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Bad girl?? Sounds like you were a bad boy! Bad, bad boy!!
MY FAVORITE PART
I couldn’t wait much longer. I needed to be within.
I lowered my face to kiss the redness of her skin
and taste of her reaction and her liquid pleasure
before taking her and sliding in to her full measure.
SUGGESTIONS
No suggestions are necessary!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I tried my best not to get all hot and bothered while reading this naughty tale, but the sublime wording and the awesome talent of this poet got the better of me! I think I shall stay in this folder a while longer! Thanks for sharing this steamy piece!
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Revenge (18+) A run-in with an exwife at a bar... the title says it all! (Adult Humor) #1534917 by 🌕 HuntersMoon
This is great! Of course we have all desired an opportunity to play "gotcha"! It's what life is all about, right? lol
MY FAVORITE PART
She came over to the table and sat her big ass down
and didn't even notice that my greeting was a frown.
SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions to offer for this hilarious piece of revenge!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I love how I could actually see her fat ass sitting down there at the table with a smirk on her face. Especially near the very end, right before the "gotcha"! And the picture... I see stars in the lights... resembling a Lone Star... thought you might have been in the Lone Star state where all the asses are bigger!!
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It is always cool to read what I refer to as "rhyming stories". This is not just a regular poem that sends a message or depicts one scene; it tells a story and these type fascinate me most!
MY FAVORITE PART
Needless to say I lost layers of skin
from all of the bathes and required scrubbin’
from head to toe to get rid of the smell.
I remember they burned my clothes as well.
SUGGESTIONS
and I swear, every word, is nothing but the truth. I think if you were to remove "the", this line would flow smoother.
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am still sitting here with a silly grin on my face, wishing I could have seen this! But, honestly, you do such a fabulous job in your writings, that I feel like I was there! Please keep 'em comin'!
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Strawberry (13+) One thinks of the most curious things when one is doing something illegal. #1168675 by Artemis The Spy
WoW!! What an incredible story with a shocking ending that totally took me off guard.
MY FAVORITE PART
He shot the bank guard in the chest.
SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions to offer! I love it just as it is!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I am impressed by this author's ability to draw the reader in to the scene with so few, but very cleverly chosen words. I could smell the bitterness of the cigarette in the car as well as the strawberries and cream from the picnic. Well, I could smell them before I discovered the strawberries were spoiled! Thank you for sharing this awesome short, short story!
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What an awesome way to showcase your works of art!
MY FAVORITE PART
A couple months of waiting
and now, at last, I can see
another book that I've created
that means a lot to me!
SUGGESTIONS
This poem needs no improving!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I hate to sound redundant, but again, I walk away inspired! Through this simple poem, I have made the decision to commit to a working relationship with PublishAmerica and can only hope that I achieve the pride you have accomplished which is evident in your poetry! Good luck with your next book! I am very excited for us both!
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What a spectacular homage to a very brave and patriotic soul! This is absolutely beautiful!
MY FAVORITE PART
The hardships of captivity then faced with bravery
and as the time passed slowly, he could now see
that home was a special place, he longed to go
back to the fields and hills that he used to know.
SUGGESTIONS
No suggestions could serve to improve this already wonderful piece!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I love the way a respectful story was told in poetic form. This author is spellbinding and inspiring! Thank you for sharing this awesome poem with us!
I think this is a fabulously, well written poem! I love the rhythmic flow and the rhyming, poetic form! The message contained within the words is one that is real and painful. I hope, if this is a "true story poem", that all is well now and that the blessings beyond all measure were found and cherished! Thank you for sharing this terrific piece with us all!
Very well written poem that I can somewhat relate to. I understand the strong yearning for mail when behind bars and know the deep meaning that each written word bears. I am terribly sorry that you had to suffer through mail call; I know how much of a let down it is not to get any. Which is exactly why I am currently creating a website where inmates can post ads for free for penpals! It is not up and running yet, but I am putting the word out in some female Texas prisons and hoping they want to join in on the fun! Thank you for sharing this with us all!
