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Review of Up, Up and Away  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hey Leger,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!

         Wow, Wow, Wow! Loved the twist at the end. I suspected something like that was going to happen, but still. Excellent! Actually, until Leo climbed in the basket, I thought Leann was going to fall somehow, or the balloon would crash. No suggestions or critiques, just loved the story. Thank you for sharing!



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Review of Overboard  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hey Mr. Jones,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 8th WDC Anniversary!

         This is very good. I do prefer rhymes, but I know in lyrics that rhyming isn't necessary all the time. Doesn't really matter, I enjoyed this. You relate a short, very short, story here, sad and kind of down, but an excellent story just the same.

         Despite being a somewhat sad topic, this was a good set of lyrics to read. Thank you for sharing!



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Review of wisdom  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hey Tank,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 7th WDC Anniversary!

         Wow, a very short poem, but very good. Since it's so short, this review will be also. Nicely done in very few words. So very true. Thank you for sharing.


P.S. As a retired Submariner (Nuke) myself, I find myself wondering which boat is on your Port? I know I should know it, but I can't recall it from memory...



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Hey Kiya!
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 13th WDC Anniversary!

         As I've been so many times in the past few years, I'm ashamed of my country. No, not the country, I love it, nothing can change that. I'm ashamed of my Government. I know (or think I do) what President Trump wants to do, is trying to do, but it seems the pendulum that allowed you to remain here all those years, decided that overnight it would swing the opposite direction. I'm sorry for you, I hope you are doing well back home, I hope you've found happiness and peace. Well written, very well done. Thank you for sharing.



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Hey Halikar
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!

         You've written an interesting story here, I like the plot and your idea in it. But, it's all very vague, very general in nature. What it boils down to is, you do a lot of telling, very little showing in this story.

         I know, I know, you've heard that before I'm sure. But read this yourself, and ask yourself this question. "What in this story pulls you in emotionally?" Is there anything here that you could have described better? I know you described him driving down the road, he stopped to help the woman whose car had broken down. Tell me this. What kind of car was he driving? How old was it? What color was the woman's hair, how was she dressed, what was her name? His name? The young man in the garage... see what I mean? Your first paragraph is does an excellent job of describing the landscape he was driving through. It was about the time that he met the woman that your descriptions stopped. In giving your characters names, it helps a reader relate to them, feel what they're feeling. The thing to be cautious of though, is going too far the other way. The part where all you do is describe in great detail, and the storyline gets bogged down in boringville because it's going no where. It can't, because you can't get through all the descriptions. See what I mean?

         Having said all that, please don't think I didn't like this, or enjoy reading it. It read a little like an old Twilight Zone episode I once watched. So good job there. Just show us a bit more about your characters, a bit more detail. Please.

         Thank you for sharing!


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Review of The Learning Tree  
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My Dear Katrina,
         I really love this one! I loved the humor, the flow for me was perfect. I could almost hear you reading this to me... *Smile*

         I have to confess, I have no suggestion for this, I think your sense of humor really shines through here. You made Adam, Eve, Gabriel, and 'The Boss', very real in this, you had me chuckling a bit as I read it. So glad you are writing again, so glad you posted this to the newsfeed. I wish you luck in the contest (Which contest by the way?), I can't seem to win any I enter now....




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Review of Tony's Problem  
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Hey T.C.,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 12th WDC Anniversary!

         Wow, I could never write something like this. I could never get the slang down right, could never think of how to word a dark deed like this, but you've done well here!

         With all that said, much as I like this, it leaves me with so many questions. My first one though is, "Were you under a word count when you wrote this?" There are a lot of things you haven't mentioned, a lot of open ends here. Why did Tony kill this person? What led up to it? How did he eventually dispose of the body? Was Tony ever caught and convicted for this? (How in the heck did you know all this? lol)

         Seriously, my only disconnect with this, is that you jump into the middle of the story, allow us to see that Tony has killed a Prosecutor, and is in the process of sloppily disposing of the body. He's given advice by two, more experienced, mobsters. Then you leave us hanging. So, if you can, if you want, complete this!

