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Review of Christmas '83  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Merry Christmas Nomad! Thanks for celebrating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's 10th Anniversary with your participation in "Musings and Memories! *Delight*


*Ornament1r*Wow! I so enjoyed this childhood story and entered into the vision with ease. I could feel the excitment of Christmas and felt sad at grandpa's passing. It is heartwarming that you have cherished the gift still and it is a memory that is wonderful to remember. Grandpa's are so special. *Heart*

*Ornament1r* The story was coherent and easy to follow with lots of active vocabulary and strong images. I had to smile at the map of Santa's route. Cute! The word "bene" needs to be "been" though. *Wink* The narrative I voice was consistent and tone was emotional and suited each incident.

*Starstruck* This was fun to read and very inspiring as the magic has continued in your life today! Thanks for sharing your vision and experience. *Heart*



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Review of Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC and Merry Christmas! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Ornament1r*Wow! You ask some serious questions in this philosophical piece and It is a great awareness to know that negative thoughts can colour our world. The voice is clear in its depressive tone as the mind seeks to comprehend. I think we can relate to it.

I notice the need for an apostrophe in "what's" and a question mark after "come too?" The word "too" needs to be "to". *Wink*

I like how you end with the question about us being part of the problem... as I see our positive mind can also effect the world. We can be too easily drawn into the negative of the mainstream. That we can see the effect gives me hope that or awareness can uplift us to create or choose a different manner.

I enjoyed this expression as it gives something to ponder. I find that expressing the dark often empties us to then consider something lighter. Thanks for the wise reflection.*Star*

*Fairy*I keep trying to be the one who breaks molds and choose to be happy. Makes me wierd I guess, but I will risk it. *Laugh*

Peace of the season and keep writing on! *Delight*

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Review of My Secret Name  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Holly1* Peace of the Season Snow. I was flitting around on the Read and Review and guess who showed up? *Delight* Thanks for sharing this little poem about your name. I like the idea of it being your secret as if sacred to you. The image in the last line is profound and I can so relate to it as our souls are limitless! *Smile*

I wondered about the word "of" in the second verse. It puzzles me. It makes more sense with out it or with the word "as" but maybe I am missing something. *Confused* It was interesting that snow descends "through" to get to earth. The imagery and meaning of the name is evocative and deep!

Thanks for sharing an insight into you! *Starstruck**Snow5*

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Review of Never Forgive You  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Alex and Merry Christmas! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


I found this title on the Read and Review page and the title had a strong vibe. The first paragraph of your piece read like a poem or lyric as I heard the rhyme and flow. The second part has more off rhyme words.

I wondered if putting in on the page in a poetic format would make it clear to readers that it is meant as a song or poem.

eg. Perhaps in verses like this:
"I'll never forgive you, after all you have done
You've treated me so wrong, you're clearly not the one." etc.

It has a strong message of how the writer feels and his hope some day to follow the Lord's advice. The voice has a reality to it. The comparison to a "comedy show" is vivid! *Thumbsup* Wow!

*Starstruck*Thanks for sharing your powerful expression! Keep on letting it flow! *Quill*

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*Holly1* Merry Christmas Tinker! I'm just popping in to say I enjoyed your entry in the Daily Poem Contest! Brilliant to use a Tanka to tell the Christmas story in a nut shell! *Thumbsup* It was an interesting choice. Using the future tense in the middle and end of the piece is evocative too. How "long ago" "a king will be born" is something to ponder.

The use of consonance with the "w" "g" and "sh" as well as the assonance of Long "a" and "o" creates a pleasing soundscape to read aloud too. *Smile*

Thanks for sharing your vision! *Starstruck*

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Review of A Gift In 2017  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Happy Day sonali! Thanks for celebrating "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group's 10th Anniversary with your participation in "Musings and Memories! *Delight*

*Ornament1r* Wow! This is a precious experience with a profound outcome. It is so inspiring how life is so generous and how one choice can create connections we could not imagine! *Heart* I fell happy for you as I know what you mean about baggage!! LOL

*Ornament1r* The story is biographical and straightforward in its factual detail and was easy to follow and see how the connections occurred. I was a bit confused by some uses of commas but I am not a pro.

