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Review of SIR TOM THUMBE  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: It's nice to see a size-changing story. I write giantess stories myself, so it's nice to see a mainstream writer such as yourself trying to write a story like this. I think you did a good job!

Errors/Suggestions: It would've been nice to see him get swallowed by a woman, but that's just a suggestion based on my own personal preference.

What I liked: I like the references to European legends, like Merlin and King Arthur. It added a certain flair to the style of your story!
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Review of Ties That Blind  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Rarely have I read a poem so well put together as this one. I think you did a good job with the words in italics in between the actual lines of the poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I like how you can take something as distasteful as rape and put it into a poem that draws attention to a serious issue without cheapening it or sensationalizing it. I think this is a high quality poem.
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Review of Waves  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I think you did a good job of using a metaphor of something that happened to you to describe your sorrow; it really conveyed the intensity of your emotions.

Errors/Suggestions: The only error I can see is that the first word of the poem isn't capitalized. I don't know if that's important or not with this type of poem, but I thought I'd mention it.

What I liked: I like the metaphor you used, it really gave credence to the feelings you were experiencing. I hope you feel better!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I think it was a cool idea for you to create this group and this forum, so those of us who have concepts we're already working on can jump-start our projects and breathe life into them again.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors, and I can't think of any suggestions.

What I liked: I like the fact that we can work on ideas we already started, this is very unique, and I hope to do it every year during Nano!
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Review of Auto-Bio Poem  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an eclectic group of poems, but I noticed some mistakes.

Errors/Suggestions: In the first poem, you misspelled organized. In the second poem, you wrote: "tat bloom all over" and I think you meant "that." You wrote: "Lutheren" but I think it's spelled Lutheran, and you wrote: "I'm from NE and mountais" and I think it's supposed to be "mountains." In the poem "Poetry is" you wrote: "Hidden iside rocks" and I think it's supposed to be "inside." That happened twice in that poem. In the poem "Silent night" you wrote: "the full moon comes out rom" I think it's supposed to be "from."

What I liked: I liked the last poem the best, the one about fiction!
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Review of Witch Trials  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: Really interesting story just in time for Halloween! It's really sad that innocent people were accused of witchcraft, whenever I read about the Salem witch trials, I feel glad to live in a time where people aren't superstitious.

Errors/Suggestions:In one paragraph you wrote: "Some of the townspeople had opposed to the trials," and that seems like an error. I don't know if you were quoting your source verbatim, but I thought I'd point it out.

What I liked: I like how meticulously you researched this! You really got in a lot of good quotes.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a hilarious story, it's amazing how true stories are much more interesting than fiction. Thank you for sharing a private and embarrassing personal anecdote about your life.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors. My only suggestion would be to add the decade this occurred, because as far as the reader knows, it could've happened in the 1950s or the 1980s. Personally, I was curious about when this happened.

What I liked: I liked the fact that this story was true!
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Review of My World  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting article about a modern day farmer living the life of his ancestors. It was interesting!

Errors/Suggestions: In the first paragraph, you misspelled fourth, you wrote it as "forth." You also forgot to put an apostrophe in the word fathers. In the fourth sentence, the word "My" should be separated by the preceding period by a space. In the second paragraph, it says: "Along with the old,there" you're missing a space between old and there. I don't think there should be a comma between the words long and fought.

What I liked: This was a good article that showed that farmers are still around and going strong, following in the footsteps of their ancestors. I'm glad to see you're doing well, and I wish you the best!
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Review by Riverd0g
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm looking forward to joining this group, I wrote a short story called "Megawoman & Goddess-Girl" and I would like to turn it into a screenplay. Nanowrimo is the perfect opportunity to do this, and I like your group because it allows those of us who have already started on our story to revamp it, and improve on it.

I have an idea for an original novel that I've had for almost ten years, and I thought about working on my new idea and my Megawoman idea simultaneously, but I decided to just work on the Megawoman story, so I don't get burned out. Thank you for creating this group for us!

---Ace
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Review of I've Been  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a pretty cool poem, and it's true what you wrote about. I can relate to this poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked the theme of this poem. Poems with a message are one of my favorite types of poetry. It's like you're imparting your wisdom to the readers.
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Review of A Possum's Story  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a fascinating true story deserving of five stars! I live with two cats, so I can relate to your love of animals.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I love the way you developed a friendship with a wild animal; most people would be scared of it, and would try to get rid of it. This tells what kind of a person you are, you're a very special kind of person.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is the first collage poem I've ever read; I didn't know it was an art form to take clips from magazines and put them together in a new form.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I like the creativity you used to compile this poem, I normally don't "get" poetry, but I appreciate your effort with this poem.
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Review of The Beast  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a good story just in time for Halloween! I was hoping the Simply Positive group would choose some scary stories like this for the month of October, and this story didn't disappoint me.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors.

