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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Oldwarrior,

I just read your wee poem, No More Spirits in the Sky.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about Native Americans and the wrong done to them will like this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: That the old warrior had the courage to show his pain.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Broekn hearted. The white man destroyed something so sacred because they didn‘t understand it. This poem made me cry.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.


*Cat*OTHER SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS: What a beautiful and heart warming poem. It should have been a crime what the white man did to the Native Americans. What gave them the right to come into this country and steal land and force their ways upon the Native Americans?

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of The Mirror  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Capone,

I just read your wee poem, The Mirror.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about folks thinking about suicide will find this interesting.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The vivid images the words create.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Sad.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of ~Evil Fairies  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi StaiNed,

I just read your wee poem, ~Evil Fairies.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about evil fairies will like this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: That your tales doesn‘t paint all fairies as sweet and spice and everything nice.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Encouraged that you stepped away from the good fairy image.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.


*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Tanya  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Sarah,

I just read your wee tale, Tanya.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about dream lovers will love this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: It‘s the beginning of what could be a longer tale.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: Inspired.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*OTHER SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS: This is a great beginning for a longer tale. Just when it started getting exciting, it ended. No fair.

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Ian,

I just read your wee tale, A Momentary Distraction.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about day dreaming and forgetting where you’re at will find this interesting.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: Snaders was completely absorbed in his fantasy and forgot the world around him.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: Forgetful.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OH DRATS!
I wonder what this guy's story is, wondered Sanders to himself. -- change one of the wonders


*Cat*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*OTHER SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS: The intense-looking, middle-aged gentleman had graying temples and a close-cropped, lopsided haircut that looked like a divot from the lawn had been stuck unceremoniously on his head. A small scar in the shape of a dolphin on his left cheek was punctuated with the stubble of the man's five o'clock shadow, just emerging from his pasty white skin. His flinty-eyed stare seemed to bore into Sanders, looking deep into an otherwise shallow soul. great description

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Dream Cycle  
Review by Ladybug
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi HuntersMoon,

I just read your wee poem, Dream Cycle.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read poetry will like this.


*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: You explained what a Parallelogram de Crystalline poem was.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Warm and fuzzy.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Renee,

I just read your wee poem, The Night of Goblins Delight.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about Halloween will like this adorable tiny poem.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The fact that I can see the little ghosts and goblins.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: It made me smile.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Ghostlight  
Review by Ladybug
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Gilnara,

I just read your wee poem, Ghostlight.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about the theater will find this interesting.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: That you explained what a ghostlight was in the theater.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A bit sad that the curtain has come down leaving the actor wondering what comes next.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of The Music Man  
Review by Ladybug
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Sum1,

I just read your wee poem, The Music Man.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about street musicians will love this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: I could hear the music and see the old gent dancing about.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: It made me smile.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.


*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of The Grave Side  
Review by Ladybug
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Winchester,

I just reread your wee tale. It's much better. It's quite clear to see what's happening around the boys. Now I can see that the boys are giggling behind their hands and are only pretending to be sad at the lost of a friend. Yet this make me wonder what they found so ammusing about their friend's death.

Ladybug
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Review of Japanese Doll  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi waterdragon,

I just read your wee poem, Japanese Doll.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about menacing dolls will love this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The owner of the doll ended up becoming the doll.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A bit unnerved.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Sanity  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi tYpO,

I just read your wee tale, Sanity.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about those who hear voices will like this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: Leticia and Terrence come across as real even though they’re only in Susan’s head.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: A bit sad. Susan thought her problems were so bad she tried to kill herself.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*OTHER SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS: “NO, he’s not sure, look at him.” Leticia spat in his direction, “quack, Quack, QUACK!” -- nice description -- I can see the duck.


*Cat*WHAT I DIDN’T LIKE:

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what though: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of SALEM  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Onyx,

I just read your wee poem, SALEM.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about Halloween and witches will enjoy this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The emotions the words created.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Angry that an innocence was murdered by fools.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hi Princess Megan Rose,

I just read your wee poem, A Spirit Watches Over Her.

I love all the images at the end. Nice touch.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about grandparents will love this heart warming poem.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: It honors your grandmother. What a beautiful tribute.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Sad. It made me cry.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.


*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi hispanicshot,

I just read your wee tale, The Doll of Horrors.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about menacing dolls will love this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: That the doll tricked Daisy into taking her home.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: a bit unnerved.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*DESCRIPTIONS/DETAILS: Are the characters and settings brought to life? Are they consistently portrayed? Is the descriptive language woven successfully into the moving plot progression?

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OH DRATS!
“Ha… so you felt (fell) for my trick!” Mike’s voice said.

*Cat*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*OTHER SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS: But there was something in the eyes that spooked me out. -- I don’t think out is necessary.

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Darkness  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi dreamybanana,

I just read your wee poem, Darkness.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about lost souls will find this interesting.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The emotions the words evoke.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Sad.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Late Night Snack  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi Inkscribe,

I just read your wee tale, Late Night Snack.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read creepy tales will love this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The vivid picture the words created.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: grossed-out

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OH DRATS!
His girlfriend(comma) Jen(comma) glared down at him, her hands digging into her hips, foot tapping impatiently.

