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Review of The Temple  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the way this is done, it kind of reminds me of the Read Your Own Adventure books. I really cannot see any obvious errors in this chapter. You've even managed to get the paragraph spacing right. To my shame I haven't managed to do that with my uploads. Are there Chinese/Japanese influences in this. It seems like it. This flows rather well and draws the reader in.
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Review of Help Us Help YOU!  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This article has some rather good ideas and excellent points on how to raise awareness of this excellent site for writers. I am a member of a few other sites. But this one is better as right away you can post work for others to review and rate! BUT there is one factor I didn't see. Perhaps WDC could get more members by offering to be a sponsor for NaNoWriMo perhaps?

Just a suggestion to help this article better!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for posting this for me to read. I tried to read what I could and came up with a few things that might need some attention.

First of all most of the paragraphs are bunched together in one huge mass. I'm not sure is this is an accident due to the WDC document editor, but all the paragraphs grouped together is making it rather difficult for reading. Spacing out the paragraphs will make the chapters flow more smoothly and will be easier to read, meaning lees strain on the eyes of the reader.

I did spot a few errors:

'on teh next block' - it should be 'the'.

'where ever' should be one complete word.

'grans house' - should be 'gran's house' I saw quite a few of these in the latter paragraphs.

There were a few more I could see. Once the document is spaced out more, I return and have another go at reading this.

Well done on you for typing all this! I have problems getting more than 3800 words on a page sometimes!
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