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Review of Lord Ekron  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dear BlueJay,

Thank you for sharing this story. I came across it in the Read & Review. I saw that you highlighted the words that were to be used in the story. In the 300 words, you set up the scene, and gave enough backstory to hold one's attention. I liked the twist at the end, Ekron leaving Lexor alive to bear his misery. But as I tend to over think, I thought about a plot twist: Lexor told this to Ekron, in order for his life to be spared. LOL
I found no mechanical or grammar issues with your writing. How long did it take you to come up with the story once you had the prompt?

Keep on Writing. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of Goodbye!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Sum1

Back again! I love this poem. So many ways to say "goodbye". It brings back a song from "Sound of Music" where the children say goodbye in many languages.
Getting your heart broken is a rotten, although all to common occurrence. I felt the sadness in those verses, and the wish to just get on with life and not prolong the wounding. Well done. No typos or grammar issues. This poem has been around a bit, but still rings true. Thank you for sharing.

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AmyJo

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dear Sum1,

Thank you for sharing your story. As I was reading it, I got caught up in it, watching it unfold in my mind's eye. The ending took me by surprise as it turned out to be a dream. I was along for the ride - and what a ride it was.
I have had a teacher wake me up during class. How embarrassing. LOL. And relatable. I saw no mechanical issues or typos in your work.
The ending phrase gave me a chuckle, about it being a "true story". I was perfectly willing to suspend my belief as I read. Great Job! Looking forward to reading more of your work.

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AmyJo

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Review of Yesterday's Angel  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Lou,

It has been a while since you've written this, but it came up in the Read and Review. I used to live in Slidell, LA and am familiar with New Orleans. Your words describe it wonderfully. The crypts you describe, I see in my mind's eye. I see brightly dressed people, in various types of clothing. I can picture a Jazz Procession playing Amazing Grace. I had to laugh at your idea that being buried "above ground" is creepy and you'd rather be thrown into Lake Pontchartrain. You'd rather be food for the alligators and crabs? LOL.
I liked how you centered your work, and it was very easy to read. I saw no mechanical issues with your work. Thank you for sharing. I hope to read more of your work in the future.

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AmyJo

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Sumojo,

Oh heavens! What a twist at the end. I could see Leanne's point of view at "reading people". I felt she did it as much as a lark as having any "real experience". But here comes along someone who takes clairvoyancy seriously and I can see why Leanne is upset. Thank you for sharing the backstory as well. I hadn't really thought that superstition was still alive and well in 2022. Amazing story.
I saw no mechanical issues, and it was easy to read and picture the details in my mind.

Sincerely,
AmyJo
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Cubby,

Are you from Michigan? (I was raised in Atlanta, Michigan) I, too, grew up with the Wreck of the Edmond Fitzgerald by Gordon Lightfoot. I like the bounce between the lines/lyrics and the poetry. It was easy to read. I could picture the scenes in my mind's eye.

I saw no mechanical issues with your work. Well done writing on such an iconic song.

Sincerely,

AmyJo

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Review of Lesson 2  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Charity Marie,

I know it has been a while since you've written this character sketch. I wondered if you did a story using this character. I liked the questions given, and your answers to them. The character seemed to come alive as you answered the questions. You made your character seem real, powers and flaws together.
I saw no mechanical issues, and it was easy to read.
I also saw an introductory scene where your character (accidently?) killed her family. Clearly any additions to the story would make for a riveting read. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Well done! I would love to use these questions to "flesh out" my own characters, if permissible.

Sincerely,

AmyJo

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Review of A Sea of Words  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Adherennium,

I enjoyed reading your poem. The vivid imagery of the sea that you used made the poem come alive. I could clearly picture it in my head.

I had one question regarding the phrase "Biding me to listen to the whispered tales..." Is it "Biding" (to abide) or did you mean to use the word "Bidding" (beckoning)? Other than that, Well done! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

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AmyJo

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Review of Forgive me God!  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Dear jaya,

It has been a little while since you've written this story. I cannot imagine the horror or the guilt that the character Martha feels. I do get why she was driven to her knees is prayer, as I have many times before. The smothering feeling of walls closing in...could drive one insane.
There are many reasons, I guess, for choosing this action; but we are not called to judge, but love.

Thank you for sharing. I could see the scenes clearly in my mind's eye, and saw no mechanical issues or typos. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Keep up the great work.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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for entry "Addiction Socks" 
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dear Ned,

I enjoy the guilty pleasure of crocheting. Making several ornaments for Christmas tree, but have yet to master sock making. Have made slippers, though. This poem resonated with me, and home-made is a lost art to most.
Easy to read, and I saw no mechanical issues. Well done! I also like the idea of one poem a week vs. one a day for a year. Keep up the good work.

