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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Dear Word Warrior;

I adore self-deprecating humor, and yours is divine.
I think I like your version of What A Wonderful World better.
Who wouldn't love their dogs saying goodnight?

The Misheard lyric syndrome abounds in my family as well.

My husband misheard CCR's Bad Moon Rising "Bad Moon Rising"
what he misheard.."There's a bathroom on the right".

My daughter sang the Holiday classic "Santa Claus Comes Tonight", line
"all is merry and bright", as "Old Maryann Bites", much to the chagrin of
her Grandma Maryann.


I think most of us who heard the Bee-Gees lyrics have misheard most of them.
The misheard "bald-headed woman", could actually be pretty awesome if your girl is bald.
"Bald-headed woman... bald-headed woman to me"
Artist: Bee Gees
Song: More Than A Woman
Real Lyric: More than a woman... more than a woman to me

For the Man_Cavers who risked listening to The Bee Gees...
Many misheard Staying Alive as ,"Steak and a Knife"...
"Ah!-Ah!Ah!-Ah!...Steak and a knife!", ....and some A-1.

With Mick Jagger, You're pizza will never burn...
Because he promised us in "Beast of Burden" that he'll
"never leave your pizza burnin'". Neva-neva-neva...fo' sho. That pizza is safe!

Song: Beast Of Burden
Real Lyric: I'll never be your beast of burden.

Elton John's misheard lyric's reign supreme.....
Real Lyric: Sons of bankers, sons of lawyers
The misheard: Some with cankers, some with goiters

While most of us were Addicted To Love, Some were just dicks with a glove.
Artist: Robert Palmer
Addicted To Love

The misheard: See that girl, watch her scream, kicking the dancing queen
Artist: Abba
Dancing Queen

Wow. Can you dig that scene?

We didn't start the fire,It was always burning
"Said the worst attorney"
Artist: Billy Joel
Song: We Didn't Start the Fire
Real Lyric: We didn't start the fire,
It was always burning "Since the world's been turning"
I'm almost positive that "It was always burning" is a pretty lame defense.

If brains don't whet your appetite try this...
"You "made the rice, I made the gravy", but it just may be the "tuna fish" you're looking for"
Artist: Billy Joel
Song: You May Be Right
Real Lyric: You may be right, I may be crazy, but it just may be the lunatic you're looking for.
This guy's got it covered, from gravy to tuna. Why Christie Brinkley left him is insane.

What it all boils down to is this..
Don't stop believing. Hold on to that "sweet derriere".
Artist: Journey
Song: Don't Stop Believing
Real Lyric: Don't stop believing. Hold on to that "feeling".

In closing I say this:Keep singing,Even if you don't know the words!




I was not alone in hearing Jimi Hendrix say , "'Scuse me, while I kiss this guy".

Who can forget Toto's "I Left My Brains Down in Africa"?
Note to self...Watch out for brain-eating zombie tribes in deepest Africa.

We all can commiserate with Madonna's misheard Get Into The Groove lyrics...
"I'm tired of dancing in Obama's self".
Real Lyric: I'm tired of dancing in all by myself.
I think we're all tired of dancing with Obama by now.

But Prince has the influx of illegals solved...
Prince will "extradite your kids". Way to go Prince.
Just make sure the wall you build is over six feet tall for the rest of us.
Misheard from "Kiss", "all I want is your extra time, and your....kiss."

Ah, Who can forget their "Thirty -First Time" ?..
Madonna's "Like A Virgin" was misheard by many as ..
"Like a virgin, touched for the thirty-first time".
I'm no sexpert like Madonna, but I'm pretty positive that
all it takes is once....even if you're bad at it.

Shania Twain is not sexpert either....
In "You're Still The One",
Who else misheard "Looks Like We Mated",
Rather than "Looks like we made it"?
Either way,it's the same result.
You mated, or you made "it". Kudos to you ...both.

We've all been "Blinded By The Light" at one time or another...
But Manfred Mann's Earth Band ruined it for curler-wearing gals
everywhere with the misheard....
"You look like Medusa with Hair-Rollers in the night".

Poor Oprah....
According to Psy: "Gangnam Style"
"Oprah got no style"!
Maybe she should let someone else be on the cover till she finds her style.


For the men who like their women large...
Commodores: Brick House
She's mighty mighty, built like a "mastodon"...
That's mighty all right.
Real lyrics- "built like an Amazon"...still as scary.

