I'm having a hard time writing this review because I'm holding my sides and howling with glee. Talk about dark humor, this is priceless. This is so funny I'm giving you five stars. Thanks I needed that.
I am your new member. You ask for a sample of my work. I could not refer you to anything related to Sci-fi so I posted nothing.
Now you will find the first chapter of a novella I wrote many years ago and lost in a computer crash. It is #2256726 in my portfolio and is called The Music Tree.
A fruitful imagination is behind these lines. Reminds me of Silverberg's story of the tatooed man who's tatooes came to life as he slept at night. Keep letting that imagination work. No telling what you will do in the future. Keep on writing.
I voted 'cease to exist'
However, I once read the personal testimony of a lady who was dying. She had never been introduced to Christianity in her entire life. As she was passing away the Lord Jesus introduced himself to her and told her she was dying. Then asked if she would serve him. She agreed and recovered. The testimony I read was her work to introduce everyone she could to Jesus. I suppose she is still out there somewhere telling folks about Christianity.
So, I suppose two of your questions may be correct. She was given a choice.
By the way the Bible does not support a burning Hell after death. A gross missinterpretation of the scriptures birthed that false doctrine.
Well written and flawless. You have a powerful imagination and a gift for sci-fi. I was captured instantly. If this tome was meant to stop here that is fine. But I do wonder where it would go if you choose to write on.
Your story is gliding smoothly along. You're still dropping words and phrases. Always go back and do a re read before posting. I'm enjoying your story as it unfolds. I'll be waiting for your next installment eagerly.
I really like this. The writer's job is to pull the reader in and make them want more tasty prose. The end of this piece made me want to know what happens after passing through that open door. I wasn't ready to stop reading yet. You made a great hook. In the eighth paragraph or so there was a sentence that caught my eye. You dropped the word 'about' and also used the word inconspicuous in an odd way. So I played with it a bit and came up with the word 'underlying'. I don't know if that is the best word to use there either but is the only thing I could come up with.
yet there was something familiar (about) him, and deep in my soul, I felt an inconspicuous sense of calm.
I'd like to see what happens on the other side of that door so please keep writing.
I love sci-fi. It takes a lot of imagination to dream it and to write it. Your imagination is going full tilt. I really like your work. I can't give you any pointers except to make it longer and let your story expand.
This is an excellent piece of work and well thought out.
As a Christian pastor and Bible teacher I understand exactly where you are coming from.
If you are still in the Dallas area I can help you find answers to many of those questions. Drop me an email and I'll give you some directions.