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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and content: This was an interesting account of your personal experiences with cats. I'm a cat lover myself, that's what drew me to this article.

Errors/Suggestions: In paragraph 13, the last sentence is cut in half, with the second half on the next line down. You need to edit it and put the cursor next to where the first half of the sentence is cut off, and hit the delete key until the second half of the sentence moves back up where it belongs.

What I liked: I liked it when you described the kittens running at each other and jumping in the air. If I'm not mistaken, I think I've witnessed cats doing something like that.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and content: I was interested in reading your article about tennis because my cousin's boyfriend is a tennis instructor, and my cousin's sons all play tennis. I felt that your article was informative and inspiring. I'm interested in knowing what magazine this article was published in.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the fact that according to your article some people can experience weight loss. I weigh 250 pounds, so it would be nice to lose some weight. I walk 20 miles a week on a track, but maybe by adding tennis to my workouts I can make better progress with my weight loss goals.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Plot and content: This was a very creative concept, to take the problems caused by the human race and write a poem where we're analyzed by an alien from another planet. I think aliens might be looking down on us and judging us by how we live, just like your poem says.

Errors/Suggestions: You misspelled truly toward the end, and I think it should've said yours sincerely, instead of your sincerely.

What I liked: I liked how true your poem was, and I think we're both of the same opinion about how aliens might think of us.
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Review of Monotony in Rule  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Plot and content: This was a somewhat well-written flash fiction story of a dystopian future. It reminded me a little bit of a Ray Bradbury story I read called Fahrenheit 451.

Errors/Suggestions: Every story should have a beginning, middle, and end; this story seems to have a beginning, but no real resolution. It would be interesting to see if the rebellion is successful, but I guess tht might not be possible with a flash fiction story.

What I liked: I liked how this reminded me of other dystopian futures I've read about, like 1984 by George Orwell and Fahrenheit 451 by Ray Bradbury.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and content: This was hilarious, true stories from people's lives are always far more interesting than fiction. I have an Aunt who is afraid of mice, so I can understand how some relatives can be afraid of certain critters.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the humorous aspect of this story, I needed a good laugh today. Thank you!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Plot and content: This is starting to become an interesting story full of magic and warriors, I hope you keep working on it.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw quite a few spelling errors. You should go back and edit those. Also, you described Bartz as having a father who died when he was three, but then in the next chapter you said his father had gotten him trained to the level of a squire. This seems inconsistent.

What I liked: I like stories about worlds where magic exists, this reminded me of Dungeons and Dragons. It's off to a good start!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and content: You did a good job of describing the struggle of your protagonist. You set out to write a scary story, and you succeeded.

Errors/Suggestions: I wasn't able to detect any errors, but I did notice you used British spelling for a couple of words. I didn't knock any points off for that, although I'm accustomed to American English spelling.

What I liked: I liked how the things that were happening to your protagonist were things I could relate to from nightmares I've had over the years; such as trying to climb the sand dunes but not having the strength. You did a good job of describing a nightmare.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Plot and content: You really put your feelings and emotions into writing this poem, I agree with your point of view. I'd be interested in knowing how you came up with the word "Jack-en-ape" and what it means.

Errors/Suggestions: You misspelled "Satan" as Satin.

What I liked: I like the message of this poem, and I liked the way you made it rhyme. Some poems don't rhyme, but I like the ones that do.
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Review of Voiceless  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Plot and content: This was a well-written spooky little story, and it was sad what happened to Melanie.

Errors/Suggestions: In this line, there are mistakes: “We can’t always protect her, Bertha, he said.” “She’ll be alright. Just leave her in the Lord’s hands” I addition to there being no period at the end of this line, you messed up with the quotation marks. The quotatio mark after he said should be after "
Bertha," instead.


What I liked: I liked how much detail you wove into the story, and how vivid it was.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and content: This was an interesting slice of British history, you must've interviewed some older women in order to write about this time period. I'd be interested in knowing how you went about researching for this story.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked how believable the characters were; with Barbara as the antagonist, there was a sense of drama that wouldn't have existed if that character wasn't there.
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Review of My Love...  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a good love poem, written with a lot of passion. I like positive poems like this, about two people who truly love each other.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors.

What I liked: I liked how strong your emotions are for the person you love, it's something all of us can relate to at some point in our lives. I think you did a good job with this poem!