A wicked hate (hatred) played in his disturbed eyes, haunting David's soul.

*Cat*OTHER THINGS OUT OF PLACE:
"Infomercials... great."
He flicked through the channels, finally coming to rest on an old horror movie. He smiled, horror movies were his favorite. Nothing made him happier than a good scare, and this one looked good. -- needs a space between paragraphs

His head rushed from the lack of oxygen, weakness overpowering him. -- how does a head rush?

*Cat*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi John,

I just read your wee poem, Knights and Lawbreakers.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about knights in armor will enjoy this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The brave knight was only four years old.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: It made me smile. The wee lad and his fantasy.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Proserpina  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Miranda,

I just read your wee poem, Proserpina.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about love that can never be will loke this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The vivid images the words created.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A wee bit sad that their love couldn‘t be.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of In the dark  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi MissMayhem,

I just read your wee poem, In the dark.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about lost love will like this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: The emotions the words evoke.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A wee bit sad that someone lost their love.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*FLOW: This poem moves smoothly from beginning to end.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi intheventofire,

I just read your wee tale, Lilly and The Jewel Of St Petersburg.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about Sherlock Holmes will love this whimsical tale.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: Lilly had an interesting adventure inside Alice‘s shop.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: It made me smile.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OH DRATS!

My apologies, I'm being ever so rude; my name is Lilly and I live in Bath, England with my mother and my sister (comma) Jean.

As soon as I had in my hands I spoke forcefully into the mouthpiece. -- add it in front of in my hands

"So why now?," I asked him rhetorically and had to cut him of (off) as he tried to blurt an answer.

*Cat*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*OTHER SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS: A black cat tangoed through her legs. -- Nice vivid image.

You should take out the author’s notes because they knock the reader out of the tale.


*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Wolf-Man,

I just read A Day of Darkness Ch. 2.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about werewolves will like this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: It‘s about werewolves, one of my favorite supernatural creatures.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: A bit squeamish, I hate needles and getting a tattoo involves using a needle.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*Cat*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hi lady fati,

I just read your wee tale, Forever in my heart.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about taking a chance on a stranger one just met will like this.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: Daisy’s bravery to trust her inner self enough to know she’d be safe with this stranger.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: Encouraged to follow my instincts.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OH DRATS!
He's kind and sweet character got a smile out of every human he ever met, just like me. -- This sentence sounds awkward. Perhaps it would sound better this way: He’s a kind and sweet character, who got a smile out of every human he ever me, just like me.

The hotel eluded me not because it was late, but because i (I) had misplaced the address.

I was so lost in thought that I did not see the car coming with full speed and the spectacularly amazing guy, except he looked offensive enough to make my chops, (your chops do what?) but even then he looked devilishly mouth-watering.

He (peeped out) and yelled: "Princess, this road does not belong to your father! Move away." -- He yelled as he peeked out.

Having said that i (I) entered a complete stranger's car.

Be ready, do not want (the) princess wandering on the street again and troubling busy people like me.

"And princess, it's not a date." -- Princess should be capitalized since it’s being used as her name.

I was not good at all this, being a loner much of my life hardly guests showed up except for my parents who come to see if their daughter had a guy in her life or she was still alone. -- this sentence is awkward. Try this: I was not good at all this, being a loner much of my life, hardly any guests showed up except my parents, who came to see if their daughter had a guy in her life or if she was still alone.

"Princess (comma) may be (maybe) today you are just an infatuation, but an Angel whispered to me.

I was wondering what going on when he went to a knee and asked' Will you marry me today (comma) princess? -- Princess should be capitalized.

*Cat*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*OTHER SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS: With a rewrite this can become an even better tale of finding one’s soul mate and falling in love.

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of An Excerpt  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Hi C.D.,

I just read your wee tale, The Evolution of Conciousness.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about prisoners needing help will find this interesting.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: A bit unnerved that the guards would leave a dead man to rot in a cell with another living one, where the rats could get at him.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OH DRATS!
Near the center of the floor the puddle that had formed under the leaky ceiling caught the light, setting the still surface ablaze with a glories (glorious) red light.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*OTHER SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS: This tale is told not shown, yet it has a lot of potential to become a longer tale with more detail.

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Care Giving Dog  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi DominantMind,

I just read your wee tale, Care Giving Dog.

*Cat*APPEAL: Those who like to read about dogs will love this heart warming tale.

*Cat*WHAT I LIKED: How you made the Wago seem like a real person and not just another friendly dog.

*Cat*HOW THIS TALE MADE ME FEEL: Sad as Wago lost his friends. It made me cry.

*Cat*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*Cat*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*Cat*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*Cat*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OH DRATS!
My mom nags at me all the time, my sister gets all she wants and dad never gives me a single (piece of) useful advice.”

*Cat*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Cat*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view the story is being told from.

*Cat*FLOW: This story is told in a logical order. You didn’t overload this tale with a lot of foreign words and used a variety of sentence lengths.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*My review is only my humble opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you, not discouraging. I don’t wish to offend or upset anyone. If you don't agree with something I said or suggested, that is your right as the author. No matter what: Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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