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Review of A Leap of Faith  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello RedtoWrite, it was well worth the read from start to finish. In particular I like how you use allusions to perk my interest going forward. There is the allusion in relation to what she reads: the awakenings by Oliver Sacks. It is fun to see how you bring her back to life. She is not good with sports and yet finds a gift in reading and research, ultimately being used as a undercover person, a place where she could make love and become pregnant with Grayson. It might be said she is wise beyond her years.

We then see the highlight of the tale as she takes the ashes to a high place where she has known fear and let's go of Tony's ashes. It is a very spiritual moment. Your characters come across to me as very believable. I recall my own hurt at being picked last in sports. God has a plan and as the title reveals it takes a leap of faith to uncover the hero each of us can become. I did wonder about her confrontation with Jesse. How does she survive? Thank you very much for sharing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It was an interesting read Alextrax. The transformation from a human being to blob if jelly is disconcerting. I can understand the irritation of dealing with Melanie, too particular to care about person's and we see clearly that consequence. I would like to know more about back story about what makes Carole obsess about eating food. I have worked with persons with feeding disorders. Where does Carole begin and where and what is this blob that creates the occasion for eating like no tomorrow. Where will all this lead. Thank you for answering my questions. I enjoyed the dialogue in the beginning of the story as one power overcoming. Where will it go from there. Where is Melanie as the story continues. Tx for sharing
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Review of The Sirens.  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello inkwell, love your literary allusion that reminds me of the Odyssey by Homer. I can still picture the need of being tied up to resist screams that bring a ship to be destroyed.
I like the element of fatal attraction that you offer up. I am dragged down to see a hag, withered monsters with scars and claws.
I see this as a good poem to share with others the destructive nature of passion that isolates us and call us to destruction. Your poem offers
Its all an act,
to draw you in.
to catch a sailor,
so they can win.

Beauty and grace,
they never frown.
For their ambition,
is to make you drown
The alternative is to realize the healing of community, relationships that not only build up myself, but others. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love your title. It gives me something to look forward to and pray about. I want the sweet serenity that you offer up.
The word health comes across as clinically sterile. I like words that speak of God's "shalom" which is what you are offering up to your reader. It is a sense of healing and wholeness(peace), that can only come from God. My favorite lines of your poem:And in His presence
Lies the awesome focus -
A simple prescription,
His eternal advisements
So rewarding and pure.
It is indeed in God's presence we find eternal reward. Thanks for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for your passions Tim. I enjoy that you are able to use poetry to share what is most important to you. Your last paragraph speaks the loudest. It calls for God to set people free. It may not be too late. I am reminded of God speaking in Exodus. He hears and knows the cry of people who are suffering.
I pray that God can use you poem to set free people who can make a difference for these children. Thanks for writing!! The poem is excellent. I wonder about the title. The power: a deafening groan.
Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your writing hit the spot for me Redtowrite. It speaks about the legacy that any of us can enter into as we take up the mantle of parenthood. At this late time in life it is working with the intellectually disabled who are teachers in eternal frame.
I like most of all how you build to a vision what raising a child of any age can lead to. A loving confident child destined to be a magnificent man.
I just happen to be the only man amongst women at our house working with five men. Your poem gives me hope. Thank you. Children are a gift from God of infinite worth.
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Review of Sleepy Hollow  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoy your version of the tale. I am thinking the name of the main character was Ichabod Crane, which I did not recall till I finished the poem, trying to remember who Crane was. The part I liked best began the second stanza. It seemed personally relevant not only to the story, but to our human predicament.

Beware the hoof beats
Of a horse not your own
Nor that of a boon companion
For the headless one still rides the night hollowly.

