OK! That's what I assumed. Not to worry then! ;) I will need to review the topic thread for the other missed example.
I was not aware of the "paid member" qualification, which is nice! :)
Thanks for the response!
I enjoyed your essay! I felt that you did a good job in correctly defining the opposing personality types based on "extreme" examples. There are complications that create "middle of the road" introverts and many people walk a path which leave no real clue. I can't tell you how many people have told me they were shy but were obviously not.
It's a great study and I'm sure that you can give us a "part 2." You might write on the introvert who becomes an extrovert while on internet social sites (for instance).
As far as corrections go, one area needs a little help. You wrote:
Introverts generally have a small group of friends that consists of 4 or 5 good friends (introverts are a lot of the time the life of the party when they're around people they know very well) versus the average extrovert who has a large group with just a few good friends.
The word "consists" should be consist (singular)
The first sentence should stop at "4 or 5 good friends." Then start the next sentence without any parenthesis. If I may show you:
Introverts are (much of the time) the life of the party, when they're with people they know very well, versus the average extrovert who has a large group of acquaintances, but just a few good friends.
I replaced the words "a lot" with the word "much" since it means the same thing but saves the reader 1 syllable. The same is true with the word "around" which I replaced with the word "with", also saving a syllable while maintaining the same meaning. Saving the reader time is always important as long as you can maintain the content.
Finally, I added "of acquaintances" after your: "large group", since the group was not defined. You may also notice a couple of added commas in my revision.
Nice topic and a good title! Keep up the good work! :)
This is troubling, yet so very honest. Yet, we all can leave! A great novel, movie, or video game can take us "out of mind" and into another world. In fact, many authors write to "leave themselves" unless they are writing about themselves. The trick is to find something to do that rewards a person in this condition and benefits others! Then, they will not want to leave "themselves" but embrace "themselves" whom "they" have created from their own potential.
Your poem well depicts someone with little or no self value which most people feel at some point in life. Sadly, this effects young people more than older, since the young are still trying to find their way and purpose.
Your thoughts are very well spoken! It's plain that you understand the mechanics of human (spiritual) evolution on a personal level. I very much enjoyed the structure of the creation! However, one of the purposes of a review is to be "the devils advocate" so I will introduce that aspect of critique:
Re: "We can't throw in the towel when we come to a bridge we don't think we have the strength to cross."
Some bridges collapse leaving no bridge to cross. The idea reminds me of the tiny sea turtles who's mother laid her nest of eggs too far from the sea. The baby hatches, yet because of the distance to the water, it may die from dehydration and exhaustion or be more easily picked off by seagulls.
Just as that baby had no control over it's future, many humans have the same dilemma because the canvass that their life is painted on is totally missing the color yellow (for example), so they can't understand that aspect of life.
It's similar to inner city youth who grow up in an environment of gang violence and addiction. They have no reference point from which to live life normally. Think of a person who has never played baseball or even watched a game who is suddenly thrust into a contest. "What do I do? Why did they hand me this heavy stick?
Some people have no hope of mental or emotional recovery. As a person who has worked with such people, I have learned about these complexities.
It would be great if everyone could realize that every thought they think is simply the firing of neurons that they can control, but the truth is
we have very little control. Our best chance is to have leaders and parents who make the right choices when exposing us to life. Judging from your article, you were probably fortunate to have that!
Thank you for your talent and this inspiring work! 5 stars! :)
I enjoyed your story! Especially since I was nearly (really) attacked by a big black dog a few days ago! If I were to place any criticism, it would be to break up the story into sections which help to put focus on the key points that you want to make such as:
"I have had visions during those brief spells of sleep that I occasionally get, where I step into a dimly lit room and face a mirror in which I see a reflection of a dog, a big black dog staring back at me .The dream then slowly dissolves into reality and I land back to my wonderland called Insomnia.
That black dog is enchanted by the night, by the mystery it holds. He reminds me about how fictitious and magical the night is contrary to the factual and monotonous day. He walks by my side into the innumerable realms of thoughts I tread during the unfortunate hours of the night and during the empty hours of the day I am left alone. He remains dormant. Maybe, he’s taking his time for another night of activity.
Many a time, I have been chased by him, even attacked brutally at times with vicious rage due to his inherent sense of territorial possession. I have been asked quite a number of times to get rid of him, to see the last of him but I, I would refrain from doing that because I need that black dog in my life .I need him to rescue me back from those unfathomable chasms of insanity life sometimes puts me in. I still need the black dog however bad, brutal or ugly it is."
I, being an insomniac myself appreciated that aspect of the story and the fact that somehow the dog's mirrored reflection indicates that you are it's creator.
The need for the dog is sort of like an addiction. You want to give it up, but you are unable to.
Interesting story! Give us more! :)
I enjoyed your poem! You made it pretty clear that if you have a teasing personality, your relationships won't last long! I especially liked this line:
"that’ll make him want me more than a flower wants to bloom."
Quite a clever work you have here! It has been said from ages old, that all curved shapes are female and that all straight shapes are male, so with Cupids bow we have a relationship in and of itself! The study of male and female, (positive and negative polarity) is a study of enlightenment!
Nice work! I especially liked the ending:
"Pulling for each other to
Solve Love's equation."
I loved this! It is an amusing story that made me smile! There was a sitcom several years ago which cast a blond woman wearing a fanny pack who had almost anything you might need in it, IE: a pup tent, blender, or almost anything of an outrageous size. :D They used trick photography to make it appear real.
My wife has a ton of worthless C__P in her purse and almost nothing of any real value. Perhaps she should look at some of those WEB ideas! :)
5 Hearts! :)
What a wonderful tribute! My Mother is 86 and has many of the same qualities that you described about yours! I was very moved by your reflections! 5 Hearts! :)
The story reminded me of the old show "The Twilight Zone". You held my interest, which is pretty good since I usually don't make it past the second paragraph 90% of the time. I read your story all the way to the end.
About 3 years ago while driving home from work around 11PM, I saw my first full blown apparition. It was 2 days before Halloween. The image was grey, definitely a man in a suit having a faint glow about him in the darkness.
It is said that around the end of October, the veil between the worlds of the dead and the living becomes thin, allowing the living to view ghosts and other Astral beings.
Nice work!! 5 stars! :)
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