         A dark story of murder and death, well written, but it needs to be completed. Well done, thank you for sharing!



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Review of Robot Love  
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Hey Finn,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 8th WDC Anniversary!

         You have a really nice start to this story, then it just fades away when Ivan poured tea for her. Even for Flash Fiction, this is short, unless you were under a word count, but that's not mentioned anywhere.

         It seems to me that you had a nice idea to start with, then found yourself lost as to how to proceed. Your plot is sound, but you need to expand on it quite a bit. Additionally, your ending is very abrupt. The jump from having your brain transplanted into an Android to the idea of large headed Aliens being humans from the future is large. Very large. You need to make it more of a segue instead of a leap off a cliff. All this would make your story much longer though, no longer a piece of flash fiction.



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Hey Weirdone,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 11th WDC Anniversary!

         This story is pretty interesting, and in some ways, cute. Your 'Gorlothians' are what caught my attention the most, I found the idea of them being able to change from male to female and back unique. Even more so was their attitude/personality, it was totally new and fresh. The solution to feminism was good, but it did seem that the ending was a little abrupt. It would have been nice to see this develop more; but then, I think the 'charm' of it would not be there.

         This does need a little editing TLC, very minor. I noted a couple of things for you below.

1. When men find out I am sometimes male, they react and it funny." It should be its.

2. And that's why Human men have such harder lives then Gorlothians. Then should be than.

3. It During your initiation, it performed quite nicely even if you took several minutes to make it erect." It seems that the first word does not belong in this sentence.


         An interesting story, maybe it could be longer, that's just an opinion...




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Review of The Tyrannosaurus  
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Hey R.H.N.,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 9th WDC Anniversary!

         This is a very cute story told from a dinosaur's point of view. I would call it a juvenile story, one suitable for children around the age of 10 or so. I will not comment on your use of English, since I'm pretty sure that being Egyptian, English is not your native language. I could never think of writing or speaking in a foreign language, especially one so foreign from Arabic as English is!

         I thought that writing this from a dinosaurs point of view as unique. You gave the T-Rex a decent personality, wrote it as 'almost' a nice-guy. *Smile* You did leave me wondering where George and Lara went to, how they disappeared so fast. But being a contest entry, maybe you were under a word limit. This is an enjoyable story to read, thank you for sharing!



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Hey Worsham,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 8th WDC Anniversary!

         A very brief poem about Mother Nature that has a good flow and rhyme scheme to it. I like the similes you presented in each verse. This could have been a little longer perhaps, a little more moving, but right now, I'm not sure how. Very nice touch with this though, it makes one think. Thank you for sharing!



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Hey Neva,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 16th WDC Anniversary!

         This is a very cute, short sonnet! I know how you feel, my fingers are about the same sometimes. It's not an age thing, is it? (I know I'm younger than you, but once you get past fifty, age is just a number).

         I really enjoyed this though, I could feel your pain and chagrin at some of the misspellings. Thank God for spell checker, huh! I particularly liked the line about your fingers being from Mars or Venus. Suppose one hand was from Mars, the other Venus? Hmmmm, I wonder how that would work? Either way, it was a fun poem to read. Thank you for sharing!



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Hey Phydeaux,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 12th WDC Anniversary!

         Okay, I confess. I saw a review of this from Angus and had to read it. He was absolutely right in everything he said about this. I can see why it won, I can see why you're proud of it. Like him, I hope this is fiction, not personal, non-fiction.

         This is so well done, loved how you slipped in the flashback, loved the POV you wrote this in. Brings it all home that much more. Well done! Thank you for sharing!



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Review of Man`s Best Friend  
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Hey Joanna,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!

         I can really relate to this story! I'm living with a woman who loves dogs, having raised, trained, and showed many over the years. When we met, she had two Akita's, and eventually lost them both to age. She later fostered, then adopted another Akita, but lost her after 4 years to Cancer. Now we (I was with her at this point), adopted another Brindle Akita. She is a real treasure!

