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I look for a good hook at the beginning and like stories that "hit the ground running". Good plots with a theme, strong characters with an emotional impact, moving dialogue, sensory descriptions, clear communication and words with a purpose are strong points of a good story.
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knowing a good story when I read one. I like to read as much as I like to write, maybe more. I will let you know when a sentence just does not make sense to me, and I will try to give you my opinion on how to make it better.
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biographical, family, drama, mystery, comedy, nature, young adult
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sci-fi, erotica, fantasy, mythology
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short stories, essays, fiction & non-fiction
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Review of Vicissitudes  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Reading*Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Willow.....*Star*

What I liked: Your story was imaginative. Your plot suggested how strange things can happen without explanation.

What I disliked: I was not exactly sure how the first sentence tied in with the rest of the story.

Flow of story & impact of characters: The story flowed well and your protagonist was well described.

Attention grabbers: The winning of the lottery and the unusual occurences after were my attention grabbers.

Suggestions for improvement: After periods to sentences, you should hit the space bar twice for proper spacing. The word "vicissitude" should probably have an "s" to be plural since you have several strange occurances.

My overall take: An enjoyable, interesting story, especially for an assignment.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I personally know what you are talking about in this poem. My husband had ulcerative colitis and had his colon removed 2 years ago last March.

The fact that you can write a poem about it speaks volumes about you. Although I'm sure you have ups and down, a positive attitude helps in many ways....like the old saying "you can always find someone worse off", like anybody would want to do that.

I love the style of poetry you did this poem in although I'm now knowledgeable enough to know what it is. It clearly gets the message across......keep writing......willow
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Review of Pop's Eulogy  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This was a beautiful, heartfelt tribute to a dear friend.
The way you told the story of his passing made me feel as though I was there, actually wanted to be there.
You expressed the feelings of those in the room and the ambience of the moment with perfection.
Your virtual rebirth in the last paragraph balanced the pain of death.
A great job of writing a piece of non-fiction so close to the heart......write on.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*Reading*Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Willow.....*Star*

What I liked: My favorite line was "Duct tape and I love you will fix anything."

What I disliked: Nothing

Flow of story & impact of characters: The story flowed well and the characters were believable.

Attention grabbers: When the zipper broke.

Suggestions for improvement: I saw no problems except for the line "We got to be to the church by ten.” I would have said "We have to be at the church by ten."


My overall take: A cute, well-told story written within a short amount of time....write-on....willow

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Review of Blue Roses  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Jewel,

This appears to be a short story but reads more like freeform poetry. It was very well-written and flowed beautifully, painting pictures for me all the way through. I also liked the rhyming poems inserted throughout.

A very interesting read, although out of my normal genre.....thanks for sharing.

Willow

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Review of You and Me  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Judy,

The metaphor of 'us' being two bears, of course, painted my first picture, but as your poem progressed, the questions you presented spoke your deeper meaning mainly, I believe, the interference of others. I especially liked the comparison of 'us' to bears in and out of the caves called life.

There was some rhyming but it looks to be a freeform poem.

A very enjoyable read.....thanks for sharing........willow

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Reading*Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Willow.....*Star*

What I liked: The "verbal" interaction between you as Rusty and Mommie.

What I disliked: I got a little bogged down in the first part of the story....maybe a few too many facts. The actual part of the story with you pretending to be the dog was more interesting to me. I must be reverting back to my childhood.

Flow of story & impact of characters: The story was well-told and had good flow.

Attention grabbers: You becoming Rusty.

Suggestions for improvement: More of you as Rusty.

My overall take: A cute story of a pleasant childhood memory......keep writing.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Willow.....

What I liked: I really like the way you told this story....in a letter and a diary.

What I disliked: Nothing.

Flow of story & impact of characters: The story flowed very well and the characters were well described.

Attention grabbers: The rainy willow thunder and lightening graveyard scene.

Suggestions for improvement: I only noticed a couple of spelling errors...no for know under Oct. 26 and nauseous under Oct 29.

My overall take: A very intriguing and well told story with a flavor of Poe and Bronte....all in all a great read...is there going to be more?....write on.....willow
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I would give you a 10 rating if I could....you said it so well.