It seemed like a warning to us all to recognize our limit and realize from where our rescue might come in any situation
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Chris it is a joy to read your creative machinations. It reads in a super rational way. I like mostly the line
"electric revulsion of horror untwined
unrav'lling threads that consciously bind".
It reads in a very lucid way about how mechanical renderings can tie anyone of us in knots. I like the dictionary idea. What would a picture of this look like.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.0)
It was a fun read that left me reliving my own attempts at graceful movement in times past. I like the way the words dance off the page, uptempo frenetic displays. Your choice of words light the way to seeing the sculpted gems. I only found myself wondering about your choice of words at the end. An articulation of glamour seemed awkward. An articulation of glory may be another perception to explore. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tim, my take on your poem is that there is a seeking for the divine in nature. Isn't one's pureness a specialty throne", speaks as an invitation to discover and embrace God in the images of bird in flight, ridges with peanut butter laughter, a coven and birch filled with seed.(Potential)
My favorite sentence
Thy mercy be candles, so cherished and bright.
It left me hopeful, finding the image of God in creation could lead me to a better deeper appreciation of grace. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Very intriguing. I feel drawn into the story by the whistling sound that calls as if in a whisper. The storm allusions serve as preparation for a crisis of some kind. I lived this sentence "Shrieks of fury engulf the waves of faceless shadows consuming my mind." I like the atmosphere and ambiance of mystery, I long for the characters who can help me make sense of it all. I need to know more about the old man who slips into the narrative. Tx for sharing
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for sharing Tim. You offer in your poem an opportunity to choose heaven or hell. The answering of God is in contrast to the unending questioning and confusion that leads one from God. The idea of the martyred and demonized one as relating to Christ offers a passionate rebuke to all that would try to distract from moral truth.
It comes across as a parable of the reckoning of Easter resurrection in opposition to the shame of the cross.
"Belief in heaven's built up morals rose". comes across as ambivalent. How are moral's built up in a heavenly perception. Maybe belief in the potential of what it means for us to be humane in the light of the cross. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.0)
A fun read Tim. I especially hooked by the title about grief and solace, tomorrow resists. It is a reminder we can not put off grief. As a chaplain I saw many a patient anchored by unresolved grief.

I could share some of my own changes of wording. The dynamic you offer offers a lot of freedom to explore. The last words are confusing. It eats away at everything we womb and worship. Maybe want and worship. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Funny to look at Bear. It is one of those anthropological musings that faces one with the essence of humaneness. Is it possible that animals can teach us more about our skewed attempt at looking and acting human. I like mostly the groundhogs response to an end date of December 21st. And we think narcissistically we know it all. One need only observe a creature to see how they teach us.
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Review of Why in the World?  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Open Door To Grace ♥  
Rated: E | (4.5)
It is a fun read Joto Kai. In one of my first sermons I talked of how it is too easy to settle for a God in crisis to be, why not invite God to be with us in our joys. The truth stays with me even as I am healing from Covid. I can choose to focus on suffering and healing or look for joy inside that I can share with others. God bless
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Review of AN ODE TO TREES  
Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.5)
I immediately think of the tale the giving tree as I read this. Through the lens of a tree I might learn how to "leave" and learn. The poem flows and makes logical sense. Thank you Gupta for your qualitative assessment. Makes one want to hug a tree. Tx
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello lone Cyprus I loved the way you challenged you readers to make choices in accordance with integrity of being. I love the idea of the star fish story. It takes only one of us make a difference in taking care of God's creation. Why can't it be me,?
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well said Gulpta. There are so many masks that any of us wear that it can be difficult to be the person God created us to be. Beyond the message your poem flows well is easy to read. I like your ultimate question. So how do we even discern which are the empty masks that get in the way. God bless and keep writing.
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Anna Carlson, I sense a profound depth as to how you formulate something misunderstood by so many. Your writing is very poetic offering us invitation to the image of a waterfall of encapsulated tear drops leading one to a deeper kno
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Review of Day of Awakening  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello waynemart, thanks for your words for thought. I can recall my own dad telling me often to think for myself. I enjoyed the idea of waking up as if to finally discovering what it means to have a soul. In a pinnochio world finally becoming real. I left wondering if parents plant seeds in exploring the world of fantasy as escape in offering santa and the Easter bunny etc. I am well into my sixties and sometimes letting my mind be playful and dream is the only thing keeping me alive. Thanks again.
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Review by drifter
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thanks for sharing healing mind, the names of the Lord stir up an invitation to relationship. I would like to know what these names mean in relation to your own experience. I am a pastor by vocation. How do you take these names and make them work in the lives who need it most. God bless thanks for sharing!!
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Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Curious offering Leslie, it flows well and opens me up to enter a world that I have never known. I need to know more about what it is like to be a slave at the orphanage. I would like to know more how the men you talk about. In some ways it seems sinister and in other ways just curious. Good luck with uncovering the truth of your title.
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Review of Tomorrow  
Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello hunters moon. I am mostly drawn in by the image of a man that prays in the midst of the presence of children in the dark. It could be someone such as I that prays in hope for myself and the children I love so much.
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Review of Broken Pieces  
Review by drifter
In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Profound in scope healing mind. I catch a very spiritual depth and an invitation that allows me to discover peace that I have not known before. I leave wondering what it takes for me to trust. That is the bridge that I have yet to cross as a reader of your poem. What do I risk to let go. Thank you for sharing.
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Review of The Blue Apple  
Review by drifter
Rated: E | (4.0)
There is a creative niche in the metaphor of the blue apple. It speaks to me about that which is unique in my own perception and given the choice what will I do about this knowing rejection is the rule. So you let it loose for a a worm to devour. Does anyone care? Do I care?
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