I like that it tells you a story. I didn't understand it though. What the four words supposed to be used for? I thought it might be something to do with the freedom of The Untied States, then I though probably not. My apologies for not understanding. It was beautifully written.
I love your way with words. I like how I can picture what you write in my head as well. I also like how it doesn't rhyme. Keep it up. You are an excellent writer and I look forward to reviewing you again.
Not bad. I take it if I read it correctly. This is a story about a man thinking about a lost long ago, right? Or is it about a recent love? either way I believe that you got the feelings that you MC feels accurate, Ny sister said that she like the fact that you used matcha tea in your story.