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My reviews typically cover: initial responses, technicalities and mechanics, favorite parts, areas of improvement, and overall impression.

I'm good at...

Honesty, and finding what works versus what doesn't work. I will never give you a rating I don't think your work deserves. I am also particularly good at spotting grammatical errors and typos.

Favorite Genres

Philosophy, Steampunk, Horror, Dark, Emotional, Science Fiction, Technology, and Political Science. I'm sure there are more that I'm missing.

Least Favorite Genres

Romance, Western, Religious, and anything froufrou.

I will not review...

Chapters and Novels, unless arrangements are made prior.

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#3105867

Review of Alone

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Alone"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Another great couplet. I think your rhyming is really good. I especially like how you used completely alternate spelling on some of the rhymes, instead of finding a perfect match. Like with vase/space. I've been exploring the poems in your darker poetry folder. You were right, some of them are really heart wrenching. Thank you once again for sharing these, I've been having a great time exploring your port. I think you should do more!

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#3105865

Review of Broken Glass

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Broken Glass"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I love the couplets here. My only suggestion is that perhaps you could put each couplet in their own stanza. Since the poem is not that long, I don't think it's a huge deal. For your word choice, this is excellent. Many powerful words float through your poem, telling us about this sad story: shattered, fragile organ, figure falling - Great job! Thank you for sharing this with us, I'm having fun looking through your port and excellent poetry. Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3105369

Review of Children In Costumes-Acrostic

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Children In Costumes-Acrostic"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I can't believe some of your stuff hasn't been rated or reviewed yet. As with the rest, I enjoyed reading this one and am glad that I have. I noticed with your others that you've used color to illustrate the vertical words, but you didn't with this one. However, you did bold it. I like the wording in this and how you've incorporated all the goodies of Halloween. Dracula, licorice, chocolate goodness treats, etc. A delightful read, thank you for sharing it with us!

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#3105364

Review of A Winter Wonderland

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "A Winter Wonderland"

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Another great Acrostic poem, I'm glad I stumbled upon this folder. I like especially how the blue jumps out at me, it was a really great choice. My favorite imagery of this was the penguins gliding on icicle sleds. How it turned darker with the orca strike was a good contrast of the real elements within a community in the wild. It turned dark fast, just like in real life. Thank you for sharing this with us. I hope you have a wonderful WDC Anniversary.

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#3105355

Review of Only My Shadow Moved

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Only My Shadow Moved"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I think the title (and vertical lettering) of your poem is great. Your word choice was also really good and I didn't feel like any of them were out of place or overly fanciful. I also enjoyed the way each 'stanza' fit each vertical word perfectly and that you kept same-like thoughts in each one. Overall, I feel this was a good read and it got me thinking. Thank you for sharing this with us and I hope you have a Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3105289

Review of Midnight Walk

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Midnight Walk"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I love everything about this. From the title, to the great word choice, to the way it was tied together to your voice shining through with every stanza. Your punctuation was great, I loved the structure, and can find no room for improvement. My favorite part of this would have to be the last stanza, but the entire thing was great. Keep up the excellent work and thank you once again for gracing me with your words. Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3105284

Review of REFLECTIONS

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "REFLECTIONS"

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I can say nothing bad about this poem. You did a killer job with punctuation, just reading the punctuation made my head spin. My only criticism is the title. I don't personally care for capitalized titles or titles that end with a period. Other than that, I thought this was superb. I really thought you expressed emotion well in this and used the poem to speak of reflections. Not just the physical sense, either. It's clear from looking through your port and reading this that you are a talented writer and everything is well deserving of the ribbons that adorn your port. Keep up the excellent work and have a great WDC anniversary!

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#3105223

Review of The Archer

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Archer"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I found this poem to be cleverly spaced out, I thoroughly think it does your poem justice. Great job on that aspect! For the words, I think they were meaningful and imagery-filled. I particularly liked: pulsing, rush of blood, and voice of birds. Overall I think you did a good job and I highly enjoyed this read, thank you for sharing it with us. I'm having a lot of fun peaking through your port. You're a very talented writer and it shows through with your remarkable gift at wording things. No subject seems too tough for you. Happy WDC Anniversary once again.

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#3105084

Review of Secret Keeper

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Secret Keeper"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Thank you for sharing this with us, I think you should keep up the good work. I thought your voice was consistant through the entire piece. Writing it from a first person point of view, you've managed to capture slang and good dialogue. Well done. My only thought on the technicality side of this is to watch your punctuation, paragraphing, and spacing. Other than that I'm not sure if I have much else to offer. Again, thank you for sharing this with us. If you decide to add anything to this please drop me an email as I would be interested in re-reading it.

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#3105060

Review of Freedom

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Freedom"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: The title's definitely fitting to the poem.

Word Choice: Your word choice here was superb. I like how you told this story and posed questions to keep the reader interested.

Structure and Form: This free-verse was well worded. I didn't feel the flow was disrupted.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I felt this was a pretty good poem. Thanks for sharing it with us, and keep up the excellent work!

