Deep. I liked the light bulb analogy. Communicates certain emotive states well, like lonliness and resentment.. However i cant say i fully understand The spirit behind this i did, all the same, enjoy reading. Liked it 4
I could relate. Created an image of "tramping" in which the tired, and various, trampers retire to a hut in the forest sharing it with like-minded travellers. That's my reaction, re-read it, liked it 4
"Entwine garlands of foxgloves in our hair,
Racing across the states we discover"
was nice. You communicate a certain serenity and freedom here, that is what is coming through the most for me. Uplifting, light filled, engenders positive and welcome feelings. Highly emotive, looking good. 4.5
This was good. Im writing from this prompt at the moment. You do well. This was engaging and held my attention well.. I did not zone out but arrived at the end anticipating more. I liked this, worth the read 4.5
You have created a disturbing image and your theme was clear. Good flow and meter, second verse picked up good and was a welcome change in pace. I thought this was well written, dark, sinister, brutal, revealing. It communicated something of the shame and criminality that went on. 4
lol. Um. Was good. Ill just assume, for my own fragile mind, that your just an avid pogo stick enthusiasist. Again nice polished result, good delivery - no bumps in the road. This was short and sweet, solid. And funny. 4.5
I have reacted to this, but, should i share it? lol. Hrm. I found this playful. Provoking. Provocative. Feminist. I enjoyed it, like it was a game. Well that's how i reacted. 4
I almost feel like I havent the right to review this. To have an opinion.. If this were a sound it would be a loud bang and a shudder as it has genuinely moved me. Very good, not laboured, and, the reader did not zone out. I think, although im no poet really, it's freeform? In any case this is certainly one of the best poems I've read lately. Hear my prayer: I am poverty.. I hear ya! HUG! BIG 5
Very good. I especially like this, and, your opening verse. "dedicating this poem isnt as hard as it seems" was a meaningful and quite loaded statement i felt.. Very loving, very outward, very emotive. Clearly expressed with genuine words, i appreciated this one.. thanks 5
Sensitive and kind. Engenders great meaning. Had a feeling of maturity about it.. and.. a feminine theme.
You always produce a refined, perfected, result.. Thanks Timothy. 5
Haha. Very good. You really do have a way with words. Nice "sealed" delivery. From start to finish THIS was metered and engaging. Well worth the time, re-read it.. Love it.. 5
Once again very nice. Well communicated. Life is reciprocal, love is two way street. Thought provoking, got me thinking. I really do like your poetry Timothy. 5
I have re-read this short story. Very good. I believe it has potential and further reviewing and ammendments are to be had. Highly descriptive, whimsocal, fanciful and ORIGINAL. I encoirage other writers to rate this story, i feel it is worth our attention
Job well done Niels, keep it up! HUG!
Very clear, metered. Beyond the average read, worthwhile read, worth my time. No occasion to find fault. You are a practiced poet, and, a very good one. A pleasure to read.
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