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Review of Father's Day  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You did an excellent job of informing us of the history of Father's day with this piece. I just had to review this to celebrate Father's day! Sonora Smart Dodd was a dedicated woman to spend so much time trying to turn Father's day into a national holiday. I always thought June was chosen as the month for Father's day because it immediately followed the month that Mother's day is in, May. I didn't know it was because Sonora Dodd's father's birthday was in June. You educated me!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors or areas that need improvement.

What I liked: I liked how informative this article is!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You raised an interesting question with this poll. Personally, I don't think the software companies are responsible, but I don't think it's impossible that a software company might stoop to doing something like that. I chose they're not responsible; until I see evidence proving otherwise, that's my viewpoint on the subject. I think it would be interesting if a software company ever got caught red-handed creating viruses.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked how creative this poll topic was. I saw it on the main page and clicked on it because it was so interesting!
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Review of A Dis-Ash-ter  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a poem about losing an old friend, but the friend turned out in the end to be a tree. If this tree meant that much to you, then losing it was like losing a true friend.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the surprise of finding out that the old friend you lost is in fact a tree! I'm glad it wasn't a person.
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Review of Reveille  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting story, I love science fiction. The problem with this story is that it doesn't seem to have a solid conclusion, your protagonist is just left hanging. I think it would be good to write a better ending, or write a second chapter to this and provide a link to it from this story.

Errors/Suggestions: In one of the final paragraphs toward the end, you have: "The numbers didn't quiet add up, and I think "quiet" should be spelled as: quite." In the next paragraph, you have: "The artefact" and I thnk that's misspelled, it should be spelled as: "artifact"

What I liked: I liked the futuristic stuff you described the future military as having, it was cool!
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Review of Never Alone  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was short but sweet! I like the message of this short essay, and as a believer, I totally agree.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the message, and I liked the fact that you are a believer, just like me! I like it when I read stuff written by Christians.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: Your life story is interesting and inspirational. I think it's good advice for a writer to read as well as write, even Stephen King recommends that.

Errors/Suggestions: There is a place where two paragraphs run together, you should separate them with a blank line between them. Also, if you're a writer, it might be interesting for you to tell us about any stories you might have had published.

What I liked: I lik that you were a favorite author at a writing site, it's too bad it closed down.
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Review of Switch  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: A misunderstanding leads to a misadventure. I like how you set the story up; Bryce and Chloe got their Blackberries taken away for a reason seemingly unrelated to anything, but it led to some drama and the climax. You did an excellent job!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors, but I saw that the word blackberry was put in bold lettering twice; was this story written for a contest? If so, you should mention the contest and tell us how well you did.

What I liked: I loved the surprise ending!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an article about balancing study time with the demands of life. That is a scarifice that many of us must make when we go to college, because our personal lives aren't put on hold while we study.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors to report.

What I liked: I liked how relatable this article was to my own life. I live with my Aunt and Uncle, and I have chores that demand a lot of my time when I would rather be reading or studying.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: You wrote about deep writing, a technique for making stories have more meaning. I'm favoriting this item so I can go back and read it again and try to absorb what you are trying to teach us.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I like the fact that you are trying to teach people to be better writers. Some of what you wrote went over my head, but I plan on re-reading it to try to learn something.
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Review of Wiener Factory  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was a horror story about pigs in a weiner factory taking over and killing the plant manager.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I thought this was an interesting horror story, I liked the way the tables were turned. Although the events of this story are kind of unbelievable, I've seen stories like this get published before, and even Stephen King has written short stories like this that deal with horror/fantasy of this style.
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Review of Nature's Voices  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a poem about the sounds of nature in an environment untouched by man.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the way you made this poem rhyme, rhyming poems are my favorite. I also liked the image your poem conjured up in my mind, a beautiful forest area with the sounds of nature.
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Review of Daeva  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I saw this story advertised in the sci-fi writer's guild forum, so I thouight I'd take a look. This was a decent first chapter of a story about a man who lives during a time of interstellar civilization. You did a good job of writing about the technology without info-dumping. The actions of the protagonist were believable and consistent.

Errors/Suggestions: In paragraph 11, it says: The many laughed sharply. “I think everyone’s heard of Hamistagan.
I think you meant to write: The man laughed sharply.

