, that hides underneath the memory of past bliss. Words do have power. Watch out what you pray for. Thanks
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the way your story flows and gifts me with a picture that I can celebrate and embrace. There is a thread of melancholy in being loved in a rock and roll fantasy. These words redeem the experience:

These are better days; the highs aren't peaks and the lows I take with grace. I bring sparkling images out of dreams, into the sunlight and claim them for myself.
And in the course of the melody is a three year old girl, who serves as a reminder of the importance of musical magic and little girl dreams. Life has ups and downs and yet it's worth the ride.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Katie, a tear jerker at so many levels. As I read I feel a sense of being torn and jerked out of a reality that seemed to be the perfect place for me. I enjoy the way you make the shift.
What was the chance?
The two of us together.
Destiny, fate, kiss of the stars,
wishes can come true,
Then the cruel reality as thunder and lightening out of the blue enlightening me. The ending is perfect. There goes that "perfect" person walking on water away, a ghost. What happened. Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
An enjoyable exercise in determining the essence of what makes God believable. I remember the question in seminary and as I sought to understand God before I called myself a Christian. It seems like much of your own thoughts are focused ontologically, "there needs to be a cause". My life has taught me faith is the only thing for sure. If someone does not believe in God there is not much to convince them otherwise, because that is the truth they are tethered to. I would much rather believe in a God of love who dare to die for us rather mechanistic, naturalist gibberish. You do well to unpack the issue logically even to the point of admitting the unpredictability of atom. I am discovering for myself my testimony in relationship to God is the only thing that makes sense. Thanks!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Tim, nice rhythmic sentiment. It speaks about the importance of rewakening romance so that we do not lose what put us together in the first place. A love Reborn speaks to the heart of your poem, not clear about uplifting gain. My favorite lines:Buttercup, we’re branching out -
Sunrise - new refrains -
Everybody’s working doubt...
Sentimental drains.
Love is obviously more than the sentimental. I also like the liberating thrust, frisky clamor.
Not sure about leaky bubbles.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for the measure of hope you offer up in the story you share. Life can get painful for person's like Angela and yet that does not mean God does not have a plan. I enjoy the way the story develops and flows. I recalled my own divorce and the sense of abandonment. And then along comes someone like Carl who helps to make sense out of what seemed craziness and chaos. I am reminded by your story that marriage and relationships are hard work, labor and yet there is in the midst of water breaking a baptism to a new life. It is as much a story about survival and recovery of a dream that had seemed a nightmare. I like that she still has some connection with the baby's father. It makes me hopeful. My own first marriage lasted nineteen years, unfortunately it left us disillusioned with three kids looking on. God bless. I am thankful for your writing gift.
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Review of A Leap of Faith  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello RedtoWrite, it was well worth the read from start to finish. In particular I like how you use allusions to perk my interest going forward. There is the allusion in relation to what she reads: the awakenings by Oliver Sacks. It is fun to see how you bring her back to life. She is not good with sports and yet finds a gift in reading and research, ultimately being used as a undercover person, a place where she could make love and become pregnant with Grayson. It might be said she is wise beyond her years.

We then see the highlight of the tale as she takes the ashes to a high place where she has known fear and let's go of Tony's ashes. It is a very spiritual moment. Your characters come across to me as very believable. I recall my own hurt at being picked last in sports. God has a plan and as the title reveals it takes a leap of faith to uncover the hero each of us can become. I did wonder about her confrontation with Jesse. How does she survive? Thank you very much for sharing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It was an interesting read Alextrax. The transformation from a human being to blob if jelly is disconcerting. I can understand the irritation of dealing with Melanie, too particular to care about person's and we see clearly that consequence. I would like to know more about back story about what makes Carole obsess about eating food. I have worked with persons with feeding disorders. Where does Carole begin and where and what is this blob that creates the occasion for eating like no tomorrow. Where will all this lead. Thank you for answering my questions. I enjoyed the dialogue in the beginning of the story as one power overcoming. Where will it go from there. Where is Melanie as the story continues. Tx for sharing
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Review of The Sirens.  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello inkwell, love your literary allusion that reminds me of the Odyssey by Homer. I can still picture the need of being tied up to resist screams that bring a ship to be destroyed.
I like the element of fatal attraction that you offer up. I am dragged down to see a hag, withered monsters with scars and claws.
I see this as a good poem to share with others the destructive nature of passion that isolates us and call us to destruction. Your poem offers
Its all an act,
to draw you in.
to catch a sailor,
so they can win.

