Thank you for this cute little poem. I can see the reason Phil was late for work, although must have been a doozy of a sleeping pill. It brought a smile to my face.
I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. Keep up the great job. I saw no typos or grammar issues.
Thank you for sharing your writing. I never thought much about comparing Santa and Jesus. It is done in a clever way. The dialog is smooth, and makes sense. I saw no typos in the body of your writing, but wondered at the extra "s" in the title.
Other than that, well done! I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Thank you for sharing your work. It has a very creepy vibe, and I could picture it clearly in my mind's eye. The fog, the raven, all of the foreboding gave me goosebumps. I enjoyed reading it, even though it is a little scary.
I saw no typos or grammatical errors. Well done. I look forward to reading more of your work.
I can feel the angst of not "knowing" who you are. You put a lot of emotion into just a few lines. I hope that it is just a passing feeling, and that through writing you will come to understand yourself a little bit better. Thank you for sharing your feelings. Keep writing, and I hope to read more from you soon.
Keep up the good work!
Oh goodness! This letter spoke to me in volumes...I am still processing it. What I am getting at first is realizing emptiness of self is the catalyst to being able to be filled with God's Spirit and bringing forth spiritual life.
I have three children of my own, so I can identify with some of the feelings. The wonder, the joy, the fear...all of it.
I have not read anything quite like this and I am grateful to have found this letter you've written.
Thank you for sharing. As a fellow crafter, I understand the frustration and sadness when breaking something like knitting needles. I also find that I often lose my crochet hooks when not in use
The last verse gave me a chuckle, for I don't believe anything is shatterproof. I look forward to reading more of your work.
I liked the flow of your poem, and saw no typos or grammar issues. Keep up the good work!
I am glad you are here, and writing. I understand where you are coming from, and am glad that you are able to accept that you need help. I still struggle with that. Blessings to you, and keep writing. You are an encouragement.
A very good reminder about angels. I like the way that you compared/contrasted the good angels and the not good angels. I felt encouraged reading this, and appreciate your sharing your work.
I saw no typos or grammatical errors. Well done. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Wow! You were not kidding. I really enjoyed reading this poem. It is indeed a poem of dark love. Very Vampire-y. The flow is smooth, and each word riveting. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep on writing. I am glad you have shared this.
Dear Snow,
Thank you for your encouraging words in this poem. It is easy to forget that God loves us when life seems to just not go the way we want. This is a great reminder of God's love for us. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep on writing
I saw no typos or grammatical errors. Well done
Cute little poem! As a gardener, I totally get and agree with this poem. I'm not sure what style this poem is. Is it a Haiku? Keep up the great job, and I have enjoyed your work thus far. Cannot wait to see what your next project is.
Sincerely,
AmyJo
Dear Princess Megan Rose,
A sweet tribute to the rock star. Cute bear, too . I did not grow up listening to Prince, but was sad to hear when he died.
Thank you for sharing part of your heart. It was also sweet of your husband to get you that bear.
Keep up the good work, and blessings on you and yours.
Thank you for sharing the cacophony of sounds in your poem. I could hear each and every sound as you described them. I couldn't help but chuckle with the idea of peace and quiet being a brass band. Too funny!
I saw no typos or grammatical errors. A fun read!
Keep up the good work. I hope to read more from you soon.
Dear Green,
Thank you for sharing such a wonderful view of retirement. I remember my Dad when he said that retirement would kill him. But on the contrary, he has become a wonderful cook, wood-worker, and learning new things all the time, such as smoking meats and cheeses. He doesn't write, which is a shame, as he has so many stories and memories to share.
I saw no typos or grammatical errors. It flows smoothly, and paints a vivid picture.
Keep up the great work, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Oh wow! The bitterness and pain come through, and I felt it in my bones. What a horrible scene you've painted, and so viscerally. This is as close as I'd want to come to an incident like that. You see it from the victim's point of view so often on TV, but this gut-wrenching view is rarely, if ever, shown.
I am enjoying your writing, and look forward to reading more. Keep up the great work.
Dear Ned's Dog Days,
I enjoyed reading your story/poem. It is a good reminder that the grass isn't always greener on the other side. I liked the phrasing of "gingham girl" and "red carpet dreams".
The verses flowed smoothly. I saw no typos. Thank you for writing this and sharing. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more of your work.
You paint a vivid picture. I could feel my heart racing as your character tries to save the car victim. I had to bust out laughing when I read the phrase, "Did, I lose my phone?" Still shaking my head at that.
I am not sure what the comma is for in that phrase, perhaps I need to slow down and read it, or perhaps a typo?
But it is very cool scene. Is it a stand-alone or will you expand it? I would be very interested in reading more.
Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
AmyJo
A very interesting group. I would like to join, as I do like reading/reviewing. I find that it inspires me; and I like to encourage others. Here are some points towards helping others
Sincerely,
AmyJo
Thank you for sharing your work. I feel the surprise of the one finding love where it was not expected. The poem flowed smoothly, and the ending "cause forever ain't long enough" was a perfect way to end the poem. May be silly, but it brings to mind the Twilight story of Edward and Bella. LOL. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more from you.
Thank you for sharing! The idea of calling Jesus isn't new, but this gave me goosebumps when the voice said Hello in your story.
I also enjoyed the ending. He may well remember that call. I am confident that anytime we call on Jesus, that he hears us. Even if his answer is "No" or "Wait".
Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Interesting. Something to think about for sure. And learning something new in poetry format as well as Hinduism.
Thank you for sharing your work, and allowing others to read it. I saw no grammatical errors. I like your positivity and encouraging message in your poem.
I like the imagery of the Curtain being pulled. It rang true to me, especially since I came as close to my own curtain being pulled this past month.
I sense the hope, and also the questions of what happens "after".
I saw no grammatical errors. I enjoyed reading this, and look forward to reading more of your work. Keep up the good job
Interesting poem. Love the picture, as it brought a smile to my face. After today, needed to chuckle. Never thought about a camel laughing before. Children, that is a given. The laughter is enough to fill a desert. I believe there needs to be more childlike (and camel-like?) laughter in the world. Simplicity and wonder.
Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
I am glad that I found your writings here. I, too, understand some of the struggles of life and change that you mention.
Thank you for sharing your heart, and I pray that you and yours find blessings and comfort during your times of wandering and ship-righting.
Please continue to share and know that you are appreciated.
Sincerely,
AmyJo
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