         Your article truly describes how dogs treat their owners, and how a good owner treats their companions. I take the dogs (We also have a Schipperke) for walks almost daily, and am looking to get the walks to be longer in length. I loved your article, it really struck home. Thank you for sharing!



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Hey Scott,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 8th WDC Anniversary!

         This is a pretty cute story, I really enjoyed the idea of a person dying, and coming back from the dead. Not as a Zombie, but as a person who's decaying, despite everything. Interesting thought...

         While I enjoyed the story, and the tongue-in-cheek humor in it, it was a little hard to get through. I think what made it hard, was the long, run-on sentences, and what I'll call the 'outtakes'. The sentence within a sentence if you will. There were several places where you injected a long line within a sentence using parentheses. This made for some pretty long sentences. Shorter one's would be best. I've learned to shorten most of mine, because I used run-on sentences when I first started writing. I've adopted the philosophy that if you can't read the line without taking a breath, it's too long. And no fair taking a deep breath to do it either! *Smile*

         Overall, this is a good story, a bit off-beat, but good nonetheless. Thank you for sharing!




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Hey Bill,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 16th WDC Anniversary!

         Okay, I confess, I don't give Five Star ratings very often. But anything written with the Swedish Chef's accent and lingo, with no really obvious errors certainly deserves Five Stars.

         Yep, you writing this with the Swedish Chef's accent really made it. I struggled to read it at times, mainly because in my head, I wanted to hear it as it would be on TV. I think you did a great job with this, I know I couldn't do it. Heck, I can't write in any accent, but that's another thing itself.

         I loved the idea of the Chef trying to stuff the turkey while it was live, especially the things he was stuffing it with! I felt it was only appropriate when the turkey ran off. Thank you for sharing!




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Review of The Bridge  
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Hey Quizmo,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         I've often pondered the things you write here. A bridge, waiting to be crossed, maybe from only one side. I like this little essay. I really like the message it brings us. Crossing the bridge carefully to start a life, but return home safely. Too many of us leave home and rarely return. Like prodigal children, we explore a bit of the world. all the while our hearts yearn for home. Your small essay here explains all that in a few words. Far better than I could in the same space. Nice read, thank you for sharing!



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My Dear, Dear Carol,
         You seriously didn't think I'd let September go by without dropping in to read something of yours? Happy 12th WDC Anniversary!

         Alrighty, now that you've gone and gotten me hooked on this story, wanna tell me where the rest is? You gave just enough to hook me, you knew you would with those small, short descriptions of both humans, and whatever Jill had in her fanny pack. Nice start, very nice. Now where's the rest?


         Seriously though. It's a good start, but it would be nice to know where your mind is taking us this time. I read both parts of the secret, had reviewed the original sometime ago, probably last year.... I've learned a little of how you write, and this one is excellent. If you finish it, or it's already complete somewhere, mind telling me where? Thank you for sharing M'Lady.


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Hey Carol,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 17th WDC Anniversary!

         There is something about you, your writing, that just makes me smile. Maybe it's your handle, and how it changes a little over time. I think it's your sense of humor. You have this way of making me smile about things you write, and this one is no different. Your sense of humor really shone in this one, writing from the POV of a Cow. Of course, your name is frequently Cowser, Thing, or Hooves, so why not write from that POV? I really enjoyed this, it was an excellent, fun, read! Thank you for sharing!

         P.S. You didn't think I could really let this month start and not visit your port, did you?

         P.S.S. I've browsed through your port a bit; I too miss Yellow Rose She was such a sweet person, one of the nicest I've ever had the pleasure of meeting.



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Review of Writing a Novel  
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Hey Mordee,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 4th WDC Anniversary!