Regretfully, I can relate to this. From both sides of the glass. I know too well the helpless feeling that is derived from the "glass touching" as you refer to it. But no matter how helpless the feeling, it is an action that must be performed. I do hope that the nightmare is over for you and is now something that can be viewed as an experience ending with wisdom and growth. I was just released from prison April 21st; thank all the powers that be that I was only there for 2 months and that it was something that was necessary for me to re-evaluate the meaning and importance of my life. I am quite proud to say that I although I am not necessarily a "somebody" now, I am no longer a "nobody"! Thank you for having the courage to write and share this with us all!
Lord! This is proof that inspiration can appear from anywhere! lol What a great, humorous rendition of Humpty Dumpty with a drastic twist! I can see why you had fun writing this and I definitely had fun reading it! Thank you for sharing it with us all here at WDC!
Hi! My name is Kristi and I will be judging "A Kind of Madness" for ~A BROKEN HEART POETRY CONTEST~
THE POEM
This poem follows the required prompt of "All By Myself" very nicely! Great job!
RHYTHM/RHYME
While this piece does not rhyme, the rhythm flows smoothly for the reader.
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
I did not notice any spelling or grammatical errors! Awesome!
WHAT I LIKED
Everything! Honestly, everything!
FAVORITE PART
And there's a little furrow on your brow
that's too cute for me to ever want smoothed
And the sound of your laughter echoes in me
Until my slow beating heart pumps lava in my veins
IMPROVEMENTS
I have no suggestions at all that could be offered for improvement of this poem.
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
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Goodness! Such a descriptive and detailed list of thoughts! I enjoyed every single one of them!
MY FAVORITE PART
my tongue is scarred from every time i bit it to hold back the i love yous
my skin has thickened to the point of asphyxia
and all i want is to shed it
cash in my jaded credit
and then nail my feet to this soapbox
and show off my goddamn stigmata
SUGGESTIONS
and then explode like a ironic catastrophe Consider changing "a" to "an".
OVERALL IMPRESSION
What a fabulous offer of insight into the thoughts of this poet! Thoroughly mind encompassing! Thank you for sharing your extreme poetic talent with us all!
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Oh, how sad. This piece absolutely broke my heart.
MY FAVORITE PART
What are these?
Peas
Carrots
Raisin Bran
See she can read at the age of three
And then at the age of twelve I have to teach you the same words you taught me
What are these?
Peas
Carrots
SUGGESTIONS
I have absolutely no suggestions that could improve this already spectacular piece!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
Although tragic, the poet brings to light this mental displacement in an honest and realistic manner. I am so sorry for all that have to endure the frustrations and agonies of Alzheimer's. Thank you for sharing this with us all.
Wow! What a descriptive piece regarding the agony experienced from a broken heart and being left all alone. These words almost had me feeling the agony. Great job!
RHYTHM/RHYME
Rhyme is not a factor in this poem. The rhythm flows like a poetic story!
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
I only noticed one typo on the first line: I never beleived in a broken heart (this should be "believed")
WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed the depth of the message; the detailed emotions were undeniable.
FAVORITE PART
My jokes which had her in tears of laughter
Now fell like lead balloons leaving me standing on stage
With the merciless hecklers throwing their barbed jeers
SUGGESTIONS
The only suggestion I have for this piece is to correct the typo I mentioned above.
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
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What a brutally honest message about a brutally honest subject.
MY FAVORITE PART
The golden liquid swirls in his bottle, as he takes time
to empty another, then another, until the teardrops start,
from the depths of his delusion, the pain he feels is real.
He continues to shorten his life and it breaks my heart.
SUGGESTIONS
I have absolutely no suggestions to offer. This piece is quite dramatic as it is!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
Although I feel terrible that alcoholism has disrupted both lives depicted in this poem, I am quite glad that I read it. I hope for many more to feast their eyes upon the words and the feelings that are contained in this piece. Keep up the awesome work!
