The joy and heartache of parenthood is a rollercoaster only for the bravest of hearts. We die thousands of deaths with each close call or worry. I was compelled to read this even though it was so sad. What I liked about this piece: It showed a man's perspective of the deep love he had for his daughter. Good visuals and point of perspective.
Please read my piece #1597648 . It will clearly decscribe what will happen to us if the TOTUS is allowed to "change" healthcare and healthcare freedom of choice.
Blessings,
Kimarie
Well, now that I'm done crying...This was magnificent. I admire that it provoked thought and emotion. It was well put together. This was the saddest thing I've read in a while. Take it easy.
Kimarie
Goat meet is so succulent
it's one of my favorite snacks
The best ones are truculent
with the fat grilled on BBQ racks
You don't need to be an ogre
or a nasty little troll to partake
of delicious goat until you bloat
Don't overdo it for heavens sake
I've heard about a man who ate
so very much tender goat meat
that he turned into a goat himself
and butchers chased him down the street
I adored this free-form poem. I loved the asian-fantasy quality. The shakuhachi playing animals were delightful.The only flaw I noticed was "appearence" should be spelled "appearance". Great Job and thanks for such a zen-riffic read!
Warmly,
Kimarie
That was so darn silly, just what I needed. Thanks. You know I always was fascinated by comedic irony-"The dish rsn away with the spoon. Perhaps the knife and fork were dancing the TONGUE-O (Tango :) )
This was not just gardening, it depicted a mother's love and wisdom. It reminds me of my mother and her garden.
Rose-lipped Maidens,Long They Last,
Kimarie
Perfection. Aching,bittersweet perfection.
definative moment:“But, Mommy, walking on eggshells is not for you and me.”
Excellent imagery,beautiful story. You brought tears to my eyes.You have quite a gift and this poem told of the dark heartache abuse brings.
Warm Regards,
Kimarie
Dear Starr R,
My Babcha told all the kids the devil would take our feet to replace his goat hooves if we didn't keep our legs tucked in tight. I think it's a clever but mean way of keeping your children &grandchildren from catching cold.Or maybe.....Nah, never mind. Great poem, adorably spooky.
Don't Let The Bed Bugs Bite,
Kimarie
Not settling for less than you want is admirable and so is your lovely story.Someday your prince will arrive- you just need to remember that you are the princess!
Be Blessed,
Kimarie
This was superb comedy!
The imaginary book list was great! I loved this one:6 ways to sneak bookstore from a book store" You are hysterical! I will be visiting your port.
Be blessed,
Kimarie
You have a sensory provoking piece here to be sure.
best line: "Undoubtedly, it's a feeling slightly akin to drowning in familiar waters"
I'm not sure the form you used but it fits the idea of the piece . People we trust hurt us the most don't they?Kudos for using the word"inexorable" as I don't see it too often.Great Read, upsetting as it stirred anall-too familiar
kettle of rotten fish, but a great read !
Be blessed,
Kimarie
Anything that has to do with New Orleans I love! Great storylineand the pace of the dialogue was realistic amd comfortable to read. I think this piece is going somewhere!
You made organized points that proked thought. The structure of the piece was very good and reader-friendly. I happen to agree that pork is a unhealthy and hard to digest meat.Your identifcation and categorization of the species and genus was impressive as well. Excellent work.
This was excellent.
favorite lines:
" Uncle Jim shook my hand, as if I were a man, when I was only ten years old"
"Oh, we were a happier and better family when Uncle Jim came. "
"Uncle Jim showed me how to do the trick with the quarter, and the magic died."
Some people just have a magic light in them that draws us to them like moths.
They leave a loving and healing imprint on us that never fades. You were lucky.
Thank you for this very touching read.
Be Blessed,
Kimarie
This poem was in fact just divine,
Fudge infused was every line.
Bon-bons rich from what I gather,
can make the mouth drool and lather.
From nougat whipped to rice crunch,
I could eat the entire cocoaed bunch.
Thinking of something dark and truffled,
Gets this chocoholic's feathers ruffled.
Thank you for this poetic treat,
I'll think of it when I enjoy and eat,
Luscious pieces dark or mild,
Satisfying the fudgey inner child
1- noodle induced pancreatitis killing your dumpster pet.
2- videos of your drunken behavior
3- meth lab? nuff said. lol.
4-thw jim carry-esque scene of your humiliation involving chants of "loser,loser" while delivering noodles to your ex.
(by the way, your ex is a piece of shit if she encouraged that behaviour. You are still their dad and that was totally disrespestful.
5-Your overall hilarious results of actions led by alcohol and anxiety. Write ON!
PS- are the noodles good at Kim's Noodle House?
Regards,
Kimarie
As this love-filled tribute progresses, I hear the hymn, "Come home,Come home it's suppertime, the shadows lengthen fast, Come home, Come home it's suppertime, we're going home at last." What a wonderful gift he was to you. I'm sure now that you are a seasoned man you can understand and appreciate him even more.Mr. Joseph "Willis" Day sounds like one heck of a fella. Thanks for letting me get to know him a little.
Blessings,
Kimarie
Remarkable. I cried at the bittersweet beauty of this piece and I'm a tough customer.Although They are still in there somewhere and sometimes we get to see them.
Kimarie
Kids are so sweet with their innocent eyes and hearts. The love between the sisters is felt and so is the fun times they share. This was sweet and comedic as well. Keep Writing.
I really like how you you portrayed the waitress as a wise person. Too often people think they're bimbos. When people are tired or hungry they let their guard down and who hears there stuff?
The waitress. She's an unpaid psychologist. Great visualization. I could see everything and especially the baked goods under the glass. Thanks for the great read.
This was great. It sets a lonesome and melodic mood. The transitional portions of the piece were accomplished smoothly. Well-constructed and the pace was good.
Although I don't really like twangy country music, I felt drawn to read the piece and I'm glad I did. Keep writing.
This was magnificent! I adore the use of metaphors.especially ones about cleaning.
The well-chosen words have made a huge impact in the short length of piece. It seemed as if the pace and flow was very similar to the agitation of the wash cycle as well. Was this intentional ?, for if it was it sheer genius! A marvelous work and I loved it.
Kimarie InkWellspring66
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