         I really liked this! Your sense of humor showed throughout the article, making me chuckle a couple of times. Yet through all the humor, I saw seriousness, and some good advice. Now, like you, if I could only follow it. I'm not sure I have a novel in me, though I'm working on what I call a long story (novel) now. I have the basic outline in my head, just need to get my fingers typing. But this isn't about me, it's about your article.

         It's towards the end of the article where I saw the good advice. Make a plan, let the novel write itself if it wants/needs to. I've heard of outlining, but that's not what I do. Not sure about you. I think you should start on one, but sit down with a nice drink laced with Tequila, Margarita or Sunrise, and see where it takes you. My problem is, that stuff usually takes me to bed.... Well done here, thank you for sharing!



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Review of Love Story  
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Hey Rion,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 11th WDC Anniversary!

         This is truly a 'different' viewpoint, a different take, on the traditional Vampire story. You made your main character almost human, introduced us to them, and got us to understand what it could be like being immortal.

         At the same time, you caused me to question something I've seen in every vampire movie or novel. Vampires suck human blood, and if they get enough, the human (prey) dies. She didn't kill this man, but could have of course. The question you left me with was this. If she is getting more human by drinking his blood, wouldn't that happen to all Vampires? After all, if they drank human blood, wouldn't it 'thin' their immortal blood, thus making every Vampire more and more human with each passing day?

         This is well written, very little description of anyone, yet as you read it, you (I) built a picture of this main character in my mind. So without any real descriptions of the character, you managed to cause me to build a description on my own. Well done there!

         A very good story of a Vampire in love with a human, slowly realizing that as they take his blood, it causes them to be more human themselves. Thank you for sharing.



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Hey Marti
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 16th WDC Anniversary!

         This is a very nice poem, but it seems to lack depth. What I mean by that, is this is another one of those poems that's well written, flows well, tells us a story, but doesn't bring out much emotion. It's like many of the poems I've written; we've all written them.

         So how could you bring out emotion in this? First, why do you get down? What causes those feelings? So you can't sing or dance. What are you told that makes you think you can't do either of those? Tell us, better yet, use the poem to show us why you don't feel you have that talent. Poetry should bring out emotions in us. I cry frequently at some poems, the emotions they make me experience are phenomenal! That's what's missing here.

         This is a nice poem, don't get me wrong. I enjoyed it, but for me at least, it was not emotional at all. Thank you for sharing.




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Review of Echo Verse  
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Hey Dragon,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 14th WDC Anniversary!


         Echo verse or not, I love this poem! The first verse reminds me of the age I'm at (64). The second verse tends towards growth for the most part. Even the weeds, though I look at them in this poem as the problems we face as we live. And the final verse? Reborn, almost like a Phoenix rising from the ashes. Except it's our children, carrying on the human race. Not sure why it hit me this way, but it did. Excellent poem, thank you for sharing!



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Hey Two Of Four,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your SIXTEENTH WDC Anniversary!

         This story reminded me a lot of scenes from the movie, "The Mummy", where the beetles were under people's skin. Did they steal that idea from your story? *Laugh*

         This is well written, but it didn't seem complete. It seems his wife knew about the beetles, or had somehow planted them with that cake she made. At least that's the impression I got. You might want to elaborate on that if that's the case, build it more. There's a lot you could do with this to build it, strengthen it, and show us what's really going on. Nice morning read, thank you for sharing!




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Hey WW,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your ELEVENTH WDC Anniversary!

         I just had to come by again, and found this little gem of a story. I love Chicken Wings, Buffalo, BBQ, Jerk Seasoned, or however you want them served. My mother got me on them many years ago, chicken wings were the only part of the chicken she wanted to eat.

         I've been to the home of Buffalo Wings, Anchor Bar & Grill. Okay, it's one of the reported homes of wings, I think they came on the scene and no one will ever know who first started them.

         Like everything I've read of yours, this is well written, flows well, with no obvious errors. Then again, I enjoyed it too much to look deeply at it, nor do I desire to. Glad you were the 'Chicken Mama' long ago... Thank you for sharing!



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