Not a fan of Taco Bell?...Neither is Van Halen...
Van Halen's "Ain't Talkin 'Bout Love" was misheard as...
"Ain't Taco Bell Love".
After many bouts of post-Taco Bell diarrhea, I am no longer a fan as well.

Bladder problems are no longer a shameful event for Artist R.E.M. ...
"Let's pee in the corner, Let's pee in the spotlight",
Misheard from "Losing My Religion"
Real Lyric: That's me in the corner, That's me in the spotlight.

Anti-porn? Then you're no friend of Elvis...
Many misheard,"You ain't never "pornographic" and you ain't no friend of mine"
Misheard from "You ain't never caught a rabbit ",
which by the way was a nod to loose women who "caught rabbits",
Meaning they got knocked up and were known for a good time.

Ladies...watch out for the Scottish Raper...
Demi Lovato: Skyscraper
"Like a Scottish raper".
So that's why they wear kilts!

Apparently the band was on the Low-carb rampage...
Clash: Rock The Casbah
"Drop the pasta, drop the pasta"
Misheard from "Rock the Casbah"

Not a one trick pony...
My "pony" plays the mamba
Artist: Starship
Song: We Built This City
Real Lyric: "Marconi" plays the mamba
I'd pay to see that big time.


After watching A Walk In The Clouds,The Lake House, and Something's Gotta Give...
has "Keanu Reaves had got you thinkin'"?
Artist: Eagles
Song: Wasted Time
Real Lyric: "The autumn leaves had got you thinkin'"
I like the misheard version better. Mmmmm.

But it's okay, I'll be fine when you're gone, I'll just cry all night long.
"Donuts" Make My Brown Blue.
Crystal Gayle: Don't It Make My Brown Eyes Blue
"Doughnuts make my brown eyes blue..."
I cry when my donuts are gone too.












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Review of Liars  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dear Paige,
I chose to review this for some personal reasons-
First, I hate liars, second, you use the title as the last word in the piece, a hallmark I am also known for.

I love how the piece is in a free-verse, without constructive restraints. It tells the story better this way.
It appears to me that you are reminiscing, and that is not something we can constrain to lines and format without sacrificing content.

Your visuals are excellent, the past liaisons are almost to be pitied.I think by the time you meet "the one", you're peace and clarity define the former boys as just that"boys".

My absolute favorite line is this..."Who smiled like he just discovered
the secret to life
every time
he leaned in
for a kiss." - Lovely!

Your observations about lies, and liars is very astute. Yes, telling a lie long enough unfortunately makes it believable to those seeking false truths. I am impressed by your acute sense of the other person's delusion of self.
You managed to take a position against their intolerable behavior while not being self-righteous, A hallmark of a genuinely caring person as you seem to be.

You have a wonderful gift my dear, use it well and keep writing.
Blessings,
Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review of Memorial  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hunter,
The unspoken impression causes one to see the military persons;
dressed in finery and standing in somber witness to the great honor they deserve.
Flickering candles about to sputter out, as the lives of the departed in service.

What is inferred pulls the tears from our eyes; and causes us to ponder on sacrificial death.
No better ending than to say a prayer for them; asking rest, sweet rest.

Thank you for this thoughtful poem.

Kimarie
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Review of Crayola  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello,
I enjoyed your colorful poem!
Your simile style comparison combined with
A well-executed rhyme scheme made for a
delightful and relaxing read.

My favorite lines:

April showers bring rainbow refractions,
and May flowers are always attractions.
A peacock, proudly strutting for his mate,
joins others in their quest to propagate
through a round of colorful interactions.

Lovely Piece...Keep writing!,
Kimarie

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Review of The Knight's Tale  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Evening HuntersMoon,

I really enjoyed this.
If I could frame this, I would use oak and iron studs.
If I could taste it it would be fish stew, brown bread, and ale.
If I could touch it it would feel like a fast pulses,a mighty hairy chest and calloused hands.
If I could smell it, it would be the salt of the sea, perspiration of stalwart men, blending with fire and ice.
If I could see it, it would be everything have said it to be.
On warm nights like this, the sea calls to the adventurous heart.

My favorite quatrain is this:
The fjord rang with hunting songs,
bright shone each shield and blade,
as onward to the north they sailed
proudly and unafraid.

I like how the knight is picking up the sword
to go too unafraid and begin again the hero's journey.

