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Review of My Psalm  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hey ruwth,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 11th WDC Anniversary!

         I've not read many Psalms, but the ones I've read are beautiful. This one joins them, very well done my friend! The flow, your phrasing, everything about it makes it so. Your love of your Lord is on the page as you read it, there's no mistaking it.

         This is a beautiful poem, I mean Psalm. Everyone should read this, experience love like this. Thank you for sharing.



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Review of Sneaky Kemosabes  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hey Endless Love,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 12th WDC Anniversary!

         This is a very good short story about 3 childhood friends, and their exploits on a hot summer day. There's a lot more I'd love to have seen in this, but what you have here is fine. It's meant to be a short story, adding more would only lengthen it, I'm not sure that's necessary.

         Your three main characters were described well, I could almost picture them as they rode their bikes. I know you didn't really tell us a lot about each regarding their physical looks, but the story told us all that if you ask me. The whole time I was reading this, I had an image in my mind somewhat like the kids in 'Stand By Me'. So the story told us how they looked day to day, not your words, and I liked that.

         The world was quite different back then, wasn't it? I remember days of riding my bike, only needing to be home before dark. I never had an adventure quite like this, but I still remember the freedom we had. I can't imagine some child trying to join a circus at the age of ten today....

         Overall, this is a good read, if one is a fan of O'Henry, you'll enjoy this. It has that same quality of storytelling to it. Thank you for sharing!



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Hey Charlie,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 6th WDC Anniversary!

         Well, I actually saw a review of this in the Anniversary Reviews forum, and had to read it. Nixie is right, you had me in the first paragraph. Excellent showing here, the dialog was very good, with a story that moved very fast.

         And that would be the crux of my comments on this. It seems to have moved too fast. Let me explain please. If the police have a search warrant, the person being served it has to have a chance to read it before they enter the premises. Once the found Jessica's body, the house becomes a crime scene, and while Nick might have been taken away rather quickly, they would not have done that without having someone else there to be in charge of the scene. That's what I meant about moving too quickly. There's no mention of that happening, but then, maybe you were under a word count limit. Either way, that whole scene, while it's a good read and keeps the reader going, it's just not that realistic. (Then again, I'm not a policeman, I've never been arrested for something like this, so what do I know? *Smile*)

         All that being said, it was an enjoyable read, one that kept me riveted to the last word. Yes, enjoyable. It's possible to enjoy a dark story like this. It doesn't mean I applaud what happened, I just enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing!


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Review of One Shot  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hey David,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 15th WDC Anniversary!

         This story is spot on in pitting an old man against an old cougar. Both are wise, have faced each other in the past, both know their time is almost done. You described things well, the scene, the man and his wife, and why he felt he had to face the cat alone. This is 'life' as I know it. Not a 'fairy-tale' story that has a happy ending. We all die, it's just a matter of when our time is nigh.

         While I really enjoyed the story, you need to give it a once-over. There are a few misspellings (decent instead of descent for example), that distract just a little. That's my only comment on possible improvements. A positive comment? I loved the ending. You leave it to the reader to decide if the man shoots straight, or misses, and the cougar gets him. Nice story, thank you for sharing!



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Review of Dynamic Duo  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hey Winklett,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         This is pretty cute, though the ending didn't seem to fit the rest of it in some ways. I loved the dialog between two friends, pretty sure I've been there myself in something like that. Seems they can't please each other when it comes to pretending to be someone. If one was male, and one female, they probably shouldn't get married. *Laugh* Then again, maybe they should.

         The problem with the end, is that I agree with the one character, Emily Dickinson and Emily Post aren't a couple, and every other 'pretense' of theirs involved couples. The second thing is, it left us hanging. There's one couple that you could have used too. But then, I'm older, so maybe you aren't aware of exactly how talented they were. Abbot & Costello. Oh wait, you used mainly characters from shows, not real people. I guess what I'm saying, is it would have been nice to choose a final couple for them, and have them finally agree on who's who! *Smile* Still, it's a cute story, thank you for sharing!