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#3104957

Review of Sheep in Wolf's Clothing

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Sheep in Wolf's Clothing"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I love the title.

Word Choice: I loved your word choice. Some that struck me in particular: wild eyes, ovine miles, hypnotic silver.

Structure and Form: Sonnet's are a very difficult creature to tame, well done.

Imagery: It's packed with it. Every line, every part.

Overall Opinion: I can find no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing this with us, and keep up the good work. Welcome to WDC!

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#3104955

Review of Scared Stiff

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Invalid Item"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: Good title.

Style & Voice: Your voice showed through with this. I liked his slang, and the way he spoke throughout the story.

Scene/Setting: A perfect setting for a thrilling story.

Characters: Both characters were well played.

Technical: Some things I noticed:

Paragraph 5, I think the screaming should be in its own dialogue.

In some places you capitalize God, in others you don't. If you capitalize it through the entire piece, consider capitalizing Hell too.

Overall Opinion: I thought this was a pretty good story. It was more exciting in the beginning when we didn't know what it was, hehe. Thanks for sharing this with us, and keep up the good work.

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#3104931

Review of 'The Incident'

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "'The Incident'"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: Appropriate title, for this well written piece.

Style & Voice: You told this story very well and I felt your voice showing through your words.

Scene/Setting: I thought you did an excellent job, especially for dialogue only, describing scenery through conversation.

Characters: I felt like I knew more of Ms. Marsh because of the descriptions she gave to 'the men' - Good job here!

Technical:

Ms Marsh

Ms. Marsh (missed a few times)

Does 'The Incident' need to be capitalized?

Overall Opinion: Overall, I thought this was a very well written piece of dialogue. Good job!

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#3102357

Review of An experiment in short stories!*NEW*

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "An experiment in short stories!*NEW* "

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: Well, I can't really comment on this, yet. ;)

Style & Voice: I think you did a good job with voice and style. I like how you're unfolding this story.

Characters: I've never seen the spelling of 'Abby' done this way, is it pronounced the same? -- Well anyways, I really like the characters here, how they speak and interact with each other. Great job!

Overall Opinion: Overall, a pretty good read. Please let me know when you add more to this.

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#3102346

Review of Forever friend.

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Forever friend."

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: The title's alright, but I think it could use some proper capitalization. It also doesn't need a period at the end being it's a title and not a sentence. Forever Friend

Word Choice: Simple words, in a simply short bite sized poem. I think you picked your words just fine.

Structure and Form:

Keep watch on your punctuation.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I feel this could've been nicely expanded upon. With some careful watch of punctuation, this could be better. I honestly didn't feel very moved by this, despite the end. I was surprised to read the end, though, I didn't see it coming. If you decide to edit this any further, please drop me an email and let me know. I'd like to come back and re-read it. That being said, keep plugging.

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#3102339

Review of Ignorance

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Ignorance"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: I'm not sure I understand the title, with the plot.

Characters: I'm a little confused, are you telling this from a first person point of view, or from Zoe's point of view? Are you just referencing her? Either way, I feel sorry for Zoe, her emotions seem to be very mixed.

Technical: Some things I noticed:

I think your introductory paragraph needs a bit of work. I like how it starts off with a question, but I feel like your second sentence is a bit of a run on. Instead of Your hearts pounding really fast and feels like it could jump out of your chest... I think you should put something like, How it makes you feel like your heart is going to jump out of your chest, while your body shakes like a rattle snake... or something along those lines. I know what you're trying to do in this paragraph, but I think if you slow down and describe each thought in their own right separately it may have more of an overall affect.

In paragraph two, you quote "fear that is", but I think only quoting "fear" would read better. You're referring to the mood, y'know?

Keep watch on your punctuation. A lot of this is run on, and you "quote" an awful lot. I don't think most of the quotes are needed, in all honesty.

Overall Opinion: With some work, I feel this piece would speak to me more. Don't give up though, I feel it has a lot of potential. If you ever change this, please send me an email and let me know, as I'd be interested in re-reading/rating it.

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#3102333

Review of In the Beautiful, Tropical Keys

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "In the Beautiful, Tropical Keys"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: For some reason this title strikes me as being a little overkill on the descriptive side. I think even just Tropical Keys would work better, in my opinion.

Word Choice: I like your word choice in this. "In the beautiful, tropical keys" is a really catchy line and I like how it's repeated throughout the poem. I also like how you call Seagulls just Gull - That's what we call them here in Seattle.

Structure and Form: I can see the light rhyming structure you have here, and I think you did well. My only thought on this is that perhaps your poem may flow better with some punctuation at the end of each line. In poetry, you don't HAVE to capitalize every line.

For example, stanza two:
Angry waves pounded the seawall;
like drumbeats, they were not appeased.
Gulls flew to their nests ever screeching,
in the beautiful, Tropical Keys.

Did you mean to capitalize Tropical, too?

Imagery: I thought the imagery was really well done. You have the shoreline, the trees/buildings, and coral painting the lovely calming sea. I feel like I'm standing here with you looking out on this beautiful scene.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I feel this was pretty good! Keep up the excellent work.

