|Your writing is well done, however, there are a few things to tweak.
Your paragraphs should be kept to one idea. This will help the overall flow.
The pulse or cadence could use some interjection of dialogue, this is the most significant part that I see which needs attention, and readers will want to continue reading. Always remember, "Show, don't tell". You have a multitude of information and it must be cleverly interwoven with compelling dialogue. Having your characters speak can give your reader a sense of them without explanation.
Definately, split into chapters (which you have indicated).
The plot could also benefit from moving a conflict towards the beginning, subsequently, when the chapters are clear, the ending of one should leave a question in the readers mind, compelling them to read on.
Personally, a great story line.