Beauty and grace,
they never frown.
For their ambition,
is to make you drown
The alternative is to realize the healing of community, relationships that not only build up myself, but others. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love your title. It gives me something to look forward to and pray about. I want the sweet serenity that you offer up.
The word health comes across as clinically sterile. I like words that speak of God's "shalom" which is what you are offering up to your reader. It is a sense of healing and wholeness(peace), that can only come from God. My favorite lines of your poem:And in His presence
Lies the awesome focus -
A simple prescription,
His eternal advisements
So rewarding and pure.
It is indeed in God's presence we find eternal reward. Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for your passions Tim. I enjoy that you are able to use poetry to share what is most important to you. Your last paragraph speaks the loudest. It calls for God to set people free. It may not be too late. I am reminded of God speaking in Exodus. He hears and knows the cry of people who are suffering.
I pray that God can use you poem to set free people who can make a difference for these children. Thanks for writing!! The poem is excellent. I wonder about the title. The power: a deafening groan.
Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your writing hit the spot for me Redtowrite. It speaks about the legacy that any of us can enter into as we take up the mantle of parenthood. At this late time in life it is working with the intellectually disabled who are teachers in eternal frame.
I like most of all how you build to a vision what raising a child of any age can lead to. A loving confident child destined to be a magnificent man.
I just happen to be the only man amongst women at our house working with five men. Your poem gives me hope. Thank you. Children are a gift from God of infinite worth.
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Review of Sleepy Hollow  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoy your version of the tale. I am thinking the name of the main character was Ichabod Crane, which I did not recall till I finished the poem, trying to remember who Crane was. The part I liked best began the second stanza. It seemed personally relevant not only to the story, but to our human predicament.

Beware the hoof beats
Of a horse not your own
Nor that of a boon companion
For the headless one still rides the night hollowly.

It seemed like a warning to us all to recognize our limit and realize from where our rescue might come in any situation
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Chris it is a joy to read your creative machinations. It reads in a super rational way. I like mostly the line
"electric revulsion of horror untwined
unrav'lling threads that consciously bind".
It reads in a very lucid way about how mechanical renderings can tie anyone of us in knots. I like the dictionary idea. What would a picture of this look like.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It was a fun read that left me reliving my own attempts at graceful movement in times past. I like the way the words dance off the page, uptempo frenetic displays. Your choice of words light the way to seeing the sculpted gems. I only found myself wondering about your choice of words at the end. An articulation of glamour seemed awkward. An articulation of glory may be another perception to explore. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tim, my take on your poem is that there is a seeking for the divine in nature. Isn't one's pureness a specialty throne", speaks as an invitation to discover and embrace God in the images of bird in flight, ridges with peanut butter laughter, a coven and birch filled with seed.(Potential)
My favorite sentence
Thy mercy be candles, so cherished and bright.
It left me hopeful, finding the image of God in creation could lead me to a better deeper appreciation of grace. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Very intriguing. I feel drawn into the story by the whistling sound that calls as if in a whisper. The storm allusions serve as preparation for a crisis of some kind. I lived this sentence "Shrieks of fury engulf the waves of faceless shadows consuming my mind." I like the atmosphere and ambiance of mystery, I long for the characters who can help me make sense of it all. I need to know more about the old man who slips into the narrative. Tx for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for sharing Tim. You offer in your poem an opportunity to choose heaven or hell. The answering of God is in contrast to the unending questioning and confusion that leads one from God. The idea of the martyred and demonized one as relating to Christ offers a passionate rebuke to all that would try to distract from moral truth.
It comes across as a parable of the reckoning of Easter resurrection in opposition to the shame of the cross.
"Belief in heaven's built up morals rose". comes across as ambivalent. How are moral's built up in a heavenly perception. Maybe belief in the potential of what it means for us to be humane in the light of the cross. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A fun read Tim. I especially hooked by the title about grief and solace, tomorrow resists. It is a reminder we can not put off grief. As a chaplain I saw many a patient anchored by unresolved grief.

I could share some of my own changes of wording. The dynamic you offer offers a lot of freedom to explore. The last words are confusing. It eats away at everything we womb and worship. Maybe want and worship. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Funny to look at Bear. It is one of those anthropological musings that faces one with the essence of humaneness. Is it possible that animals can teach us more about our skewed attempt at looking and acting human. I like mostly the groundhogs response to an end date of December 21st. And we think narcissistically we know it all. One need only observe a creature to see how they teach us.
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Review of Why in the World?  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
It is a fun read Joto Kai. In one of my first sermons I talked of how it is too easy to settle for a God in crisis to be, why not invite God to be with us in our joys. The truth stays with me even as I am healing from Covid. I can choose to focus on suffering and healing or look for joy inside that I can share with others. God bless
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