I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 19th WDC Anniversary!
In the last few months, you've sent me many reviews. It only seemed appropriate that I drop by and send you at least one! Happy FIRST WDC Anniversary!
Your story is very sad, but one that's happened many times around the world. We all have to leave home sometime, but it shouldn't be under circumstances like those that Lottie encountered. This has a nice flow to it, making it an easy, pleasurable, read. There are a few things you should look at in this though, mainly a bit of very minor wording issues. Nothing that I can really put my finger on, but you might want to give this a good, thorough read over.
You described Lottie well, by the end of the story, I felt I could see her in my mind. I think the main thing I read in this though, is a feeling of being rushed. I know you wrote this for a contest, but one thing I learned long ago about contests. Write the story/poem for the contest, then sit on it overnight. Read it the next day very carefully. Why very carefully? Because you wrote it, and will overlook minor details, unless you can force yourself to focus on it, looking for the smallest fault. My specific comments on it are below.
1. The house was exactly as she remembered it. Only that wasn't true; would never be true now, for Lottie had left it too late. It seems that you don't need the word 'it' in these lines. One is in the second paragraph of the story, the other just a paragraph later.
2. She sank down into her old chair.h It still stood in its old place at the table, pushed in, but ready if she had returned. You can see what I saw.
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