I really liked this. Being part of the In and Out I got this from, where you recently placed it. I like your story, somehow I enjoyed India's stories where I was very young in the States. My huge love for a Houghton-Mifflin book entranced me and the only thing left to recall is, it had a Hippotumus on it and the children's verses were gorgeous. The stories about Joseph were real to me, it was quite smart for a young audience, you didn't wade through pictures so the type might have well been good for my eyes at that age, to pick up for spelling and so on. Gee, I even recall the Talking Yam, was IT good. Happy Holidays from DeeMac's group,
just ~vicki
Thought I'd wind my way to your port, Megan. This particular item gives you such support, it is well- written to me in such lines as:
Heaven is alot better world. So peaceful,perfect, and beautiful
where Great-grandma sounds this way. You have again given me a good sense of what it takes to write to that Certain Wanted Audience in a Port. Best Regards.
Poignant and well-done. Brecken? It must be an interesting place, haven't heard of it. I like the illusion to "war" and the rhyming lines. Your long lineage works because you are consistent with it, it works. Luck in the contest you entered. Best Regards.
I liked the way you gave us a certain tone with a tough situation. Could the paragraphs be cleared up to where there is less a "busy" pararaph and break it down to more of them? Perhaps? I enjoyed it. Best Regards.
Wonderful. A winner with greatly selective verbal moments. Celebrative. The lines go into flowing other lines and the poem really works. I like the way you broke up phrases and detailed the poem. Certainly, a timely piece. Congrats for winning contest. Best Regards.
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