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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting non-fiction story of one of your personal adventures.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors, but I have a suggestion: I think you should mention what state you live in, because some of the wildlife you mentioned doesn't exist where I live, in California. You did mention the clinic was in the state of New York, so that tells me you're on the East coast, but I think it would be helpful if you mentioned the state where you live, so people in other areas of the country can get an idea of the different types of wildlife in your neck of the woods.

What I liked: I liked that you went out of your way to help that animal. Most people wouldn't have gone through that much trouble if it would've inconvenienced them. You're a really good person!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute story that seemed plausible, as if it were a true story or based on an actual event.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I didn't understand why the other person wasn't climbing to the top with the protagonist, but I liked the athletic agility of the protagonist, the way he was able to jump down to the other person's level and back up again without any problem. That's how I was when I was younger!
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Review of Dear God  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This seemed to be a lamentation to God, and I think it was very well-done. You seemed to have it rhyme in all the right places, and the quality seemd to be equal to that of a professional writer. Greeting card companies hire people like you to write for them, and what those people do is no easy task.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors or room for improvement.

What I liked: I'm a Christian and I believe in God, so the work of any writer who assumes God is real appeals to me, because I know atheists who would try to mock me for my beliefs, so it's nice to read something from a fellow Christian.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting essay that describes the difference between the mind and the soul. I can't say I disagree with the assertions you made.

Errors/Suggestions: I'm not absolutely sure, but in the second paragraph, I think you should have "whose" where you have "who's" but I'm not an expert at grammar, so I'm not completely sure.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you mentioned God being responsible for the creation of your mind and soul, I'm a Christian and I agree with that view very strongly.
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Review of Pigeon Parade  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem about the behavior of different types of birds, and I found it interesting.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I thought it was interesting the way the fields were replaced by the shopping centers, and I also found it interesting when you described the behavior of the pigeons. I'm interested in knowing what the lesson was about the male pigeon who was dissed by a female and ten moved onto another; was it that males keep on trying and never give up?
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Review of Lavender Blue  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a fun and relaxing poem. Poetry isn't my strong point, so I don't know if there were any hidden messages in this poem, and I wasn't completely sure what you were talking about. I assumed it was about blue jeans and comfortable old clothes that were blue.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I liked the color blue you used for the letters, blue is my favorite color. Even though I wasn't sure if I interpreted this poem correctly, I still loved the poem!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You really wrote this from your heart, it made me re-think how I thought about Michael Jackson fans. Seeing how one fan felt about him was eye-opening.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you gave the personal impact MJ's life and death had on you, it made it so much more personal than if you had tried to give a more objective overview.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poll. It caught my eye, so I had to review it.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I was about 15 or 16 when I realized I liked to write, but I had tried it at 13 and liked it, but it didn't catch on until I was 16. I read a book about writing for television when I was 15, and that's what got me into writing.


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an amazing view into a day in the life of a United States Marine. My dad was in the Marines, so I'm always curious to learn more about it.

Errors/Suggestions: I don't know if this is a rule or not, but when I write twenty-year-old, I put hyphens in. Another thing, I think you switched back and forth between past tense and present tense. That's an easy mistake to make, I had a writing teacher in college point that out to me.

What I liked: I like the way you described what the various abbreviations were, such as staff sergeant (SSgt.) and corporal (Cpl.). Most people wouldn't have taken the time to explain that to the readers.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I don't think I've ever read a poem strictly about chess yet, but there's a first time for everything. You did a good job of writing about this subject, and you were able to keep me enthralled without boring me. Great job!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked how you were able to describe chess without getting too technical. That is soemthing that's very difficult to do, because I know that if I was writing about chess, I might get carried away describing the moves in too much detail.
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Review of Old Glory  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Plot and Content: This was a very well-written short story about a U.S. Marine who has seen some action. It seemed very realistic.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: My dad was in the Marine Corps. so it's always nice to read a story about a Marine. I like the message of this story, that civilians tkae freedom for granted, and we should really appreciate what men and women like this character do for us by serving our country. That's a really good message!


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Review of Tell Not A Soul.  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Plot and Content: It was an interesting poem, but I had trouble understanding what the poem was about. I know it must be obvious to people who are into poetry, but I had trouble understanding it. I assumed it was about suffering from depression, and trying to hide it from the world.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors, but a suggestion would be to have a paragraph at the bottom of the page telling people the meaning of this poem. You don't have to do that, of course, people can just e-mail you and ask, but it might make it easier for some people (like me) to understand the true meaning of this poem.

What I liked: I liked how you worked the phrase "won't tell a living soul" into each section of the poem, that was kind of cool!


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Plot and Content:This was a very well-written drama in the tradition of Alfred Hitchcock. The story starts out on a level most of us can relate to: being in love with someone who is unattainable; but it develops into an unfortunate series of events for the protagonist, who crosses a line most of us would be unwilling to cross.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked how ruthless this guy was, and I also liked the fact that he made a mistake that ended with getting himself caught, so that there would be justice for the crime he committed. Like I said before, this story reminded me of the Alfred Hitchcock show, and in that tradition, you did an exceptional job!


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Review of NOAH'S ARC  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Plot and Content: I thought the subject of your poem was interesting, and I liked the way you tried to make it rhyme. This poem was very visual, something that is difficult to achieve with a poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I thought it was cool that you made a play of words by describing a rainbow as "Noah's Arc." At first I didn't get it and I thought you had made a mistake, then I realized you were talking about the rainbow being the "arc" in the sky. I must've been stuck on stupid for a minute not to realize that right away. Excellent job!


