|FIRST IMPRESSION~ The title...I found myself tripping over the title and catching myself. I thought at first, my eyes were deceiving me, for I thought I read, Stop...Stop...the Church Mouse. In catching it, I thought...this title is intriguing and that in itself coaxed me into wanting to read this. A Good Title!
PLOT THOUGHTS~ A good start in the first chapter, with good description giving the reader a visual. I particularly like:
There is a plant way up there called fireweed, that has a flower that is long, and green when it first grows, but as the weather gets warmer, its petals start turning red, from the bottom up. When it’s the middle of summer the whole flower is red. It can turn large part of the countryside red, so it almost looks like fire. Fireweed really goes into overdrive, after a forest fire, and is the first plant to come back after a fire. As winter approaches, the flower withers from the bottom up. Usually by the time of the first snowfall, the red is all gone. That’s one way the animals and people can tell what time of year it is.
Beautifully done, in my opinion.
In my opinion, the first chapter flows well with a few errors that the author overlooked with re: spelling that can be easily corrected.
Chapter 1 sets the scene, inroduces the area, andthe little girl, Willy, and her parents.
I would recommend the author change the word <introduces> and insert the 't'.
Spacing between the commas in certain sentences. An obvious oversight in typing. Otherwise, a brilliant job so far.
OVERALL SUMMARY~ This reader looks forward to reading more of this children's novel from this author. It promises to be delightful and is easy to follow for both young and old.
Thank you for allowing me to view and review this piece you have created.