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a touching poem of the love of a son for his parent. Most kids don't show enough appreciation for what their parents have done for them; I hope you showed this poem to your parents.

Errors/Suggestions: The only errors I saw were words that were capitalized that shouldn't have been in order to be grammatically correct, but I didn't knock any points off because I felt these capitalized words fit the style and feeling of this poem.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you showed respect for your parents by writing this poem, I think you did a good job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)
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Plot and Content: This poem was short but effective, you were able to convey your point concisely, while leaving a lot to the imagination.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the way I was able to visualize in my mind the scene you were describing as I read your poem. You really did an excellent job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I'm glad to see that you found love later in life and wrote a poem about it, I've always believed that true love can be found at any age.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the illustration that accompanies this poem, it really adds a certain charm!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was interesting, I've seen a lot of shows where a dummy is the focus of the story, and stories where they come to life are always interesting to me. This kind of reminds of that old Twilight Zone episode about a ventriloquist and a dummy that comes to life, but in your story the ventriloquist stays in control.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how persistant the dummy is, and it was kind of funny how he insisted he was the star of the show.
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Review of The Fish Tale  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I've tried writing stories with 55 words for the New Times weekly newspaper in San Luis Obispo, so I know how hard it is to accomplish this feat. You were able to tell a story about an event with characters and a setting, and there was a conclusion to the story. I think you did a great job!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked the fact that you were able to tell an entire story with so few words. To get it to be exactly 55 words must've been a painstaking process!
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Review of Jake and Bagheera  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: At first I thought this was a joke, or animals living in a cartoon world, but as I read on, I saw that the scenario you wrote about is indeed plausible. I guess at first I thought the animals had human-like abilities like a Tom and Jerry cartoon, but I quickly saw that this was a serious story about a guide animal. I think you did a good job of looking into the life of a disabled person. Excellent!

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no spelling, grammar, or punctuation errors.

What I liked: I like how the animals in Sheila's life fit so well into her routine. They really seem to make a difference. I would be interested to know if any of this is based on someone you actually know.
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Review of The pain within  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a well-written poem of your suffering, and even though I can't relate to it, I think you did a good job of expressing your feelings. I only hope that you can rise from your depression and achieve happiness some time soon.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked how eloquently you expressed yourself, you used a lot of big words.
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Review of Solitude  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting story about the point of view of a character I wouldn't normally be able to relate to, because I'm a single man with no kids. (At least not yet, maybe some day.)

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the drama toward the end of the story when the protagonist wasn't sure if the kids had arrived on the plane. That was good stuff! I'm also glad there was a happy ending.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a good subject for a Halloween poem, Edgar Allan Poe wrote a short story about someone who thought he was being buried alive.

Errors/Suggestions: You spelled out interment, but I think you meant internment. You left out an N! Also, I think it would be good for you to mention how well your poem placed in the contest you entered.

What I liked: I liked how nonchalant the narrator is telling the story, despite being buried alive. Very entertaining!
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Review of The Pirate's Love  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I could actually visualize the story you were telling with this poem, I think you did a fantastic job!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like poems that rhyme, and you did a good job telling an interesting story and making it rhyme properly. The subject of the poem was also interesting. Pirates are cool!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: A birthday poem from a friend must be a lot more special than a card you can get from a store! It was nice of Saph to write this for you, he did a good job.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked how personal this birthday poem was, you must have some really good friends here at Writing.com!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: For a spoof, you did a pretty good job. I've never seen the actual film this spoof was based on, but I get the idea.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked that this spoof was rooted closer in reality than many spoofs. Having John killing people in real life may have been fantasy, but some of the other things that took place were more realistic than typical spoofs I've seen.
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Review of White Fire  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a very upbeat poem about winter, which is a nice break from the darker poetry popular during wintertime.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the scene I visualized in my head when I started reading this poem. I live in southern California, so I haven't seen snow in many years. Thanks for sharing such an alluring image.
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Review of Men in Black  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: Flash fiction stories can be the most difficult to write, because you need to say so much with fewer words. I think you did a good job with this story, and you used your prompts wisely.

Errors/Suggestions: You have the word count listed twice.

What I liked: After reading the words you were prompted to use for this story, I was interested in finding out how creatively you would use them. When the woman hit her husband with the yardstick, I actually laughed out loud at that moment; I thought that was well-done. I also thought it was funny that the hick's wife had made huckelberry pie, that was a good choice for a hillbilly to make.
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