Hello Mark C ~ 9 years on WDC!. After reading "POEMS ABOUT FRIENDSHIP" , I would like to offer you your final review (7 of 7) I hope you have enjoyed receiving them as much as I have enjoyed giving them! Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
A fabulous folder that contains the material that makes my heart sing!
MY FAVORITE PART
Every single item that is housed within this folder as well as the sentiment behind each and every one!
SUGGESTIONS
MORE!! I WANT MORE!!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
You and I have had the opportunity to discuss friendship and the awesome feelings that are part of those that we hold very near and dear to us. Although there are a lot of important aspects to living a happy life, we couldn't do so without the friendships that you have written about. As I have told you before, numerous times, you are such a doll! I love your personality - how it shines so bright for us all to marvel in. You are a Godsend for so many. Don't ever stop being you!!!
Hello Lani1961. After reading "Gun to the Head" , I would like to offer you a review on behalf of the "Invalid Item" . Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
This is an extremely well written piece that describes the author's view on religion. It touches on some very good and thought provoking aspects that we should all take time to ponder. Granted, each of us will derive at our own view point, and for most, that view point will be based on what works for each individual personally.
MY FAVORITE PART
We don’t need to live according to a legalistic code to realize that the only thing we can leave behind us is the effect we have on other people. How well we raise our kids, and the effect we have on other people. We spend so much time trying to “serve” in the churches, and running around to activities that won’t make a damn bit of difference in the end, when we should be focusing on making our time count with our kids.
SUGGESTIONS
I have absolutely no suggestions to offer. There are no technical errors anywhere in this piece. It is structured perfectly and is written so the reader can follow along easily.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am glad to have discovered this piece and commend you for putting it out for everyone to read. Please keep up the awesome work!
Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the Robert Frost Fan Package! The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters ! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor
I love this! Not only do I admire your poetic talent, I respect your stance on the message contained within this piece.
MY FAVORITE PART
As bending friends cry, they lay their man to die.
A nameless soul to those, for whom the war exposed,
No feeling of remorse, just heightened public discourse.
SUGGESTIONS
its not as if they came. Consider changing "its" to "it's" since it is a contraction of "it is".
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am very impressed by your talent and wish that you could somehow transport just a tiny sliver of it over to my hand. This is being marked as one of my faves! Thank you so much for sharing it with us all and please do keep up the awesome work!
Hello, cazzbie! I am Kristi and am helping Hannah ♫♥♫ judge the In & Outs created by the Paper Doll Gang Newbies.
Please accept this review as a friendly gesture from one writer to another.
Being a person who truly enjoys creating my own "self proclaimed famous" quotes, I really like the idea you had for this particular In & Out. I hope you don't mind that I used one of my own rather than one from a famous person. Who knows? Maybe after this In and Out I won't have to remain "self proclaimed famous"!!!
Thank you for completing this challenge and for sharing it with us all. Keep up the great work!
Please accept this review as a friendly gesture from one writer to another. Keep any suggestions you may find useful and discard any you don't!
Colors are a major aspect of our individual self expression, as well as our moods. I love learning what each color represents and how using it/them can bring about positive results for things we seek. I just recently learned that pink is used to get what you want. I put this to the test one evening at a local department store. My mother was wearing a bright pink T-shirt and I informed her of what I had just read about the color. My mother, being the odd one that she is, approached several people and told them she wanted money. She was very serious in her tone. Not a one of them even acknowledged her!! I was in hysterics. I assume we were missing a crucial part somewhere!
Anyway, this is a very good idea for an In & Out. I enjoyed reading all the submissions as well as offering my own. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing this with us!
Please accept this review as a friendly gesture from one writer to another. Keep any suggestions you may find useful and discard any you don't!
I love the unique incorporation of children's books and how they shaped our individual love of reading and writing in our early years. I was a fan of many different types and styles and must admit that I was a bit advanced for my age. I was reading Judy Blume in 1st grade rather than waiting until the 4th. I went through The Emperor's New Clothes so many times that my book was void of both the front and back cover. The same with Black Beauty and Rebecca of Sunnybrook Farms.
Wow! Thank you for taking me back in time to the days of my innocent, untainted imagination!
Hey Numb Hands! My name is Kristi and I am helping Hannah ♫♥♫ with the judging of the Ins & Outs that have been created by our Paper Doll Gang Newbies!
Please take this review as a friendly gesture from one writer to another. Keep any suggestions you agree with and discard those you don't.
I love the question posed for this particular In & Out. I do wish that some of the members who offered their ideas would have followed your rules of keeping it appropriate for younger readers. But, this is not your fault.
I hope this proves to offer up some good advice that we can all pass on to our school children.
Thank you for sharing such a caring sentiment with us all and keep up the awesome work!
Hello kiyasama. After reading "The Thrill is Gone" , I would like to offer you your first review of five. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
What a well written tribute to the King of Pop! I enjoyed reading every word - not just the ones written in regards to Michael, but the very interesting details of how you came to know him, respect him, admire him. I was also fascinated to learn more about you. I had no idea you were raised in Africa! How cool is that!?!