*Ornament1r* I noticed one typo in "donated blood or her". I think the "or" should be "for" or "to". *Wink* I think you need to add the words "to say" in this line: "keeping count, that two". It was an awkward line to read. eg. Pinged...... count, to say that.."

*Starstruck* Thanks so much for sharing this personal and uplifting experience. It adds so much light to the world vibe! *Heart*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hiya Ezra!


Yay! I am raiding with Power Crew and I found this at our Poetry Place and am happy to do a review to celebrate you!

*Fairy*Personal Impression
Wow! I really enjoyed reading your carefully woven expression which captures so vividly the scenery of the adventure of seeking the site and the anticipation and wonder of it. *Thumbsup*


*Fairy* Form and Flow

The free verse suits the theme and descriptive language is well chosen to create a clear vision of the place as well as an effective soundscape for oral reading. Your use of poetic conventions like assonance, alliteration and consonance and a splash of rhyme makes for an interesting and dramatic read. I especially liked reading the second verse which imitates the sound of street and the third verse was wonderful. Words like "riddled, crenellations and then later "ensconced" and "besmirched" really add a high tone to the weave. We don't hear words like this often and gives it an old worldly feel. I see you have some rhyme couplets and other times use inner rhyme within lines. I enjoy the variety. *Star*

The two line verses are coherent as they lead us on the path with you. I smiled when you tell how he comes to pay homage to someone he never knew etc. It shows the influence the deceased author had through time. *Thumbsup*

Ending with a question invites the reader to ponder. *Thumbsup* I think Wilde would be pleased with the poet traveller's effort! *Wink*

*Fairy* Grammar/Punctuation

Natural punctuation assisted the flow and read. I did wonder if a comma would be more apt after "crenellations" as the next line seems to follow from it grammatically.
I also wondered about the period after "undertaken" before "cross". I wanted to read a colon or comma again as the "to cross" phrase is the "task" previously mentioned.
It is tricky and there is likely no right or wrong in punctuation, so these are small considerations that occurred to me. *Smile*
I had no trouble comprehending the meaning in any case. *Bigsmile*

Well conceived poem and voice! Thanks for sharing your vision and amazing crafting! *Starstruck* Write on!

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Review of Sampson  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Leafr*Hello Abby Gayle! Welcome to the Power crew! I am here with a review to celebrate you in our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group Raid! *Delight*


*Delight* What an interesting idea for a poem! I was drawn to the title which is speaks directly to the theme.

*Leafbr* Your short two verse expression encapsules the story of Sampson concisely and it was fun to read with its use of rhyme and repeated letter sounds like "s", "f", "d" etc. I like the simplicity of two word lines and vivid verbs like "pruned" and "riddled" add vibrancy and add to the strength of tone and abrupt sound. Good for you for using a synomym for "hair" in the last verse. I can so imagine the long curly hair and the imagery of being pruned. Well conceived vision.

I wondered if "room" was a big enough image for the use of his strength. *Wink* Yet I like the "r" to match with the r word in verse one as part of the soundscape.

*Starstruck* Thanks for sharing this fascinating picture of this hero.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Delight* Hail Girl with a Heartbeat! *Heart* Here I am with a review to celebrate you in our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group Raid! *Pumpkin*

I was drawn to the vivid image in your title as it also sounds mysterious. *Thumbsup* You really used the prompt words in a descriptive and coherent invention too. Having us enter the woods with the couple, I could imagine the elements of surprise that are heightened in the woods at night. Wonderfully vivid. *Smile* Using the present tense at the end has the reader join in.

*Burstr* I wondered about your use of punctuation especially where you use periods where a comma would be more effective in connecting the flow of lines. eg. Line one naturally leads to the second...eg. "As we walked.....we were not.." Same with line three which follows from line 2. You could use the word. Commas make more sense in flow of the read.
In line 4, I think the last phrase repeats the idea in the first.
Perhaps it could be tightened, "We stopped at the cry of the Frost Owl, or "We stopped, becoming aware...." as you link the next line with the description of the cry.*Wink* If you read to the end you will find other lines that naturally flow together and seem stopped by period pauses.