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Oh! I just love this poem! The style is appealing and the beauty in the words is magical!
MY FAVORITE PART
It doesn't seem possible that I've gotten old
when I watch as the sun sets, red and gold
reflected on the pond in the last bit of light,
I can gaze at the moon and stars at night
here at HOME.
SUGGESTIONS
I have no suggestions to offer that could make this poem any better. It is perfect!
OVERALL IMPRESSION
I could see you standing there on the hill waving to your neighbors as they walked by. I could feel the quaintness of the home where your son's dog and granddaughter's cat live in harmony. I could sense the feeling of nostalgia you must feel when watching the sun set in the evenings. A very beautiful poem with even more beautiful sentiment! Thank you for sharing!
Oh, WoW! What an awesome story! It had my undivided attention right from the very start. And honestly, I didn't even see the train coming! I had a feeling she was going to end it, but I figured she was going to jump off a cliff or something similar. Very well written short story! I am so glad I stumbled on it. Thank you for sharing it with us all and good luck in the contest!
Hi! My name is Kristi and I will be judging "The Bar" for ~A BROKEN HEART POETRY CONTEST~
THE POEM
I absolutely love this!! The realness is overwhelming and who couldn't relate to this? A spectacular piece that follows the required prompt of "all by myself" perfectly!
RHYTHM/RHYME
Rhyme is not a factor in this piece and although there really is no said rhythm, it flows very nicely for the reader! Great job!
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
There are no spelling or grammatical errors present. Awesome!
WHAT I LIKED
EVERYTHING!!!
FAVORITE PART
He plied me with shots, orgasms and blow jobs –
I repaid the favor.
IMPROVEMENTS
I have not one single suggestion to offer for improvement of this piece!
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
Hi! My name is Kristi and I will be judging "Absolute Zero" for ~A BROKEN HEART POETRY CONTEST~
THE POEM
What an awesome depiction of being "all by myself"! The comparison the poet uses here between absolute zero and loneliness is spectacular and spellbinding!
RHYTHM/RHYME
Rhyme is not a factor in this free style form and the rhythm is perfect! Marvelous job!
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
There are no spelling or grammatical errors present in this piece! Awesome!
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the comparison as I mentioned previously, between the point of absolute zero and loneliness.
FAVORITE PART
It was your love that, sun like,
made the days dance
made the nights warm
made my world alive.
Then, it was gone.
IMPROVEMENTS
I have absolutely no suggestions for improvement!
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
Howdy! My name is Kristi Love and I will be judging this round of the "Invalid Item"
Review of:
ORANGE (ASR) This poem was a prompt to write a poem using the color orange. #1541443 by Miss Natalie
THE POEM
An extremely well written poem depicting the color orange.
RHYTHM/RHYME
Both the rhythm and the rhyme flow perfectly throughout this piece!
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
I noticed no errors grammatically and only one spelling mistake/typo: They say the lightening was ruthless that year, (lightening should be lightning).
WHAT I LIKED
I like the poetic way this whole piece flows.
FAVORITE PART
Green land returned to the beds of the wild
Memories linger in the mind of a child.
IMPROVEMENTS
The only suggestion I have to offer is to correct the typo that I have listed above.
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
A very realistic look into the nastiness of a disease.
RHYTHM/RHYME
The rhythm is very nice throughout. Rhyme is not a factor in this piece.
SPELLING/GRAMMAR
I did not notice any spelling or grammatical errors. Great job!
WHAT I LIKED
The reality of it all.
FAVORITE PART
Some days I just can't cope,
I would like to leave a very long note.
But I don't.
So, just please, please!
Could I have some toilet paper please?
There is no cure, this I know for sure.
You may never see me; I may just be
right down the hall, sitting in my stall.
You just may hear me calling out!
Could I have some toilet paper please?
IMPROVEMENTS
I have no suggestions to offer that could help to improve this already incredible piece!
Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!
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