What I liked: I love stories that take place during the Interstellar Age. Some of Robert Heinlein's and Isaac Asimov's best stuff took place in an age of interstellar travel. I could actually imagine that I was reading your story from Analog or Asimov's magazine; I think you did a good job and I think you have talent.
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Review of About MathGuy  
Review by Riverd0g
Rated: E | (5.0)
You're an interesting guy, and your choice of favorite authors is good, but I'm surprised there's no mention of Robert Heinlein! I thought all of us sci-fi geeks loved his work. I liked what you said about your cat, that was funny. I live with my Aunt and Uncle, and they have two cats that we love, also.
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Review of Out of Time  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a very well-written science horror story (I almost wrote "science-fiction" but this could really happen.)

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors, but a suggestion would be at the bottom of the page telling us what contest this was written for. Personally, I would be interested in knowing.

What I liked: I liked the personality of this story; instead of just listing a sequence of events, you wrote it out with your own unique sense of style, and I like stories like that.
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Review of Blue Bird  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: If your goal was to write from the perspective of an animal, you did a nice job! Birds are nice animals, that was an interesting choice; I probably would've chosen a cat or a dog, because I'm more familiar with them. The way you wrote this, I could actually believe you were a bird.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors, and I really am not a good judge of poetry, so I can't really point out any suggestions.

What I liked: I liked how believable it was that you were a bird with this poem.
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Review of Emily's Room  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: An amateur writer could learn a lot from you, the way you write is very skillful. I think I'll favorite this item to read it from time to time so I can learn to spice up my own writing!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked how your story had personality. Instead of just describing Emily smiling with flat words, you used imagery that livened up the scene and made it more interesting!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This seemed like a very personal article about a subject most of us can relate to. I'm a guy, so I don't get as emotional as you described in this article, but I have a deep appreciation of music also.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I liked it when you mentioned your Celtic origins, I find learning about people's ancestry interesting.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Summer is my favorite season, but Spring is my second favorite season because it comes just before summer. I like poems about spring, it's really a great time of year. Your poem really captured the majesty of springtime, I could visualize the things you wrote about.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked the contrast of the effects of winter you described compared with the effects of springtime. I liked this poem!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is possibly the best poem I've eer read, in my opinion. The fact that it is an acrostic makes it a cut above most poems. I find it amazing that you could take the first letters of the word wonder and make a sensible poem out of those letters.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I like the higher quality of this poem, it is more well written than most poems I've read.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was a well thought out and well put together poem. It reminded me of my own childhood. This was a really fun poem!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked the scenes I visualized in my mind as I read this poem. Spring time is an interesting time to write a poem about, it's full of promise and possibilities.
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Review of Starting Over  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This acrostic was well put together, and it reminded me of things that are going on in my own life that I could apply this to. I'm going to be starting college in the Fall at a new college, and I plan on doing better there than I did at the other college I went to in another part of the state. This acrostic was very inspirational to me!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the positive message of this acrostic, and I like the fact that you mentioned God.
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Review of Autumn  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: This was a decent homage to Autumn, one of the reasons I like Autumn is because that is football season. It was interesting to see a countdown poem in all its glory!

Errors/Suggestions: In the third line, you have a space before a comma that needs to be corrected.

What I liked: I liked the way you explained what kind of poem you wrote at the end. A lot of times I tell people that when I review their poems, that it would be cool if they added a description at the end to tell people more about what kind of poem they wrote. It helps those of us who are poetry illiterate!
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Review of James  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an action-filled short story, it was kind of cool! It reminded me of the old west.

Errors/Suggestions: My suggestion is that you should have put the three prompted words in bold lettering when they appear in your story. I've seen other writers do that when they do this kind of a challenge.

What I liked: I liked the action and drama of the two guys fighting each other.
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Review of Innocence's Blood  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Wow! This was a shockingly sad story. I really felt sorry for this girl. It just goes to show that a woman should be aware of who the father of her child is, because not knowing who a child's father is can be devastating to the child.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked how shocking this story was, you set out to write a sad story, and you did a good job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and content: This was a cool supernatural story. The boy's ability reminds me of a comic book character called Doctor Strange. In that comic, this ability was called astral projection. It's an interesting power, and I think you should write more stories of this boy's adventures.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors. My only suggestion would be if you wrote a sequel to this story, you should post a link to it at the end of this story.

What I liked: I liked how he was able to see the smoke and flames without being overcome by them. This made it feel like he was projecting his astral form, which is indestructible.
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