MY FAVORITE PART
Dear, dear Michael, I never got to meet you in person, but you had such a tremendous impact in my life and for that I thank you. With your death, I hope you finally find the solace you could never find on earth. Those who love, and have always loved you, will keep you in their hearts forever.
Rest In Peace, and give those Angels, in heaven, as good a performance as you gave to us.
SUGGESTIONS
I have not one suggestion to offer that could improve this already perfect tribute!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am delighted to finally visit your port - something I should never have waited this long to do. I am very excited to read more of your masterpieces, if they are all as pleasant to read as this one was. Thank you for sharing your talent with us all!!
Hello Mark C ~ 9 years on WDC!. After reading "A Change In Perspective" , I would like to offer you your fourth review of seven. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
I have read some endearing pieces during my time here at WDC, as well as throughout my life - this one definitely ranks at the very top of all my favorites!
MY FAVORITE PART
Having a cuddle
I never feel small.
SUGGESTIONS
I am sorry, but I have no suggestion to offer!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
The sentiments throughout this tender piece held my attention and grabbed my heart. At one point, I had to stop so I could hug Freddi, my German Shepherd! By the end, I was ready to hug my neighbor, the mailman, and the convenient store clerk! But to keep from freaking them all out, I resorted to hugging myself! I love this piece and am so thankful you shared it with us all.
Hello Mark C ~ 9 years on WDC!. After reading "Performance Not Required" , I would like to offer you your third review of seven. Please accept what is helpful and disregard anything that is not.
Mark, thank you for sending this my way! The message begins with the spotlight on the actor - the one hiding behind a mask of, what I consider to be societal disillusion. The message then turns to the way we should live life. Real. No matter what real is. Just real. Just ourselves.
the ones who take mere friendship
and make of it a priceless treasure
expanding it with words and actions
straight from the heart,
forming lasting connections
between their souls and ours.
SUGGESTIONS
I have not one suggestion to offer this 5 star piece!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I think this is a beautiful expression of how we should all live our lives. The comparison of how we hide our true identities behind the mask just like a thespian is an old one, but it still reigns true - too true. I commend you for being confident enough with yourself to realize that the disillusioned self is no way to go through life! Very good piece that I shall recommend highly!
Wow! This is a really cool idea! I never knew it existed and am so very pleased to have been introduced to it by a good friend, Just call me Omni! I think this is an awesome addition to all the wonderful activities going on here at our home away from home!
OMG!!! Since my inception here at WDC, I have had only a couple of poems written about me. This one takes the cake!! I love you, my dearest friend in the whole wide world!! Your return has made me whole again and has put a never ending smile upon my face. I can't wait to one day hug your neck and kiss your cheek and hold your hand like we are six years old!!
Thank you, Stacy Lynn! You have made this already incredible year even more incredible! Please don't ever go away again. Or, if you do, make sure you take me with you!!!
This is an intimate and vividly descriptive write concerning the dramatic life of living with a person who suffers from Bipolar Disorder. I love the comparison with colors and how you tied it in with the action of sewing. Very well written. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the Maya Angelou Fan Package! The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters ! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor
Sherri, I never realized how difficult it would be to type with a body covered in goosebumps. I didn't just feel the love you have for your mother, I held the love. This is an extremely well written and heartfelt tribute to your mother, may she rest in pain free peace. All my heart and love go out to you. I thank you for sharing this personal piece of you with us all here at WDC.
MY FAVORITE PART
Cried a river of tears when cancer claimed you.
although I knew you were no longer in pain.
Grieved when you joined the angels too,
selfishly wanting you here with me again.
Thank you so much for enlightening us all on the Sticky that we all love so much. This partial autobiography was extremely well written and such a joy to read. I did not notice any technical errors whatsoever, which is what I would expect from such a "renowned" journalist and editor! I have a lot to learn from you and hope you don't mind teaching me. Again, thank you for sharing your story with us!!
What a brilliant, unique, and interesting way to offer us, your classmates, a brief introduction as to who you are and why you joined the class! This is awesome and I envy your imaginative talent. This was quite the joy to read and I thank you for helping me to broaden my own imagination.
Howdy, Robin:TheRhymeMaven and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "Mirrored Flashes of Time…" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
I have rated this piece a 5 because that is as high as the system will allow me to go. But in all honesty, this is a 10. Living not too far from the Gulf of Mexico, I remember the horror and the devastation as if it were yesterday. Normally, I am not one to watch TV, but the three months of that fateful time period would not allow my eyes, or my heart, to peel away from the set. I drove my boyfriend insane. I cried from my gut for three long and horrid months. Then, I couldn't watch any more. I couldn't listen any more. I couldn't think about it any more. It took me until the following Mardi Gras to be able to begin contemplating all the loss that occurred in so many ways. I remember the first time I got online and did a search for "Katrina destruction pictures" in early February of 2006. As soon as the results came up, my boyfriend cringed and walked to the bathroom and came back with two whole rolls of toilet paper. Without saying a word, he set them both right next to my mouse. This piece has captured my heart and my gut almost as if it were August 23, 2005 all over again. I sincerely hope that if this was written from an insider's perspective, all that can be has been restored.