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Plot and Content: All three of these poems had a theme of water and aquatic life, and they seemed to stay within the topic of the subject of these poems very well.

Errors/Suggestions: In the 5th paragraph of the first poem, I think I spotted an error. It says: "but whee are the fish pictures on here?" and I think it was meant to say: "but where are the fish pictures on here?"

And in the third poem, it says "place o swimming" and I think it was supposed to say "place of swimming."

What I liked: These poemns had a childish charm, like that of a child who loves fish and aquatic life and wants to write about it.


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Plot and Content: A well-written love poem that laments a lost love.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: Even though I usually don't "get" poetry, I like rhyming poetry the best! You did an excellent job getting your point across while simultaneously making the words rhyme. I like happy love poetry the best, but sad poems like this one are cool, too!


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Review of Our Beginning  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Plot and Content: This was a well-written love poem, you did a good job expressing the emotions associated with finding true love.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: Many times, people write love poems that deal with the loneliness of not being with the one they love, so it's a nice change of pace to read a love poem from someone who has found that perfect relationship. I like how you said your life has started since finding your soulmate, I would agree if I was in that situation.

---Ace


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Plot and Content: This poem reflects what many of us can relate to. Good choice of subject matter for a poem!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked the fact that most people were in this position at some time in their lives, being in awe of someone we had a crush on, but being unable to attain a relationship with that person. This is definitely something most people can relate to.

---Ace


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Review of She Walks  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Plot and Content: Excellent choice of subject! I love ghost stories, especially ones that are supposedly true. You did a good job of conveying all of the information about the ghost woman, so we know what the poem is about.

Errors/Suggestions: No real errors that I noticed, but you might want to put the title in bold lettering, I think it would look better that way.

What I liked: I liked how realistic it was, and the fact that it might possibly be a true story. Could you e-mail me back and let me know if this is based on actual events?

---Ace


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Plot and Content:This essay was informational and accurate. Most of the rating and reviewing issues were covered.

Errors/Suggestions: One area I see missing is the opposite problem of being afraid to rate an item too low: being afraid to rate an item with five stars when it deserves it. Sometimes I'll see a piece that seems like it deserves five stars, but I'll give it four and a half stars because I'm sure I must be mistaken if I think the piece is perfect. This problem isn't as common as being afraid to rate too low, but I think it does exist for some people who actively review. Some people are afraid to rate high, and I think you should deal with that issue in this article.

What I liked: I was happy to see that a problem I had when I first started reviewing was addressed: being afraid to give a rating lower than 4 stars. Usually I'm squeemish about giving an average rating when the piece deserves it. This is a problem I'm still trying to deal with today, and you did a good job of dealing with this issue that I'm sure many people can relate to.


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm Ace Corona, and this is a Simply Positive review. As a Christian, I was intrigued by the concept of a Christian novel, but I was baffled by the corruption of the church you described. I didn't understand why some of those men who ran the church and the seminary didn't believe in God. Still, it was a pretty good read, and I enjoyed it.

One thing I noticed that seemed like a flaw was when you were describing Willie's childhood in chapter one. You had him getting a perfect score on a test, but a little further on you said he didn't get good grades in school. If he tried to miss a couple of questions on tests to avoid getting a perfect score, then he still would've gotten Bs in school, at the very least. Maybe you should go through and edit this.

---Ace

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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm Ace Corona, and this is a Simply Positive review. I really loved this poem, I've never read anything here at Writing.com that affected me so personally. I think you did a great job re-writing the mythology of the Adam and Eve story, and you've joined a small exclusive club of people who have added to that story.

I personally believe everything in the Bible from the time of Abraham onward, but the Creation story of Genesis still intrigues me. I think you have the chops to become a professional writer, if this poem is an example of your typical work!

---Ace

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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm Ace Corona, and this is a Simply Positive review. I'm sorry that your father passed away, I hope writing this poem was able to give you some comfort. I think it's good that you offer an explanation at the end for not having punctuation in this poem, so people understand that you were following a prompt that asked you to not use punctuation; this should keep your poem from getting rated lower, because people can understand that it was meant to not have punctuation.

This poem describes a sad event, but I like the way it focuses on something positive, the mockingbird in the tree. I think you did a great job!

---Ace

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Review by Riverd0g
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This story is off to a good start, and I think it has a lot of potential. I feel that when someone makes an addition, it is up to the writer and owner of the interactive to go through and correct all of the mistakes the guest writer makes. I try to do that with all of my interactives, and I think you should do it with yours. One of your chapters was made by someone who made a lot of errors. It was chapter three, where the giantess swallows the protagonist. I think you should go through and correct the mistakes he made.

Other than that, I wish you the best. I saw this story linked over at Eka's portal, that's what brought me over here to take a look.

---Ace
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Review of Valentine  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm Ace Corona, and this is a Simply Positive review. You spelled the title at the beginning of the poem "Velentine," I don't know if that's intentional or a misspelling, but I thought I'd point it out to you in case it was a mistake. This was a pretty cool poem, you put a lot of heart and soul into it.

The only flaws I can see are where you use grammatically incorrect words, in order to make the poem rhyme. In the first paragraph, you wrote "I have never write," but proper English would be "I have never written," but if you used that, the words wouldn't rhyme. I've never seen a poem written in quite this way, but I can only assume that it is a technique I am simply unfamiliar with, since I know so little about poetry.

---Ace

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