Hi!! I’m Rhymer, and I’m here to review your piece, "What Mask Do You Wear?" in association with "Invalid Item" .
Story and Creativity:
First off, welcome to WDC! As a newbie myself, I can testify this site, if you learn how to use it, will help boost your writing abilities to the best of your talent, and I’m very excited for your journey here!
I like what you did with this, how the darkness starts as soon as the eyes are open. The only critique I really have concerning the material is this: I think you can take it further. This is an excellent piece, but I feel like you know this subject better than you’ve expressed. It’s painful, it’s lonely…and please don’t take that as a negative…you have an excellent start here, and it wouldn’t take much for you to really push it, to delve down into the deeper, darker parts of yourself that aptly describe what this feeling is. Such a good piece!
Technical Aspects:
The layout is a little difficult to read, but honestly, that’s all I can find on a large scale. I’m not even holding that against you, and here’s why: WDC allows their writers more control over their pieces by using what’s called Mark-up Language, an easier version of HTML. That knowledge comes with experience, and that’s not your fault. Basically, I’m saying awesome piece, technically.
Summary:
I think this is excellent. I do believe you can dive into it, wring those emotions from your soul, but to be fair, that’s something I’m also learning. It doesn’t mean anything negative…it’s actually very positive, because it means you can do it! Just from what I’ve read, I already know you have it in you!! Such a good piece! Please, keep writing, because you have something there. And if you ever have questions, please feel free to contact me! So glad you’re here!!
With 😊, ❤️, and 🖋,
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