SUGGESTIONS
None whatsoever.
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, SonofDrogo and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "A Heart That's Clean" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
An exceptionally well written Shakespearean sonnet that goes full circle in describing an inner battle dealing with forgiving one who has brought about pain and grief. I love the questions leading up to the final outcome, which is one we should all ultimately arrive at when dealing with such an event.
SUGGESTIONS
There is not one suggestion that could serve any purpose for this already perfect piece!
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, Devil Writer and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "Faceless Songs of Nothingness" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
WoW! I simply love the perfect flow of this well thought out and well written poem! The imagery is alarmingly real as it left the scene of transpiring death lingering in my mind. I am awed by your poetic talent. Thank you so much for sharing this; I will be marking it as one of my favorites.
SUGGESTIONS
NONE!! Why would I suggest any improvement for a piece that needs none? This, to me, is perfect as is.
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, Xander Riley and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "Love Angel" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
Awwww... how honestly open and sweet! Any wife, or sweetheart for that matter, would fall to her knees to have a poem such as this written for her. This is a very endearing piece that touched me in such a gentle and loving manner. Through your awesome poetic words, I could see the light in your wife's eyes and completely understand why you would crave that brightness forever. Thank you so much for sharing this piece of you with us all!
SUGGESTIONS
Maybe find me a man to love me this much!! Okay, since you can't do that... don't do anything. This poem is perfect and I wouldn't change a thing!
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy, Xander Riley and thank you for participating in "Invalid Item" hosted by ~*~Damiana Returned~*~. My name is Kristi and I will be reviewing your entry "The Stage of Life" . Please understand that I review as I hope to be reviewed ~ honestly and openly. I may make a suggestion in this review, but it will, of course, be just that... a suggestion. I tend to rate poetry on the feeling(s) the piece invokes in me, rather than on popularity or societal views and standpoints.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
An excellent rendition of life that briefly touches on some of the most important and often disregarded aspects that we all experience. I love how you have used the stage and a scene being played out as the metaphor. Every reader will be able to relate to this piece and be able to place him/herself right into the starring role! Great job!!
SUGGESTIONS
NONE!! I think this piece is perfect as is.
Thank you for sharing this piece of yours with all of us here at WDC. And again, thank you for entering the contest. I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you back for Round 11!!
Howdy aralls! I am here to offer you a review of your item: "Master Charles Henry Davis" that you entered in "Invalid Item" ! Please note that my method of reviewing is based on honesty, how I like to be reviewed, and the overall feeling(s) that your piece invokes in me.
IN GENERAL
Thank you for providing me with such awesome reading material. Not only is it extremely well thought out and well written, it is eye-opening, informative, touching and inspiring. I am jealous of your impeccable style of writing; your ability to grab the reader's attention immediately and hold on to it until the very last word! I enjoyed reading this very much.
WHAT I LIKED BEST
Typically, I would say that the lesson was what I liked best, but in this case, I have to say that your writing style is what I enjoyed most. But, I would like to add that the style made the lesson that much more enjoyable to learn.
SUGGESTIONS
“I have my own pencil, ma’am.” I could be wrong, but I think "ma'am" should be capitalized since it is being used as the name.
I have a eight-year-old "a" should be "an".
Thank you for entering in this month's contest and for the opportunity to read, rate and review your piece! I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you again in the next round!!
Howdy warriormom! I am here to offer you a review of your item: "Danny ((still under construction))" that you entered in "Invalid Item" ! Please note that my method of reviewing is based on honesty, how I like to be reviewed, and the overall feeling(s) that your piece invokes in me.
IN GENERAL
A very well written and well styled short that narrates the difficulties and horrors of dealing with a childhood condition I am just now learning about. This piece is well thought out and informative.
WHAT I LIKED BEST
I liked having the opportunity to learn something new, namely that this Attachment Disorder is sometimes the basis for the mentality of serial killers and psychopaths.
SUGGESTIONS
Jeni was 7, adopted now for 2 years, Typically, the rules of writing numbers require that those under 10 are spelled out while 10 and above are written numerically. So, "7" and "2" should both be "seven" and "two".
or concern about seeing, his mother. The comma should be placed after "about" rather than after "seeing".
into the “system”, where he would The comma is not necessary.
For instance once they were awakened Place a comma after "instance".
Thank you for entering in this month's contest and for the opportunity to read, rate and review your piece! I wish you the best of luck and hope to see you again in the next round!!
Oh, MY!! Who cares about the rhyme, meter, flow, rhythm, or anything else! This is so sweet and I am more than extremely honored to be your friend! Thank you for the awesome sentiments throughout this poem! You are truly the best thing that has happened to me in a long time!! Lub you so much!
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Kristi Love
! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor 
Consider changing "its" to "it's" since it is a contraction of "it is".
I assume we were missing a crucial part somewhere! 
I love this piece and am so thankful you shared it with us all. 
None whatsoever.
“I have my own pencil, ma’am.” 
I could be wrong, but I think "ma'am" should be capitalized since it is being used as the name.