Thank you for sharing this, and allowing a review of your writing.
Wow. You have described in great detail the physical aspects of the human heart. You sound as though you have extensive knowledge, possibly medical training?
I saw no grammatical errors.
I wonder, if your knowledge of the human heart goes past the physical, and into the spiritual/emotional functions of the heart. It would make a good compare/contrast, I think. You have given very good advice in your care of and management of heart health.
Thank you for writing this, and keep up the good work. I look forward to seeing more of your work.
This opening hooked me, and drew me in. I can relate to the theme: Struggles, and not seeing what is in front of oneself. I liked the casual dialog between Mel and Joelly. It seemed natural and not forced.
I saw no grammatical errors.
I hope that you do expand this story. I would be interested in reading it. Keep up the good work.
Thank you for sharing this testimony. I understand some of what you have described in your writing. Being married, ministry, struggles; even divorce and bouncing back. Your story brought a smile to my face, and a bit of hope in my heart.
The only grammatical error that I saw was the use of "Their" instead of "There" in your sentence, Their were some kids that stopped by and said hello.
Again, thank you for sharing, and Blessings on you and your family.
Sincerely,
AmyJo
Interesting backdrop using a baseball game.
I could see in my mind the conversation between Dave and Cathy. It felt natural, not forced.
An unexpected twist with the death of Dave's wife, again: natural progression of story.
The last line of story threw me a little. "I guess they all wanted to go to the funeral?" Perhaps Dave was partly talking to himself?
Thank you for sharing your story. Keep up the good work.
Sincerely,
AmyJo
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