In short, try to use natural punctuation for flow here. The scene of the walk is coherent and seems to lead us to the present time in the end.

Another place to perhaps tighten up the writing is in lines 8-10. You use a lot of gerunds (ing) and I think active verbs would be more potent. eg. "the way out, the leaves crunched..feet." Then " We know the Frost....as his cry echoes..."

"echo's" should be a verb form. *Wink* The last line is evocative yet it seems to refer to the "cry" in the previous word as opposed to the Owl. I assume that the couple does not see it again.

*Thumbsup*An effective experience to share in this free style poetic form. With a bit of tweaking it can be even more potent. Thanks for sharing and entering Stormy's contest. It is a challenge to create using prompt words. *Starstruck*

Thanks for sharing your vision and your craft. *Star* Light on the path as you write on!

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Review of The Soup  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Ghost* Hail W.D.Wilcox! *Pumpkin*

*Jackolantern*I enjoyed being drawn into this short episode. The atmosphere and main character is well set and I could imagine the man slurping the soup. I liked the way you describe his skin. The waitress reaction and limp at the beginning made me curious and the twisted ending was evocative and explained a lot. EWWWWW! That it was in his soup was unpleasant and made me wonder if he knew it was there and certainly had me thinking he was responsible for the waitress's issue. Wow!

*Leafr*I think it should be "waitress, who" instead of "that gave him..." in paragraph 3. I am not sure you needed to say "ignoring her" as you indicate in the previous line that he is pretending not to see.., unless it is for emphasis.

*Leafr*I wondered if "wearing his hair" should be "wore" to stay in the past tense.

*Ghost**Sick*The last line was a surprising ending and gave me pause to think about the character "now". *Wink* Good show!

Keep on writing on! *Pumpkin*

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Review of Exposure  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Anja Starke! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*I was drawn to the evocative title word and it made me curious. I like the whole idea of using writing to express what may be harder to say aloud. I really enjoyed reading your free flow and the tone of voice as I read aloud.

It was effective the way you lead the reader with your philosophy and then suddenly reveal the truth in the second last line. Brilliant! I felt the jibe there. *Thumbsup* The varying line lengths and your use of periods was effective for the dramatic flow.
Use of poetic tools like consonance and assonance in your word choice added to a wonderful soundscape. *Star* The point of view is vivid and sounded like wisdom from experience. The determined energy is also strong.

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. The style suited the content and emotion. *Starstruck*

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Review of CELEBRATING ME  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Keggie! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Cool*The title and theme appealed to me as positive and inspirational. We need to praise and be be proud of our gifts more often! In your short three line poem you share how it feels to be celebrating you! The words "joyful" and being filled with glee give a sense of that jubiliant feeling. They have similar meaning and yet repeating the idea gives emphasis.

Using the word today keeps it in the present moment too, which is all we have really and if each moment we carry this joy, it can lead to the next creation. *Smile*

I think you need a comma after "happy".

I was wondering if there were any achievements in particular you were celebrating, though I think just celebrating our own BEING is what it is about, no matter what we DO. *Laugh*

Thanks for the cheery reminder! *Starstruck*

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Review of Feathers  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Balloony*Hiya Ken! *Delight* I am happy to review this in honour of Breast Cancer month! *Awarenessp* I was drawn to the image in the title as it was appealing and evocative. *Heart*

*Heartp* What a lovely and eloquent expression about your experience with your wife. I appreciated the metaphors of feathers and water in contrast. The imagery of the first verse is potent as is the action of "pulling life plumage". Wow! Very sad to contemplate.

