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Review of To The Root  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (3.5)
Oh!It's a letter!I thought it's a competition.😁 It's good letter and I'm just got an opportunity to review. Well, I don't know about story mistress. Anyway, my head goes confused learning the rules and these angel,story mistress. Anyway, happy birthday to story mistress from me and thanks to Somik for writing a good letter.


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Review of Carry you Home  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (3.5)
This time ,this age is of greed for money, wealth, treasure. Everybody is running after money. It is fact. Fighting, killing, cheating, taking everything from one person by force, corruption. All this made the world a hell. Greed for money taken people to inhumanity, to the way of hell. People now don't have feelings for love for entertainment. They don't listen music, don't read book, don't watch movie. Only they see the money. This is very practical poetry. This tell of the time ,the age, what were doing, have forgotten all the great people, to respect, we've become shameless. This is very good poetry.


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Review of The ATM Heist  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
A scene of a mall,where people came in week end , to see, buy goods. Complete picture of a mall. But burglar? rather say robbers,looted cash from ATM and then breaking news. I think needed to go in a little more depth, needed to describe the incident in a way that can take a reader to the moment. To take away the attention.
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Review of Lament  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.0)
I never read telugu, cause I don't know this language, and naani.And it's also unknown that poetry can be of 4 lines only. But in this 4 line poetry, truth is found that pain sings or talk about the present and past.In whole life, we had our pain inevitable, and it hurts when the memories are awaken.


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Review of My Golden Days  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (3.0)
Golden days, yes , old is gold that we say. I don't know why the poet and I, and everybody on this earth ho have feelings,sentimental, think of the past. Give time to remind back, or sometimes it disturbs in head. Recently the world and situation of my country reminds me of my past, the golden days and I loose myself in the time that I left behind. The nostalgia ,that we say. Good poetry and I once again went to my golden days holding the hand of the poet.


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Review of Resolutions  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (3.5)
We, the human being, are of complexed type creature. Sometimes We do, think, and behave very strange. That is what the poet tried to tell here. For instance, the poet said, 'the way I take coffee in the morning', "this particular way of taking coffee cannot be changed, we won't like it to be changed but we don't feel it repetitive. Again, it's also true that sometimes we feel life is bored. And in case of mate of life, yes, sometimes the present relationship felt boring, sometimes we can't actually find out soul mate, that lasts for lifetime, and sometimes we make oneself fool ,go after cheap girl,and so many things, then again Pat on the forehead for paying price, and want to go back to the past where first felt bored. Good writing, it's long in size so needed the comment to be long.I am amazed really.


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Review of Photographs  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.0)
Jim Croce may be a singer, but I never heard of, though I am very much devoted to music. When beloved someone leaves ,only photograph and memory is left, then there is nothing to do other than cry. Feel the emptiness. And to start again, to be back in life, it is oneself needed to come out from the sadness.


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Review by proton69
Rated: E | (4.0)
Too hard English for other language speaking people, not efficient in English, to understand this poetry. But it's solid one. A love making time , a physical desire is the subject matter of the poem, which is defined as God's will by the poet. Don't need to say it is good one, but it seemed to me like the poet used the hard English to proclaimed that this is explicit content like adult sites does.😁


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Review of Unknown address  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
Our life, in this cruel world, really lost address, the destiny. Here money is top favourite thing. I heard a song in my boyhood. The theme of the song was about the price of human being , that decreased and goods and products have increased,now the thing left to do Pat on the forehead. We'll have to except quietly,and silently whatever comes in the future. Good poetry from somik, first ever read anything from him.


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Review of Brown  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
The poem is of Christmas time,the ending of year we know. Cold weather time. I am thinking when this 2020 will end and the ending of this worst time. Anyway ,the poet wrote this poetry not in this year ,I think. The year when no pandemic, so beautiful Christmas time, for drinking cider and beer, though we don't get this ,and we don't celebrate Christmas as we are Muslim. Any way nice poetry, good rhythm, just a way to be relief from the present worst time, that I never experienced in life.Santa Claus, leaves turning brown colour,hibernating trees,and the winter scowl the older,this is very bad, winter is very bad time for older, their suffering reach higher level for disease, And I'm also growing older. Any way , good poetry, to change mood for few minutes. I enjoyed.


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Review of Hi.  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (1.0)
Go on.