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#3102328

Review of Frozen

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Rated: E

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Frozen"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I feel your title, while simplistic, fits the nature of your poem.

Word Choice: I like how you worded this. The first line of each stanza is great, I love how you exclaimed each to add more emphases. Other words that struck me: worldly chores, prosaic facts galore, precious possession of mine, encompassed glitter, and genetic flair.

Structure and Form: I like how this is free-verse, though I can't help but wonder how it would be if you followed a set of rules. With the first lines being exclaimed, and the last lines being questions... However, that being said, I feel you did an excellent job with describing each stanza.

Imagery: The imagery in this is great. You use good, strong, key words to support your thinking and paint us a picture of what exactly it is you're saying and contemplating.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I think you did an excellent job. You kept same-like thoughts together, which really helped with the flow of this. I especially like how you ended this with the ultimate question. I have no doubt that this is a great piece of work. I look forward to reading more from you, I expect we'll be seeing more great things from you.

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#3099851

Review of The Note

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Note"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: To the point and appropriate. It got me wondering what kind of note. A break up note? A grocery list? Some important instructions?

Style and Voice: Straight and to the point. Almost matter-of-fact. I really thought it was appropriate.

Word Choice: I very much liked the words here. I can't pick just one line or set of phrases, but if I was absolutely forced to I enjoyed how you reused the first stanza to mean something else entirely.

Structure and Form: The flow was pretty good, but here are my personal thoughts on meter:

Stanza 1, Line 1

This feels too long to me. Maybe you could cut out a syllable or two.

... Yup. That's it.

Imagery: This was good. I imagined this little note sitting on the counter with him eye-balling it.

Overall: Fantastic piece. Thank you for sharing it with us. I look forward to reading more of your work.

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#3099803

Review of Tales of the Raven: The Pilgrimage

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Tales of the Raven: The Pilgrimage"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: After reading this poem, I can definitely understand and agree with the title a lot more than at a first glance.

Style/Imagery: Wow, is all I can say. The imagery in this piece is just outstanding. I can't pick just one thing in specific. What a read! And still, your voice showed through in every letter.

Word Choice: I could never pretend to even pick out a favorite part with this, but some word combinations that struck me in particular are: a wolf and his wife, fur so immaculate, His bright black eyes were always merry, waddled and hopped, malevolent face. I could go on but I have to limit myself.

Structure and Form: Nothing I can say would do this piece any justice. I thought it flowed very well.

Overall: I rarely say it, but don't change a thing. It's very deserving of the beautiful purple ribbon it has. While this was a long read, I found myself pretty glued to it.

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#3099790

Review of Life after death

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Life after death"

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Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: I understand where this title came from, but I think with a different name it could be more personal to this story.

Scene/Setting: I felt the description of the car-wreck was okay, but with some fleshing out it could be much better.

Characters: I actually felt sorry for the characters, which is a good sign that this story has potential.

Technical: I think with some better formatting and attention to punctuation, that this would read easier. Until then, I honestly feel like it detracts from the story.

Overall Opinion: With some work, I think this has a lot of potential. Regardless, it was a good read and I'm glad to have read it. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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Review of The Empty Crib

Review by Riot

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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. This review is in response to your entry "The Empty Crib"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: This title definitely has a lot of meaning for this poem.

Style/Imagery: Sad imagery, very, very sad. The still of the night, the midnight sun shining, clouds... all represent what she feels inside as well.

Word Choice: I couldn't just pick one thing about this that moves me, as it does in its entirety.

Overall: This is a very moving poem, and thank you for sharing it with us. I hope you keep up the great writing. Welcome to WDC.

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Review of I lie in bed

Review by Riot

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title: The title's good, it only needs proper capitalization.

Style/Imagery: I really like how you presented this poem. I felt like I was experiencing everything that you were. The end was especially depressing.

Word Choice: Some words that struck me: laden breeze, gentle wind, golden ray, and {b]sprinkling.

Structure and Form: I really like this unique scheme you've used. Wonderful!

Overall: Thank you for sharing this. I highly enjoyed reading it.

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Review of Full of Grace

Review by Riot

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Full of Grace"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: I like this title and think it fits this terribly sad poem.

Style/Imagery: I think you did a really good job wording this. I can feel your emotions in your word. I sympathize with you very much.

Word Choice: I don't think you could've worded things better, especially on this delicate subject.

Structure and Form: Pretty great structure here. There were only a couple of places where I thought the flow was slightly off, but it didn't detract from the poem at all.

Overall: Thank you for sharing this touching poem and exposing those rattling nerves that must haunt you. Great job.

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Review of Talismans

Review by Riot

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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. This review is in response to your entry "Talismans"

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Title: I like the title.

Style/Imagery: The style of this is definitely not what I expected. It's not every day people write poems backward. But, because it was, I was forced to read it much slower.

Word Choice: The word choice was good, even though backward.

Overall: This was an interesting read, but honestly I'm not sure why it was done backward. I don't think it was bad backward, or anything, but it did kind of hurt my eyes straining to read it this way.

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