I stopped to ponder on "life plumage" wondering if it should be 'life's" but I think it works the way it is as well.*Wink*

Your use of periods is effective and adds a dramatic effect. The use of a free style poem suits the emotional content and theme. *Smile*

*Thumbsup* The comparison of her darkness and you playing the lighter tone is brilliant and a tribute to not only the suffering one but to the care giver---both being strong in their own way. You weave the light and dark effectively with chosen words and images. The last line echos a deep truth.... the helplessness is under it all, yet the holding of a positive vision falls is so vital in spite of the eventual outcome. Wow! I also feel the not wanting to know what is coming as well, to keep strength up until one has to deal with grief. I honour your gift in being able to write this. *Heartp*

Thanks for sharing such a personal expression. *Starstruck*

Keep the ink flowing as you follow your muse and write on!*Star*
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*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC seacarpenter! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Delight*The title and theme made me curious so I chose to check this out when I saw it on the Read a Newbie page! Adding an acronym for Autism as an example was a neat idea too. You do not give the source for it. Do you know where it came from? If so, good to add it. *Wink*

The acronym is like a short acrostic poem written downwards on the page. Cool. *Cool*

I have known some kids with Aspergers and your ideas seem to fit. I like your added line about the serious. LOL They do come across that way at times. *Smile* I wonder if there would be an actual quality beginning with A instead of Always. But I see you are patterning your piece on the sample above. *Smile*

Very thoughtful and evocative as I believe defining is difficult. *Star* Thanks for sharing your vision. *Starstruck*

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Review of GEOMETRIC  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Duke Raoul! I am happy back to check out another of your cool poems! *Delight*


The title and theme are unique and appealing and again you do an effective job on mixing acrostic with nonet form. Fitting the concepts into the tight structure I imagine takes time and thought! *Salute*

*Laugh* I love this and could visualize the student bored and causing mischeif. In fact paper airplane making is quite common in classrooms! LOL Good choice of theme, setting and action. I can imagine the drama. The mood of the student and response to the test page is potent and well shown! *Thumbsup*

Combining the idea of geometry with airplanes and trajectories is brilliant too. Your vocabulary is well chosen for the math theme. The last three lines are my favourite. The last word is dramatic and you leave us wondering if it hit the target or someone else. LOL

The forms were both intact and you used some repeated first letter sounds and alliteration that added to the flow and soundscape for reading aloud. *Smile*The minimal use of punctuation was effective.

This was fun and ribbon-worthy! Thanks for sharing your gift! *Starstruck*

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Review of AUTOPSIED  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC Duke Raoul! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Cool*I was lured by the unique topic indicated by your cool title. What an amazing idea to mix an acrostic with a nonet. I appreciate the thought that went into this! *Salute*

*Star*Brilliant composition! I loved how you weave the theme of writing and use alliteration to good effect! It was great to read aloud and consider your notions. My favourite letter lines are O, S, A and d! The O line made me laugh. Marvelous sound effect and vivid image!

Both acrostic and nonet formats are effectively woven and reveal the potent tone and message! I had so much fun with this. Thanks for the inspiration. Now I want to try this mix! LOL Unique interpretation of autopsied. Genius! *Starstruck*

Thanks for sharing your inventive creation! It rocks! *Star*

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Review of Apocalypse  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Balloonp**Delight*Ahoy Bob! Here I am with a review for you as part of your win in "WDC- Wonder Deluxe Carnival! *Smile*

The title and the earth theme appealed to me and your vision is very vivid and sad. The notion in line seven about how exploiting is a drug is thought provoking and rings true for some people in this world. Wow! Well conceived and contrasted with the "gasping" rainforest. This image was a powerful choice to support your message.

Beginning the poem with a generic "some" people and their theories of how earth will be destroyed
was effective too and to then point a finger at our own actions in contrast to things outside our control gave it potency.

Your use of repeating sound and rhyme created a pleasing soundscape. I liked the 's', 'oi', "d", and "th" sounds which tie the lines together as well as the rhythm was rather free style. LInes 3-4, and 6-7 are my favorite to read aloud for flow.

I did ponder on the last line, "we've dug". The image is evocative and saying we have already dug them, not are digging...makes the apocolypse a real certainty. Wow!

