My name is Whiskerface, and I've been reading your work-in progress Post Apocalyse. I'm also a member of Showering Acts of Joy, a review group. Everything I write is my opinion,nothing more.
Chapter one does a good job of using Dusty's attitude and ideas to outline not only what she's like but also to give background for her setting, with abandoned cars and hopeless people everywhere she looks. The pain of her parent's suicide is apparent, and Max's remark about her bitterness is spot-on. She has become hard in the past year, but not as completely as she'd like to believe. Her plan to find her brother, her one remaining family member, is really no different than the people around her believing that this will end soon. She also left Max a gun and tried to smile at him, shows she is not emotionally dead, only damaged.
The way you introduced Max was interesting,because he initially seemed tough,trying to take her on, but turned out to be much softer around the edges than Dusty, a nice contrast. Tough girl, good-hearted boy. Max's determination is the equal of hers, though, and she makes herself tolerate him until he finally leaves.
chapter two is told from Max's perspective. I like the idea of swapping between narrators, by the way. Max begins by thinking about Dusty and her personality. He is obviously intrigued by her and would like to know more. I want to know how this potential relationship will play out. Max's emotions seemed a little les confined
To the immediate needs of life, with remarks about girls being complicated and even the things that are immediately there might have been present in a normal teenage life, such as wanting to be free. Kristof echoes some of this attitude too. I thought Max's reflection on how he hated his dad's thrift made me think his dad was a practical man but seeing his response when he learned about Dusty, and his insistence that she be brought to him for questioning revealed a ruthless edge to his character. For his survival, and that of others, he is as willing to use and take from Dusty as she is toward others. He considers it justifiable. Maybe it is, but he seems to have decided he's a leader, and his leadership style is the ends justifies the means. This is also shown by him sending Max out to see if he can find someone to question. Max's response to his dad is conflicted and he sees the ethical problem. Kristof seems to be capable of understanding both arguments, and offers to meet Dusty. That seems like a true act of friendship and I can see the friendship between them being a close one.
Chapter Three showed Dusty in a less harsh and self-centered light. She actually was thinking about Max, and seemed to be curious about him and even have a bit of positive feeling for him, by recognizing Max could have beaten her yesterday if he'd been prepared. She has been isolated for so long, human contact with someone decent seems to have thrown her for a loop. When she met Max again, she stopped for him, something she wouldn't have done the day before. Dusty is suspicious of Max now, but still goes with him to be bandaged, so he must have seemed trustworthy enough by her standards. I liked the exchange between Dusty and Max while he bandaged her hand tenderly and thought her insight about him being a doctor showed a real understanding of either him or human nature.
I enjoyed this piece. Dusty and Max are not predictable. I was surprised to find Max's family still intact,down to his best friend whom I'm assuming was also his friend before the apocalypse . In chapter two I particularly liked the phrase " like tiny knives driving into my skin."
I noticed some punctuation missteps with commas and the occasional hyphen. One resource for this is: http://dailywritingtips.com.this site covers a lot of punctuation information. I would like to see more information about the mutation, and how people reacted. I think it would make a real difference in grasping how dismal life now is for people. How life was before, what happened, how long did it take for people to realize the problem, why is there so much death and destruction. When you wrote about the first meeting between Dusty and Max, you said that Dusty's eyes met a green and brown set. I was confused by this, and wondered if you meant one green eye and one brown eye. You might clarify that.
I enjoyed your story and hope you continue with it. The notion of a mutation in gasoline is unusual---no war or disease---for an apocalyptic story. It's a change I appreciate. A very good story. Thank you for sharing it with me. Whiskerface