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Review of Don't Leave Town  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.0)
A story of family and social life.The story teller is the writer , who lived in a town adjacent to another. Going out was like entering another town.Thus the cities and the people's were related like family. A part of the story, and it's cool tempered and for quiet environment. Nice.


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Review of A Whole New World  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (3.0)
Love and the beloved.I never had someone, but I can feel. This is a love poem and in this how a new world starts to play within a person that is being told. I had not read much poetry in English. But here every piece of writing is amazingly beautiful.The feelings are expressed naturally so that it seemed every writer is in love.


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Review of That's the Ticket  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
We make wishes in our mind watching a falling star. Well that is a good question, why we don't make wishes looking toward our sun? It is a star. Is there really someone on other planet and make wish watching our sun? These are really good question. I don't want to wish for money, I hate money and my hair is straight too.Is the writer is a woman? Women's are crazy to make their hair straight and silky. Anyway, very good topic , mind refreshing, and my mind ,I'm feeling good.Poor parent's want their affectionate child become established,become a good professional, hard working and get rewarded. This is common picture.Good writing.


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Review of Experiences  
Review by proton69
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
Keep writing, you have the writing ability.I read almost almost all of your writing. Seriously take the writing. I've read your this poetry. Your thoughts are right.good rhythm.good poetry.And I am sorry for what happened in your life. Keep writing.


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Review by proton69
Rated: E | (3.5)
This poetry awarded first place. It had to be. A beautiful poetry. Poetry of love between albatross and the sailor who bartered his soul with a albatross. Albatross is a bird of sea , sentry of the lonely sky.Through conversation with the poet the huff or arrogance between sailor and albatross, comes out.
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Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
We the human being claim ourselves as the best species of all on earth,and really we are, but we do the misdeeds that even the other ignorant species don't. We have almost destroyed our planet for our greed,hatred,brutality. We now need to bring change, to some goodness. Good writing. It is hopeful that we started thinking about our misdeeds.


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Review of My thoughts  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (3.0)
I read the article an I just heard my voice. At present may be there are lots of people are thinking these things. I want to give a hand of friendship with the author. You can read my "war and peace"an d you can listen my song "let us make it heaven" These are the expression of my feeling.There are lot of things to say. It will be better if we chat through email.


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Review of Love  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
I would rather like to say the reason we existed. Now we are going to be perished for hatred.I want to remind those days of my boyhood,youth when people were of very different kind.Now through the world, especially people love money and wealth. There's no love for human being.Nice poetry and judgment.yoe we exist for love. That give us breath,hope, everything.good poetry.


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Review of A Slice For Elvis  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
The horse in the poetry, seems like rock n roll artist, named after Elvis presley and his handsome pose. He likes apple slice and treats like circus. But the poet don't like or want this. The poet don't expect he treat like circus. He wants to give him a snack as the necessity.A different and new theme in writing that I haven't found here before. Nice rhythm, good writing.


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Review of WHEN I LOST YOU  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (3.0)
MC Gupta, a writer from my neighbouring country, who's poetry I read here before. A good writer, and this piece two. Good rhythm, I like it. Picture is common for couples or lovers after separation with each other.One leaving another for new relation or to the eternity, hurts very much.Long time but good relation hurts.


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Review of Teke  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
Recalling the memory of grandma, this poetry is also beautiful and rhythmic.She, the poets was a fancy woman, she rode tricycle till she became eighty two,till she was stopped, She loved flowers.she died and at her funeral pink carnation was given.The poet received plenty of gift.The poet learnt gardening where was his own favourite fragrance.



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Review of whistle  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
Well! Whistling. What?Is this the moon ?Moon whistling?
Very nice gift .I wish I could use this for my personal need.It could be more thrilling if some tune was added to this Got.And what is it in the corner? A bird? Is she listening the whistle? Very nice but to make more interesting sound is need to be added.
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Review of Time  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (2.5)
It is not clear to me the poet here talked about the monster and it's type. Is this any physical or psychological problem or some kind of frustration that was demolishing hopes and dreams. But it's good poetry, good rhythm and happy to learn the present time is going fine.


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Review of Fire Support  
Review by proton69
Rated: E | (1.5)
Does mortar blasts making sound"kachoom""kachoom really?Ha ha very funny sound. It sounds like billion billion I think. If don't hurt or destroy anything let him fire.and his firing sound would be like "kachoom" "kachoom" and this sound will entertain.


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