Did everyone go through this or is it just you and me? LOL

Keep writing....you are great!.....willow
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This was such a beautiful and sad story.....perhaps the story of many. I was able to see Alice through your descriptions and Alice's verbalization. The story had good flow and addressed an important problem of society. Obviously, Alice's faith kept her safe......willow
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Willow.....

What I liked: I liked the way Molly went on with her education for the sake of her daughter even in the face of tragedy.

What I disliked: Nothing

Flow of story & impact of characters: The story flowed well. The characterization of Molly could have been more descriptive.

Attention grabbers: The father's death.

Suggestions for improvement: More details as far as the characters are concerned would help round out the story and make in more interesting instead of being told as a narrative.

My overall take: The beginning of a good story....I'll bet if you took another look you could find a lot more to say....keep writing......willow
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Review of The Boy  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Willow.....

What I liked: I liked the way Torim tried to ignore the way Mum and Stephen ignored him yet one knew he was boiling inside.

What I disliked: Nothing.

Flow of story & impact of characters: The flow of the story held my interest all through and the character descriptions were subtle but clear.

Attention grabbers: The way Torim ate without letting Mum and Stephen know he was there.

Suggestions for improvement: The story could enlarge on Torim's disregard for his brothers and Stephen for more interest.

My overall take: A young boy's painful childhood tastefully told without the cliche recriminations....write on.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review of Lie  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Willow.....

What I liked: I very much liked the entire story.

What I disliked: The ending was a little of a letdown but it did continue the theme of the story.

Flow of story & impact of characters: The story kept my interest. The characters could have been more developed, especially the antagonist.

Attention grabbers: The notes.

Suggestions for improvement: Just to develop the antagonist more.

My overall take: A very good story....keep writing.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review of Perception  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a very interesting look into a person's point of view. I would like to know more of the particulars of the story.....what kind of accident, was the person in the hospital, how old, why so far away from home?

The flow of what you told went well.

Grammar, spelling and punctuation seemed correct except for a couple of "weres" that needed to be "was".

Except for answering the above questions which would further the plot, overall I like the story. Do keep writing.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review of Lovely Dementia  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
A nice, biographical account of Claudette and her lovely dementia, well-told by a granddaughter, I presume.

The following sentence... In the fickle years of my youth, I paraded many a suitor past my her. ....needs a little clarification to make sense. Also, I believe the word 'of' is left out of this sentence...Claudette was a woman of many passions with a great sense adventure. Teenage needs an 'r' in the following...The female had died by the time I was a teenage but . It looks like a word needs removing from this....Sharing a meal with my her in the community . The word 'like' needs a d added in this....Everyone knew that my great grandmother like to keep the Pope all to herself.

The story flowed well and the asides about the wishes, the puzzles and the brownies added interest.

Overall, a nice memorial to a great grandmother.....keep writing.
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Review of Fragility  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I thought you told the story well.....the flow was good and I noticed no grammar, spelling, etc., errors.

I did think the plot as well as the two characters could have been a little more developed. I would like to have known the actual cause of the friction between Olivia and her dad and what happened to her mom.

Overall, a good story, but not enough shown. Please keep writing.....
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Review of Cinnamon Bun  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A well-told story with good flow.....not too sure though if the main protagonist was Ashley.

I noticed no grammar, spelling, or punctuation errors and paragraphing looked accurate.

The best part, of course, was the ending. Well done and keep writing.
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Review of Being Connected  
Rated: E | (3.5)
An informative story that should be read by many. i liked the flow and the honesty.

I saw no punctuation or spelling errors; however, you could break it up into several paragraphs as there are many new trains of thought.

You could also develop your first person character more, and it would make the story more interesting and not just a factual account.

I think you are on the right track.....keep writing.
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Review of Leaving Linda  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Serves her right! I'm with you.

This was a cute story. As you can see, I identified with your protagonist. The flow of the story was good and I noticed no spelling, etc., errors (slang seemed appropriate).

I wouldn't change a thing except to be a little harder on 'take me for granted' Linda.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is too cute. You have a great imagination and must be a nature lover. I wouldn't change a thing in this poem except maybe drop that last comma and tell me more. I especially liked your first and fourth stanzas. Thanks for sharing......write on.
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