I'll give a perfect score to this one. It has such depth in it's moving message, the love the man has now will probably last as long as the first. It was the way you told this one that kept the reader in suspense. This one was very good. Best Regards.
Just a great poem. I love your style here, it's something I work with as well, "abstract" in its content, perhaps? I can tell it was really worked on. The wealth of meaning and the "form" is flawless. I'd bet on this one. I won a few at her contest and find "Stormy" one of the best ways to know if you can sustain. Even though this did not win, it might well should have.
Clever, imagery. This poem has it all. I liked your lines, each one was filled with what you might be able to "feel"; the line "Press not my lips with befallen heart inside" proves the worth of that. I really liked it.
Good lists. Good supportive material for us. I will take into consideration all of the items you offered and try to make head-way with future poems I might do. These steps truly do implement better poetry. I can't deny that the stronger the poem, the more usage of good ways of using devices has been sed.
I felt you gave us a very good picture of what Sensory can mean. I even found the lists to be good words to use, if one did not have a thesaurus at hand. Poems can appear dull if not prompted by the senses. Nicely done.
Excellent, excellent, excellent! I will continue with your Newsletter this week soon and finish all of the items offered. The Newsletter itself has a heightened sense of awareness which gives you that sensibility toward poems. I liked this item for its complete listings. Best Of Regards.
Saw this in the Poetry Newsletter Nicola, this week. A very realist-look into a poet, here. I liked your form and depth. Painfulness can be shown here, too. And it is appropriately done well. Romance-too, for it can not be forgot. Best Of Regards.
Good acrostic. Saw in the Poetry Newsletter. I think it's wonderful about your book being in Amazon.com. I love your Stoerom's and you are great here at the site. Anyway. Luck in the future. Best Of Regards.
I think you have an excellent, excellent piece here. You need to "clean it up" perhaps and give yourself more form, if you want to revise something. Your character "Romeo" is not only poetic, but charming, and I loved your adventurous romp you took with us as readers with him. Much was said here. It remains the best part of the piece, I think. If anything, the formula for better writing, is keep with tradition in some respects although you can get away with much by adding "inner dialogue" to a paragraph without really USING traditional standards. I like this piece, it is why I reviewed it the way I did. Good content. Good characters. Best to you.
~victoria
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Thoughtful piece again. It delineates the "mind and soul" as identities, which when materialized on the page make us think of "psychology". This is a bit like a "dreampiece" I did. Do you wonder of dreams? Just asking. Let's say: good job. Best to you.
~victoria
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Such a good piece! Thoughtful, provoking conflict that really exists! You could break it up into more paragraphs but it's okay as it stands, it might have been what you wanted to do. You action in it is well- written, the theme right-on-target. Best Regards.
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