What I liked: I liked the ending, I didn't expect it. I also like the fact that you used only dialogue for this challenge; I think you did an excellent job!
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Review of The Teddy Bear  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a very sentimental short story, kind of sad, but I think you did a good job.

Errors/Suggestions: In the second paragraph, "mothers pain" should have an apostrophe between the "R" and "S" in mothers.

What I liked: I liked the emotions this story evoked. The young woman seemed very real, and I felt her pain. I think you did a very good job!
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Review of Ariadne  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I don't really understand poetry, but I'll try to do my best to review this poem. I thought this poem might be about a relationship. I was curious if the journey you wrote about was metaphorical, or if it was based on an actual journey.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors, but I thought you were a guy, so I was curious why you used Ariadne to represent you, since she was a female character.

What I liked: I liked a journey used as a metaphor, everyone likes to go on trips, so it's fun to think about.
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Review of To the Rescue  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was a cool story about a grandmother and her grandson. I used the new random story tool for the first time, and your story was the first story to pop up, so I'm reviewing it.

Errors/Suggestions: In paragraph 8, there's a comma that shouldn't be there. It says "Did you ever wonder, why?" and I think it should be: "Did you ever wonder why?" Also, in paragraph 19, you left out an "e" in the word someone.

What I liked: I like the fact that the faeries turn out to be real, and I love the way the grandmother is sharing her secret with her grandson. My grandmother told me stories like this when I was a boy, so I'm glad you're continuing the tradition.
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Review of Fiery Red Hair  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting piece concerning death. I didn't understand if this was the woman's fantasy, or if there was a fantasy element and something supernatural was going on, like in a Twilight Zone episode.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: I liked the feelings you evoked when you wrote about that earlier time, that was an interesting period in history.
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Review of Mental Circus  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: A nice little poem, and a nice play on words. I have a little bit of difficulty reviewing poems, because I'm not into poetry, but I think I got the feel of what you were trying to say with this one. Good job!

Errors/Suggestions: I think you should make the title of this poem in bold lettering. This isn't important, but I think it is a nice little touch that would make the poem look nicer.

What I liked: I like the title, mental circus is a nice play on words.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a decent little love poem, you really show the emotion behind how you feel about the person you're writing about.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I liked the passion you showed with this poem, you must really love the person this love poem is directed to. Good job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Writing a flash fiction story is a challenge, I've written stories of less than a thousand words and had to cut the story down, so I can only imagine what it must be like to write a story of only three hundred words.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: This was a cute story, and it seemed very realistic. I think you did a good job, and you deserved to win the contest!
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Review of Thoughts on life  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem, and I found myself agreeing with the theme of this poem. Many times in my life I have strove to be something that I am not. It takes a lot of life experience to figure out what we want to be in life.

Errors/Suggestions: In line two of paragraph two, after the word growth, you have a comma that has no space after it.

What I liked: I liked the message of this poem, that we should not try to be what we are not. I like the part where you said to know your destiny is to be divine; that makes sense to me. You seem very wise!


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Review of Silent Seduction  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting love poem written from the female perspective.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors.

What I liked: It was interesting to read a poem that shows how a female reacts to the man she loves. As a guy, it's easy for me to forget that women react differently than we do. You did a pretty good job, and I liked how you had a lot of words that started with the same letter.
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Review of Music of Love  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting love poem. I think it was well written.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't see any errors, but I was confused because your name is Nikola, but the poem was written from a female perspective. I thought Nikola was a guy's name.

What I liked: I like the mood your poem evokes; the language you used sets a very romantic scene in my mind as I read the poem. I think you did a very good job!


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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute Christmas card, and it was a nice surprise at the end to find that it was written for a dog!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't notice any errors in the poem, but there is an invalid item linked at the beginning of the item. I think it was a good idea that you had the photo of the dog at the end, so people understand that Gus is a dog.

What I liked: I like the fact that someone would go through so much effort for a pet they love.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Isis was a goddess in Egypt, and Egypt is in Africa, so Isis is important to African-Americans. I suppose you already knew that, but just in case, I thought I'd tell you. Isis is a very popular goddess. There was a TV show on Saturday mornings about her when I was a boy in the 1970s.

Errors/Suggestions: I saw no errors.

What I liked: I like the way you got all of the first letters of each sentence and had them spell out Divine Mother Isis. The sentences of the poem correlated with the message of the goddess you were writing about, and it made sense.
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