Amazing to hear your rendition on the youtube link. Not often we get to hear how the author reads it is his head. Wonderful! Good for you! *Salute*

Thanks for telling it like it is with this strong point of view. *Starstruck* Well said!

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Review of Sol Invictus  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*Balloonp*Ahoy! Welcome to WDC The Don! *Delight*

I could not resist the latin title and theme! It suits the nature genre and you could maybe add mythology to the categories as well as your references to the Sun gods give it that flavour. I found the poem appealing to read. *Thumbsup*

I enjoyed the language that set an atmosphere and the sonnet forms raises the praise for the sun with its high tone. *Thumbsup* The voice is consistent in its appeal to the Sun and the images are vivid. "internal dances" and "vagabond tribes" are evocative. *Cool*

The format has the appropriate rhyme scheme though I see you used a few off rhymes. Some of your interesting vocabulary are hard to rhyme directly. I noticed the line lengths and rhythm were not even and appreciate the challenge it is to create sonnets. *Wink* I liked the couplet with its latin term and old word for day. It fits the notion of an ancient type of blessing.

I noticed you have have a typo with "In" being repeated twice in verse 2. I wondered if a natural punctuation might add to the potency of the read..giving reader pauses to reflect on the the clear images. Also should "fires promise" show possession. eg. Fire's.? *Wink*

Thanks for sharing your vision and craft. This reflects a wonderful tribute to the sun remniscnet of the ancient times. Well done!

*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*BalloonR**ConfettiP*HI Darleen! I am here with a review to celebrate you! *Star*

I thought Houdini was a neat and original topic for a poem and was curious to see what his last trick was as your title indicates.

*Smile*I was delighted with the fanciful seance scene as it was unexpected. I did not read the prompt and it might be good to put it at the bottom or write it smaller as it appears more prominent on the page than your creation. *Smile*

I don't think you need a comma after "crystal ball" as the next part completes the sentence.

The free style with short lines and phrases works well as the drama moves quickly. The use of passive verbs is interesting. eg. "is left", to be called" etc.

In verse 4 is it the face that "appear and reappear"? In that case you need 's' on those words for singular use. I wanted to read a noun after "makes". *Confused*

*Delight* You really captured the essence of a seance and the magic of Houdini.
Thanks for sharing this fun vision.

Light on the path as you write on!!*Star*

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*Balloonp*Ahoy fellow traveller Neva!


*Fairy* Yay! I so enjoyed the Egyptian flavour of this poem right from the title and how you wove in the gods and animals is effective. I laughed at the end.

Your quatrains were well composed with rhyme scheme and the tale was easy to follow. I was struck by a few punctuation spots where I thought periods might serve better:
eg.after "goddess", "food", "kephri" "everywhere" and "Selket" as the lines after them feel like full thoughts on their own.

In the forth verse, I think "there was" needs to be "there were dung beetles".

I liked how you bring the ancient gods into the modern day. *Thumbsup*
The link to the gods is handy for those who may not get the references. *Smile*

Thanks for entering this week's round with your brilliant vision. I had fun imagining the scene. *Star*

*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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*Balloonp*Welcome Shivam_S to WDC! it's WDC's 17th Birthday and time to celebrate so here is a review for you!*Delight*


*Delight*I found your title on the Read A Newbie page and liked the personification of the tree! I love trees so I had to check out its song. *Delight* I really like how you compare the trees and wind to the soul. Beautiful notion.

I was charmed by your vivid imagery and flow in this free style poem. It has a soft tone that mimics the picture you paint. Good use of consonance and assonance (repeated letters} aid the flow and soundscape. I enjoyed reading it aloud. "brushing each leaf with a tender touch" gives the impression of gentleness and the interesting word "susurrus" fits well. I had to go look it up! *Smile* Brilliant for sound element and synonym effects.
The word "beautiful" is rather a weak describer though. *Wink* It could almost end with the word "serene" which describes the moment.