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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Hey SteeperEel,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 5th WDC Anniversary!

         I prefer to send a nice review for the most part, especially for an Anniversary. I'm sorry to say I can't do this for your story. I'm not going into particulars on this, my review would be longer than your story. If I may though, I'd like to give you a bullet list of things you might want to look at.

         1. This needs some amount of dialog.

         2. Show, don't tell. All you do here is tell us the story, you do not show us anything at all to help us see what's going on.

         3. Proper English! I saw a few places (3-4) where the wrong word was used. The one that comes mind without going through the whole thing, is quite, instead of quiet.

         4. Proper English! (Again) Some of your sentences are poorly phrased, some do not make sense.

         5. Every story has a beginning, a middle where the plot is built, and an end. I realize that this is only chapter 1, a beginning, but this really lacks.


         I could go on with more, but I won't, it's your Anniversary. I hope you have a happy one, and continue to work to improve your writing skills.




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Hey Annie,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!

         I don't think any American who will forget what happened that dreadful day. Unless they were less than 3 years of age or so.

         I was at work when this occurred, and one of my early thoughts was, "How many planes do they have in the air that they can do this with?" You wrote this very well, it was easy to see your emotions that day. It was a day I know I'll never forget.

         I think any one who reads this will find themselves there with you. I've visited the 9/11 Memorial in NYC, as well as the Flight 93 Memorial in Pennsylvania. Tissues are a must when visiting those two sites. Very nicely written, thank you for sharing! Loved that last paragraph!



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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
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Hey Allen,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!

         This is a pretty good dissertation, one that could be so much better and more powerful in its message. I'll explain as I write this review, which as you know is just my opinion.

         My biggest 'beef' with this is not the subject matter, nor the fact that you didn't serve. Far from it. I agree with you 100% that you stood a good chance of not coming home if you'd gone to Vietnam. At the same time, when you were eligible for the draft, the war was already winding down, so maybe you wouldn't have been shipped there. After all, with the war going the way it was, why send a 'wet-behind-the-ears-kid' to war when they were already withdrawing soldiers? (That was not meant to be a put-down either). I'm one year younger than you, I enlisted and served in the Navy. There was no way I was going in the Army. *Smile*

         So what's my beef with this? It bounces around a bit. What I mean is, you have one discussion going, introduce a different one, then go back to the original one. I think you mentioned the idea of being in Canada at least three times for example. My suggestion then, is re-read this. Look for consistency in your train of thought. Keep like topics together, use a time line if necessary.

         Another small comment. Look at the paragraph about your co-worker not wearing the required shirt. The second sentence needs to be on the same line as the first sentence. Separate the rest of that paragraph from that part, because it has nothing to do with your friend, you're back to another train of thought.

         By the way, your boys were safe from being called up. As far as I know, there still is no draft. There's been talk of restarting it, but it still doesn't exist. They'd have to volunteer. That's what you should have been sweating and worrying about.



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Review of Grandpa's Gift  
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Hey Karen,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 8th WDC Anniversary!

         This is too short. I loved it, I wanted to read more about Olivia and her grandfather, but couldn't. Seriously, this is very good, it would be good to see it lengthen a little bit.

         Having been a musician of some ability at one time in my life, I can appreciate how the flute affected Olivia. It doesn't need to be magical, music can be that. The contentment you feel when you play music is phenomenal. In your story, her golden flute appeared to be magic, and maybe it was. Or maybe it was her love for her Grandpa as she played that was magical. Loved the story, thank you for sharing.



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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hey Lori,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 9th WDC Anniversary!

         I remember Billy Jack, and The Trial of Billy Jack. Saw them both while on an FBM patrol on a nuclear submarine. Your article is fine, pretty well written overall, but it really should be renamed. The thing about it is, most of the article is about the 'love' movement in the late 60's and early 70's. You don't mention Billy Jack until the last 2 and a half paragraphs. Most of it is devoted to Native Americans, the protests of the 60's, etc. If you title this "Remember Billy Jack, Tom Laughlin", then the article should focus on him.