Always A Pleasure to Purvey Your Written Wares,
Kimarie
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Review of Gentle Hands  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Hunter,

I get you! I felt the same vibe as I did when I penned "My Tomb", and "Your Hand". Redeeming love is awesome!

It begins with crawling into your broken heart, a place where no light shines, no truth permeates, and no comfort awaits.
The carnal heart can be a wicked place, and the redemption of a pure heart is a beautiful thing. What comes first?
Redemption or Love? The act of loving a person in need might cause them to love for that reason in itself, which is a noble
thing as well. Love lifts us as you put so well- "Your loving spirit led me to a place where I could stand and find strength to
love again...strentgh from your gentle hands." Love kicks butt! No doubt about it! It drives away darkness, brings hope and
glorious light. Thank God for His residual love, bewstowed on us, and seen in action where it's needed most. You mention
doors several times, love opens doors that were shut with rusted locks. I like that this piece was only 5 stanzas, It
gets to the heart of the issue , using few, but mighty words. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece. Here's to love!

Blessings,
Kimarie
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (3.0)
Greetings,

The Great Commission is always a good subject to speak on.

The poem touches on many crucial examples of living the life of sacrifice.

The format of the poem was typical A-B metre, with only a few awkward breaks in expected space and rhythm.

I noticed only one spelling error-
"Who did on the Cross,
forsakenm " - I am assuming that you might have just "fat fingered" the key by mistake.

Other than that , a nice piece.

Blesssings,
Kim Marie
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
My prayers are with you and your daughter. A very hard part of a terminal diagnosis in a child is that we feel total loss of control in the role of protector and parent. Trust in the Lord with all your heart and lean not to your own understanding.

The poem:
Nice measure, nice flow, AABB scheme made for easy read.

Content: honest, raw, revealing.

Favorite part:

And so it comes to this, the writing, that I share.
To put feelings in words is really therapeutic care.
Whatever time we have together I will treasure,
whatever comes, God alone will do the measure.

writing is the best therapy, and has been for me for decades. I pray all goes well for you and yours and the Lord fills you with his peace that flies in the face of circumstance.

Warmly,
Kimarie
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Review of Big Daddy  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I connected with this story on a very personal level. My mother was grossly obese for 38 years. As any child who deeply loves a parent; you saw through the facade of swollen flesh and embraced the heart and the good that emanated from it. I was never ashamed of my mother but she was so hard on herself. They do enable us to become more perceptive. We become their protectors and protecting them from their own fears was the hardest job. Standing with a freshly made-up face and hairdo; My mother stood with hopeful grin while asking,"How do I look?". Beautiful.", I said as always; for she was. Your Daddy was your sanctuary where only love grew on a solid foundation that needed no canes. How blessed you were. Thank you for sharing this bittersweet and well-written story and the memories of such a wonderful man. Blessings, Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Such timeless lovelieness of words is a rare treat nowadays indeed.
The trials of life wrapped in disillusionment and betrayal are described in aching, poetic grace.
The flow is wonderful and heady with the scent of Edgar Allan Poe clinging to it's quatrains.
Favorite lines?:
"Justice hacks in half-light at what chippings it has caught"- Ah, I too understand this and I feel sad.
I also adore the references to the planets themselves losing their brownian motion. As if the weight of man's sin and ignorance has moved them out of place.-"Then the Sun had waxed magnificent, tragically wide.
And his mantle started swelling, massive, unconstrained.
The Moon, a burning exile with no pretense of pride,
Swooned, wounded, out of orbit, new trajectories attained"
I truly bonded with each and every line of perfection in this tragically beautiful piece. Thank you so much for sharing it with me.
Blessings,
Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
An entity of evil made from cast-off hurt and disappointments turns on the source of it's origin. A vulnerable child who probably was frustrating to her parents but still loved desires to leave; thinking she is unwanted and unloved. Most children dramatize everything and a pimple becomes a death sentence at that age. So, the girl thinks she should run away and meets a daylights demon. The unwitting child makes an involuntary blood pact sealing her doom. I like the use of the wheat fields described to give a dreamy and nightmarish atmosphere . The stalks hissing and rushing past making eeerie sounds.- "The wheat stood waist high, and as she plowed through it, the hissing stalks slapped and bit at her bare legs as if the dark ground beneath her feet seethed with snakes"
A very chilling piece that still retained a dreamy beauty to it. Well done my dear.
Best-Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
Abstract grief moving like a slow dance. The detail and slow pace mimics dying itself. The inability to focus on the larger picture is very descriptive of a person depressed. The dream quality makes it even sadder, as if he is is seeing her in every movement on the canvas. Very bittersweet and lovely.
Blessings, Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the busy, mechanical flow of this piece.
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Review of Possession  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow! The pace was great. Suspenseful and spine-chilling. The creepy doll made my skin crawl. Your visuals are strong and make me feel as if I'm right there. Brain-stealing,Oooooh. I'd like to see a continuation of this story so do it!
Spine-lessly Yours,
Kimarie
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Review of Baby Powder  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
Absolutely breathtaking. I was transported back to when my daughter,sons,and granddaughter Luna SOPHIA Manarino was born. Your appreciation of the dear baby is so apparent in this touching poem. It is magical,tender, and full of love. Thank you for creating and sharing this timeless and wonderful piece.The format, is perfect and the flow is as smooth as a baby-powdered bottom. favorite lines,"A dusty mark where you had been Like a fairy brushing by", " You’re not aware of the heart you took But now it’s with you ev’ry where" This poem prompted me to give the first Awardicon I've ever given. Bless you and Sophia.