I would try not to use so many "and" words as well. eg. I would let the first three lines have a pause with a period after "souls". Then drop the "and" and begin with "Now". Does "them" refer to souls or the trees?
I would put a comma after "by" and period after "touch". That is a lovely line so let he reader pause and take it in. Then drop the "and" in line 9.
LIne 9: "to see and hear" would be more grammatical than "listen how" (listen to how)
"hear how" also adds to the flow with alliteration. *Wink* Comma after "joy".

Wonderful personification and observation of nature with a reflective tone. Thanks for sharing your vision! *Starstruck* I liked entering into it. Well worth a tweak.

*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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*Balloonp*Ahoy! it's WDC's 17th Birthday and time to celebrate so here is a review for you!*Delight*


*Delight* Wow! This is a brilliant and unique poetry contest in that it encourages team collaboration! It's three tier event schedule is also neat. I have seen similar for Character challege but not for poetry.

The page is sparkly and well organized with an inspiring quote and purposeful use of colour fonts.
The details about teams and rules of the task are detailed and clear. The dates outlined for each section of the contest are clearly stated. It is clear that much thought and planning went into this undertaking. *Thumbsup*

The drop down of the format outline is a wonderful and helpful idea.

The Prizes are generous and the Grand Prize is WOW! *Shock2*

I can't wait to pass the word! Thanks for creating this superb contribution to WDC!*Starstruck*

*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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Review of Rhoswen  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Balloonp*Ahoy! it's WDC's 17th Birthday and time to celebrate so here is a review for you for your Lucky bag!*Delight*


I was lured by the elegant title as I am not familiar with the word. Lucky your tag line clued me in. I like wild roses! Your poem is a fine tribute to this flower.

Your image of this rose, her symbolism and qualities is vibrantly portrayed in this free style poem. It has a romantic and sentimental air which reveals the poems affection and respect for the rose, that also symbolises aspects of the Irish culture. I was captured in the first verse which set that conenction. The soundscape was pleasing to read as well. There is no rhyme but the assonance of the long i sound was potent here. in the second verse.Your use of this and consonance assisted the flow of the whole poem. Personification is nice too, where she gives hope! *Heartp*

The personal attachment is clear in the last line and it was very effective way to end the tribute.
I thought in the last line of verse two, I felt a word missing after "see", maybe.

Thanks for sharing this heart-felt vision of this treasured flower. *Starstruck*

*Star*Light on the path as you write on!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Balloonp*Hi Maryann! Congrats for all your great efforts at GOT! *Salute*


*Balloonp* I enjoyed your unique sci-fi response to the prompt! I would never have thought of this: a robot! Cool.

*Balloonp* The nonet form is well composed in syllable count and the image is clear. I like the positive theme that this boy can inspire a better world. I noticed you repeat word "love" and "peace" (peacefulness) and yet the last words fit the syllables and I don't know a synomym for "peace" to fit. LOL

*Star* Thanks for creating good vibes.

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Review of Naveed's Top Six!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Sun*Hail Naveed!
*Bird*A "Game of Thrones Martell Sunspear Review just for you!*Sun*


*Sun* This collection of your favourite songs of the moment is very interesting and I learned some new songs that I have never heard. Your commentaries on each one as you reveal you personal impressions and experiences they remind you of, are deep and thoughtful. In the first one where you share so vulnerably about your regrets is one we can all relate to. I am sure your gran would want you to drop the guilt, which is a negative vibe and go and enjoy the life now. She would forgive you as the age of wisdom does.

The quote about humanitarianism and religion is wonderful and an ideal to strive for. We are all one.

I like Ed Sheehan and had not heard that song Photograph! Great choice. Your ideas about love are wise and profound too in the Cherry wine entry.

I have so appreciated reading your life philosophy and comments. The writing is personal and blog style with an honest voice with a reflective or informational tone! Thanks for sharing some of your knowledge of music in your commentaries. You have a lot of details and ehgage the reader. *Star*

Thanks for sharing this vision and part of yourself! You rock! *Star*

*Sun*Light on the path as you Write on! *Sun*


For GAME of THRONES. The Martell Sun shines on everyone!

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