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Hey Wizard,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 10th WDC Anniversary!

         This is cute, and so very true. It's amazing what one person can do if they stand up for something they believe in. We are all like this, not just this small boy. Each of us imagines things when we're stressed. Well, at least I do. Or we imagine things we'd love to do, or heroes we'd love to be. Yep, I'm a kid at heart. Nice story, thank you for sharing!



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Hey Ray,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 1st WDC Anniversary!

         To be honest, I saw a review of this on the Anniversary Reviews page, and just had to read it. Excellent really, a bit twisted, but then again, we all are to one degree or another. I think if I'd been Walter, I have had all the lights on in that room. There's no way I could have walked in with just a flashlight for illumination....

         The last couple of paragraphs really made this for me. The scariest things are those you can't see, those of your own imagination. You allowed that here with that little bit. I can watch Zombies or other monsters all night, and rarely become frightened. But make it suspenseful, (think Shirley Jackson's 'The Haunting Of Hill House'), and my backbone is jelly. Thanks for the delightful scare!



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Hey Moomintroll
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 4th WDC Anniversary!

         This is a thoroughly enjoyable read for me. I'm a bit of a nerd, love to learn new subjects and ideas. So this is sort of right up my alley. Very good read. Your last paragraph completely baffles me though. You wrote paragraph upon paragraph about science and what has been proved or disproved. Theory vs fact. Yet with one paragraph, you want us to accept that a superior being, a 'God' created Earth, and man. It's not that I'm against that idea. It's just that you argued one way, working very hard to prove that science is incorrect in all it's theories. There were no arguments provided to accept the idea of a superior being creating our world.

         I said I'm not against the idea of a superior being, and that's true. But let's look at how you debunked the theories of science. You did a nice job in highlighting the statements of scientists, biologists, etc. Few of those statements provide a reference. Some state where the statement came from and who made it. But none of your arguments provide a reference of where you found these statements. Here's an example. Professor John Moore declared: “Upon rigorous examination and analysis, any dogmatic assertion ... that gene mutations are the raw material for any evolutionary process involving natural selection is an utterance of a myth.” Where did you find this statement? Was it in a written journal or paper, or just a statement he uttered and ended up being recorded? Anything you write here as a statement of fact needs to be backed up with a reference, with that reference being provided as a numbered footnote. You state that about scientific theories throughout this article.

         I could see early on in the article that you were leading to the idea that God created the universe and us. You state that in the last paragraph. Where's your reference for that? To state it's in the Holy Bible would not be enough. Yes, I'm quite aware that it's in Genesis, and where in Genesis too. But you need to provide more for ths argument to be valid.

         My view on all this? The first side of the argument; we may have been created by a superior being, that's true. But where did he come from? Everything has a beginning and an end. Where did God come from? I have great trouble believing he's always existed. If he exists (and I believe he does), I would bet he lives at a different rate of time than we do. If time doesn't matter to him, or doesn't apply, then he is a being not of this Earth (obviously), and not of this Universe. If he's not of this Universe, where is he? There's an awful lot, far more than either of us have time to write, to describe him and 'where he exists'.

         The second side of the argument. Natural selection, evolution, the Theory of Everything, Physics, etc. What if everything we know and assume to be fact, is flawed? We say matter can't be created or destroyed, but suppose we're wrong? We prove theories with science. But what if all our science is wrong, very wrong. An example? Try explaining gravity, how it works, and how/why it works as it does. The prove it. It's a theory, we accept it because it explains how we remain on Earth and not thrown from it as it rotates. Evolution and the lack of fossil evidence. What if all the fossils from a certain time period were destroyed by a worldwide cataclysm? There's so much we know, but millions more we don't know, and most likely will ever know.

         This is a nice article, an interesting read, and pretty well written. But I think you need to document your assertions of statements made by the people you list. Without that, this is terribly flawed. You also need to lengthen your last paragraph. Another think you could do, is make statements supporting each case side by side, with references provided for each.





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Review of Desert Rose  
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Hey Turtle,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 9th WDC Anniversary!