Warmly,
Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Fine job in these areas:
-setting the scene and tone
-visuals
-empathy for charcters
-causing to pause and reflect
-desire to read on

As a mother I cried when I read this short and bittersweet piece. Dreams are sometimes the vehicle our departed ones travel to us. I have experienced it and it is a rare and precious gift. Love your style.

Blessings,
Kimarie

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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This has actually happened so it wasn't far fetched. Good format and grammar. Nice they can forgive each other.
Peace,
Kimarie
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Review of Job Experience  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Baby, you 'aint kiddin'! I was a CNA for 11 years. I had to "save" a 612 lb woman from faling out of her bed onto the floor. I tore my rotator cuff and herniated 2 discs. I could tell you some funny stories too but we won't go there . Very funny read. I could just see the big old guy on your lap and how red-faced you were.

Peace,
Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
How lovely. Bold and yet innocent. Sets a lovely mood of comfort and passion. I am also a fan of no punctuation !
Keep Writing,
Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review of For An Angel  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am deeply saddened to hear of her passing. She was kind, funny, and insightfull. I was blessed to have received reviews from her and will miss her work on WDC.

Kimarie Manhart-Freeman
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is very nice. Very welcoming for people too!
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Review of Winter Walk  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (4.5)
It almost makes me want to walk out in the cold...nah! But this is a good piece that has excellent visuals. "Noses needing heat" says it all. Nothing like a good squirrel chase to get you warm.
Blessings,
Kimarie
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Prejudice, racism, and bigotry
are just schemes cooked up by that troublemaker in the one piece red P.J's. No, not Santa, the devil. Love is blind. How else could two ancient people with no hair on their heads but plenty in their ears give gum-smacking kisses to each other? When my dad was a boy, he had to live for a spell with a black family that worked in the cotton fields of Georgia. My daddy picked cotton with them too.The black mama fed him and prayed with him each night. Daddy says he was happy there. Happier than with his own depressed parents who were too rough on him. The man wasn't just doing a kindly deed by giving you the ice cream, he was changing the world, a couple of kids at a time. Biblical principles in action. When Christ spoke to people individually , great things happened. The woman at the well, the apostle Paul on the road, the leper, and so on.
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Review of The Lost Kingdom  
Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
You got me. I had no idea "Burger King" could make me cry, except for the time I stupidly had the flamethrower jalapeno burger. "dirty bare feet" are a trademark of mother nature's royalty don't you know? I personally believe Mother Nature never washes her feet. She just goes swimming like all the smart kids did at bath time.
While we dreamed of being rich, my siblings and I played with well-worn simple toys. We made tea parties for the bugs from acorn cups and leaf plates and fed them cake crumbs. Swinging on a recycled board swing until the skies were a lavender-red and our cheeks became cool as river rocks. If only we knew it was heaven on earth and it would soon go. Those were the good old days.
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Review by InkWellspring66
Rated: E | (5.0)
You might have missed out on one of nature's rare phenomena . Maybe the toads were getting sucked up by sink holes in a spring. Or maybe the bears discovered the joys of frog's legs and were sucking the meat right off the bones. Or maaaaybe, they were a rare evolutionary marvel of vampire frogs.In that acse I dont blame you for not going but... You'll never know because you were to chicken to find out. That really "sucks". te-he-he.

Kimarie
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