I look forward to reading more of your work soon.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of Wrong Planet  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Queen NormaJean,

A very fun story. I laughed out loud reading the last line "But we need to go back, get my feet." At first I thought it would be a daydream from workers who hated their jobs, but they actually went there. Too hysterical.
It was very easy to read, the only question, should the last line have read "to" get my feet"?
Other than that, cool beans *Smile*

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AmyJo

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Yana-Bundy,

An intriguing opening for a book. It caught my attention, and I've read it over a couple of times. You have some interesting characters in your story. I can picture the shack in my mind's eye. I also like the descriptions of Lucas' friends.
Two things caught my eye. Opening line: "Now instead of calling me lucky they say their sorry." I believe you want the word "they're" as in they are. Second to last paragraph: "Miss Mary has a young girl that says with her." Perhaps it should be "stays"?
Other than that, the flow is good. I hope to read more of your story in the future. Keep writing!

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of Time  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Kris,

An interesting read. I can somewhat understand the plight of your poem. Change is the only constant in the world, and you write that out beautifully. I also get your longing for things to stay the same, as I am not a fan of change either. But, we either evolve (or change) or we die (so it seems).
Thank you for writing and sharing your thoughts. I saw no typos or grammar issues. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Keep up the good work *Smile*

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Charley,

Wow! What a take on reacting to a review. I get it though, and completely understand where you are coming from. When I first started writing, I was so afraid it wasn't good enough, and come to find out, it really wasn't all that great. LOL.
I like your list. It is encouraging to know that no one is alone in their thoughts when it comes to critique. I saw no mechanical issues with your writing.
Thank you for sharing, and I hope to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of Story Hopping  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dear LeJenD,

Wow! What a ride! You were not kidding when you said, jumping from story to story and on and on. Took me a second, but then I started having fun with all of the references. I know it's been a bit since you wrote this, but I am glad I found it in the Read/Review section.
It was easy to read and the flow was smooth. I saw no mechanical errors. I wonder if it just popped into your head, or if you had to work at it to put "on paper"?

Well done...I hope to read more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dear Arakun,
Just found this, and it seems an awesome writing contest. How long have you had it? What prompted you to make this contest? The raccoon in the books picture is too cute. The rules are spelled out clearly, and the time to write the short story seems very quick, but I guess that's part of the fun. I will be checking it out in the future, I am very sure. Saw no mechanical errors. Well done!

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of Prompt Response  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Elisa,
A very good question. It does provoke a thought or two. I like prompts, especially when I am feeling "stuck" about what to write, and it gives me at least a direction in which to go (or not go, if feeling feisty). You provided several good choices in your poll. Will you use this as a platform to offer prompts in the future?
I saw no typos or grammar issues.
Nicely done!
Will look for more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Dear Morvy,

An interesting story beginning. Very descriptive wording. I could see it in my mind's eye as I read it.
A couple of things, perhaps:
The subject of the story: Shrinkig Big Brother - spelling
"You get angry and say take me back to normal but she pampers you and says you can't go anymore." - perhaps "Take me back to normal," but he (not she) as referring to brothers.

Other than that, well done! I hope you continue this story. I would be interested in reading it. Keep on writing *Smile*

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of Blogging  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear NormaJean,

I enjoyed reading your Blog entry. I am fairly new here, and I have a blog to start for the Birthday Bash for WDC. I like how you make it sound easy, and I am looking forward to learn how to Blog as well. Thank you for sharing some tips and the encouragement. I saw no grammar issues or typos. Well done.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of An Old Red Barn  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Beholden,

The picture is enhanced greatly by your words. Very descriptive, and I felt my heartstrings tug at the sadness of the barn being for sale. Oh what stories it could tell.
I enjoyed reading your work, and the flow was smooth and no typos or grammar issues at all.
Nicely done. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of a seldom treat  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dear Rhyssa,

My heartfelt condolences on having high sugars. I felt that angst, as I love Bavarian Cream donuts as well. My diabetes forbids such a heavenly delight, but there you have it. "Wanting it indeed" rings true to me. The flow of your poem was smooth, and I saw no typos or grammatical errors. Well done. I look forward to reading more of your work again soon.

Sincerely,
AmyJo


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Review of Birds on a wire  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Chris,

Interesting poem. The format is new to me, and was wondering if there is a place here where can learn the different styles of poetry. Simple, yet I can see all of the birds sitting on the telephone wires...cawing and taking up a lot of space until they all take off at the same time.
Keep on writing. Well done.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Such a sweet picture. Wondering what song you are dancing to? This photo makes me smile. How long have you been married? Congratulations *Butterfly2B* *BalloonP* *FlowerY* by the way. Also, happy WDC anniversary! *PenP* Keep up the great work!

Sincerely,
AmyJo
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Review of Symbols  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear HuntersMoon,

Thank you for writing and sharing your work. As a former spouse to a military person, I am familiar with these stars when seen in windows and doorways. I can see the verses clearly in my mind's eye, and feel the tugging of my heartstrings. The flow was smooth and this was easy to read. I saw no typos or grammar issues.

Keep up the good work.

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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Review of Daddy's Home  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Jenni,

Oh, I hope this is just a writing exercise, and not a memory! I am so lucky that I have a Daddy that I can run into his arms, even at my age.
You are correct in your writing. A Daddy is there to guide and protect his daughter, not make her fearful. The second to the last sentence "...I've wanted to the person not coming home." Should it be "I've wanted to be the person not coming home."?
Well written, and a sad piece.

Keep writing!

Sincerely,
AmyJo

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