         A story of an every day occurrence that few in America are really aware of. I think most American's minds are shielded from the idea of this happening. If/when they do consider it, they don't think of it in the terms you describe so well in your story. They think of someone walking over the border, dressed decently well. They don't think of people dying of dehydration, clothes in tatters, some never making it. Sadly, many have no idea of the reality of trying to get here.

         Your story flows well, it kept me glued to my screen, but as good as it is, I found myself wishing for more dialog. What it really is a wish for, is a little bit longer story. I wanted to know where the woman and her child went, or ended up. I wanted to know their story, where they came from, and why they would risk their lives to get to this country.

         I did see one small thing you may want to consider, should you decided to edit this.

1. I held out my arm to her, braced my hand upon he elbow. I think he should be her.


         An enlightening read, thank you for sharing!



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Review of Working Novel  
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Hey Shameless,
         I saw that you had posted something, and wanted to stop by for a look.

         I think the biggest thing right now, for me at least, is the font. It tends to blend the lines together making it a little difficult to keep at it. Not bad, but it's a distraction. Secondly, and very minor. Every paragraph is indented except the first. I'm not sure if you used the indent command in writingml or not, but here it is for you, just in case. {indent} Type it exactly as you see it, brackets and all, the first line becomes indented a set amount.

         Read through this yourself. There are a couple of minor errors. They instead of the (fifth paragraph, fourth line) is an example. Your second sentence reads a bit off, and seems confusing. Mark toggled between cameras in his dark office lit only by the colored monitors in front of him. A possible rewording? Mark's office was dark, lit only by the colored monitors in front of him. He used the KVM switch to move between cameras mounted in the store, his attention rapt on his duty. (In case you don't know, a KVM switch is used to move between multiple monitors, allowing you to look at the screen of one computer, then another.

         You might want to give a little background on what Mark does, kind of an introduction to the story. Nice start, now keep it going!



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Review of Death Becomes Him  
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Hey Dr. Taher,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         I sort of knew where this was going as I read the first paragraph. That didn't stop me from enjoying it one bit. It's cute, almost funny, and enjoyable to read. It does seem a bit strange that they would have a BBQ on a wooden ship though. Imagine what would happen, how fast that ship would be fully engulfed in flames! Just the same, this was good. Thank you for sharing!



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Review of Ol' Billy  
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Hey Sleepy,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 1st WDC Anniversary!

         I gotta say, this is pretty bizarre. You make me wonder who/what Ol' Billy is. It also makes me wonder, what happens when Ol' Billy himself dies? He seems almost human, but you tell us he has no legs to speak of. Interesting. A snake/human hybrid? *Shock*

         I like this, it's short, to the point, and in your face. You mince no words, you describe him nicely, and leave us wanting to know more. Well done! Thank you for sharing!



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Review of I Am Jellyfish  
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Hey Jenny, er, Jellyfish!
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 7th WDC Anniversary!

         This is very cute! I love experimenting in writing, learning new ways to express myself in words, or emoticons even. Seriously though, this is a nice read. Pure dialog, and you pulled it off very nicely. That's not easy to do really. At least not consistently.

         This flows well as I've implied or said. But I really enjoyed the small twist, followed by her reaction and correction of the twist. I mean the part where the interviewer tells you that you're addicted to WDC and wants to you to change. Then the second twist, where you write her out of the interview. Loved that! Excellent read, thank you for sharing!


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Hey Jack,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 1st WDC Anniversary!

         Okay, this isn't really your first WDC birthday. After all, you've been a part of Writing.com since the day you were born! Still, Happy Anniversary!


         This is cute, and just what I think a young man your age is thinking about. At least you didn't spend that billion dollars in one day, and still have a lot you could do with the rest! Think about that, huh! Keep this, don't edit it. Years from now, look back at it, and see how much you've grown and matured. *Smile*





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Review of self-delusion  
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Hey Mindcrime,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         Your backstory really set this up. Then you read the poem. So few words, so many words not on the page that say so much. Wow. You leave it to our imaginations to add images. Loved that. Thank you for sharing!




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Hey
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your WDC Anniversary!

         You really need to add the genre of comedy to this! I really loved this story and the tale you tell here. You brought back many a Halloween night for me with this, thank you! It's not perfect, far from it. There are small, minor errors in it, but danged if I can remember them, except one. I loved the 'witch' too, and found that part of the story so very sad. Too many times children make up stories about someone, someone who is 'different' than others. There was one small thing I want to show you, very minor in nature.



1. She had been sitting there most of the night, watching the other kids abruptly skip passed her house every time- nobody wanted any part of the witch’s house. Passed should be past.


         This is an excellent story, thank you for sharing!



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Hey Sara Jean,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 15th WDC Anniversary!

         Okay, I couldn't find any errors, however minor in this. Not that I tried overly hard. I was enjoying the read, smiling at every bump-in-the-road you encountered on that memorable day. Mine went better than yours, although my bride had gone to the beach the day before with her best friend (We lived in Hawaii, me in the Navy on the same submarine as her father). She was beet red all over. I mean beet red too. We could hardly hug, but made it through.

         Pretty humorous story here, the pictures in my mind of this were pretty good. Thank you for sharing!



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Review of Santa's Crisis  
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Hey Loti,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         This is pretty cute. I love writing about Santa, seems like you might too. I love the idea of Santa not visiting for a year and seeing what comes of it. I agree wholeheartedly with your story, and how children today approach things. (At least here in the states, and most civilized countries.) The world has changed, Santa needs to change some too, but I know I don't have the answers for him. Nice read, thank you for sharing!




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Hey Confessor
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 7th WDC Anniversary!

         I found this to be incredibly sad. There's no way someone should be treated like this. I'm ashamed of my fellow men and how childish they can be. I know you've heard the phrase, "Oh that's just men being men! Far from it. This sounds like boys being boys, more interested in sowing their wild oats than looking for a true relationship.

         Some of your descriptions hit me pretty hard. "You have a lot of anger inside of you." "You're an extremely emotional girl." Or the kicked, "You swear too much." First, if you have anger issues, you'll need to learn to control them, and not let them show too much. I've news for those 'boys'. We ALL have anger issues. It's how we address them that makes us 'appear' mature and not young. Emotions? I think they're great. But again, there's a time and place for that. I cry at least weekly, and I'm 65! Why do I cry so much? It's not really crying, it's my eyes getting wet when I watch something that touches me. I've found I can't listen to "Nessun Dorma" (a finale to an Opera) without my eyes watering. Go figure. Swearing? My thoughts on that is that people in general swear far too much. When I retired from the Navy in 1993, I made a decision to eliminate four letter words from my vocabulary. Why? Because I'm of the firm opinion that anyone using four letter words consistently is not someone I want to be around.

         Now, your article here. Very sad, well written, you throw your soul out there for all to see. Very brave of you, very good. None of us are perfect, embrace your imperfections and go from there. Love yourself first and foremost, then love others. I won't lecture you, that wouldn't be good, but that's the start of any advice I'd give.

         A sad, but interesting article. Thank you for sharing!


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Hey Rhyssa,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 18th WDC Anniversary! Eighteen? Wow!

         This is pretty cute, and you left me wondering about a few things. You described the 'Unicorn' well, but it was the mother who caught me most. Late in her pregnancy, yet still able to do things needed around the house. Baking a cake, taking care of two rambunctious girls, and banishing false unicorns who knows where. *Smile*

         You left me wondering about this though. You make the mother to be almost a witch, the way she can snap her fingers to get her daughter next to her (then again, Mother's do have a way with things like that, don't they?). But the kicker was when she made the Kelpie disappear. Matter of fact, what is a Kelpie? I Googled it, and found one described as a "shape-shifting water spirit inhabiting the lochs and pools of Scotland." You didn't describe their surroundings, nor their location, so I can only guess this is what you mean. That's fine, it's a short story, you don't need to provide a lot of details. I found it interesting is all. You might want to add a genre to this to help a reader know more. Interesting story, thank you for sharing!



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